[claimed]Burning Desire: The Johnny Blaze Story

[claimed]Burning Desire: The Johnny Blaze Story

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11 Dec 2010, 06:10 #1

Burning Desire: The Johnny Blaze Story

Amsterdam Haze CB Johnny Blaze has come a long way to get where he is now. He’s had his ups and he’s had his downs, but in the end, he’s been a success. Johnny is one of the VFL’s many rising stars, and is quickly making a name for himself in the football world. I wonder, what’s his story?

Quick Info

Name: Johnny “Just” Blaze
Height: 6’3”
Weight: 215 lbs
College: Miami
Skin Color: Staggeringly Dark

Part One: My Youth

Hello, my name is Johnny Blaze. I’m a professional football player. Sure, you may have never heard of me, but that ends now! I’m quickly becoming known as the best CB in the VFL, and I promise to give receivers hell all season. A lot of people wonder, though, as to how I got here. Well, it all started on June 6th, 1991. I came bursting out of my mother’s womb and into the world. I’m not sure if the world was ready for me yet, but hey, I don’t give a fuck.
Growing up, I was an only child. I didn’t have anyone else to play with, so I’d always go down to the park and play some football with the older kids in my neighborhood. Every day after school, we’d play until the sun went down. It was a fun way to pass the time. As I grew into my stunningly athletic frame, I knew all I wanted to do was play football. I played in Pop Warner, went to all the clinics, and did everything I had to in order to make sure I was the best player I could be.

Once high school came along, I couldn’t get on the football field fast enough. On my first day of high school, they told all freshmen interested in joining the team to meet in the gym. I anxiously waited for it all day, and when the time finally came, I flourished in the spotlight. I was one of the fastest kids who worked out, and I had a natural ability to find the ball. Due to the fact we had two seniors at CB already, I was designated to the JV team my freshman year. I had three interceptions that season, which would be my last at the JV level.

Once I was a sophomore, the coaches assured me that I would be a starting CB for the varsity team. From the first day of summer training camp sophomore year until our final game my senior year, I was engulfed in high school football. Everything I did was for football. I watched film all the time, and I was always in the gym. My high school experience was a good one, the team reached the playoffs my senior year, and I had an interception in the divisional final, a game we lost on a last second field goal. Although we fell short of our ultimate goal, I did achieve a personal goal. I was given three varsity letters, and I was also named a high school All- American. I couldn’t have been more pleased. The University of Miami (FL) offered me a full scholarship to play football. How could I say no?

Part Two: College

It’s all about “The U”!

I arrived in beautiful Miami, Florida, and I was ready to take over the world. I knew that everything I had been working my whole life for was there for the taking. I’ve always wondered why the NFL doesn’t let you join the draft right out of high school. Looking back, it’s probably for the best. As we know, the NFL eventually went into a work stoppage, which is part of the reason why we’re all here. Swallowing my pride, I went to college and again focused my life on football. I never went to class. I was either at the gym or getting fucked up somewhere. Although my college experience was limited to only one season, I still feel like I had the time of my life there. Every day there was a new girl waiting outside of the team facility. These girls had everything I wanted: vaginas and blunts. Miami was a party all day every day, but in the end, I still had to produce on the field. Produce I did, I led the ACC in interceptions with five, and was considered a top draft prospect. The VFL was formed, and I decided to declare for the draft.

Part Three: VFL

Amsterdam’s the place to be this season.

After declaring myself eligible for the VFL draft, my agent was barely contacted. While this was disappointing, it also gave me time to reflect upon myself. Finally, in the tenth round, I was selected by the Amsterdam Haze. I’m proud to say I’m one of the leaders on the defense, and I continue to hope to be the best player I can be. Our season is about to get underway, and I can’t wait. I want to show everyone that they made a mistake each time they passed on Johnny Blaze!


-Speed Let me say this much, I’m one fast motherfucker. I’m the kind of guy who likes to toot my own horn, and believe me, I’m impressed. I’m one of the fastest guys on the team, and that’s important if I’m going to be stopping the league’s best receivers. I have the ability to play a little looser than most guys, because I have the raw speed to make up for the gaps. I also believe I could be an asset on special teams, if needed.

-Awareness I pride myself on being aware of every situation that comes my way. I’ve read a lot of books about football, and I’ve heard a lot of schemes in my day. I love that with every formation the offense gives us, I already have some idea of how to stop it. I’ve seen them all before. Sometimes, I swear, I know where the ball’s going to be before the QB does. It’s a pretty amazing feeling, to say the least.

-Experience I’ve been to a rodeo once or twice before. I’m not shy about it. I’m a very open guy who’s done a lot of things. I’ve played in a lot of football games; I’ve been around it my entire life. The first thing my father put in my hands was a football. I was born to play this game, and play it better than anyone else ever has.


-AccelerationAlthough I’m one of the fastest guys on the team, I do have a problem getting to my peak speed quickly. While it’s an easy problem to fix, I’m still a little bit worried about it. For the first couple of weeks, until I work my kinks out, is when I feel I’ll be most vulnerable. The good part is that the other guys will be in the same boat as me. We’ve all taken some time off from the game. It’ll take a bit to get back in shape.

-Personality Is it possible that I’m too outgoing? Some front office members might believe so. The league has already reprimanded me for intoxicated rants left in the team locker room, as well as many outlandish statements posted in the league discussion areas. People think I’m absolutely insane, but that’s okay. I go out on the field and I perform. I leave the off the field stuff off of the field. It’s that easy.

-Drug UseEventually, they might write it in the CBA that we have to be drug tested. Boy, I hope this day doesn’t come anytime soon. I mean, the only drug I do is legal where my team plays. What happens, though, when I’m in Barcelona trying to light up some Amsterdam high grade marijuana? Am I going to go to jail? Who knows! I guess it’s all part of the thrill. Maybe I’ll just quit pot. Nah, that’d be too easy.

Editor’s Note: Johnny Blaze and the Amsterdam Haze kick off the preseason in just a few days. Be sure to follow Johnny and the entire league this season, for what promises to be a good time.
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11 Dec 2010, 06:18 #2

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11 Dec 2010, 08:42 #3

Overview 3/3

you got your guy's life story in here, saying what hes good at and why.

Grammar 2/2

2 minor spacing errors but nothing else- even these are debatable since they are headings going into text

AccelerationAlthough - Acceleration Although
Drug UseEventually - Drug Use Eventually

Presentation 1/1


Pros 2/2

Pros were good length and had good info.

Cons 2/2

see pros

Overall 10/10

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Barcelona eats, sleeps, have sex and are winning games without ever wanting to take it easy – even though they reached satisfaction. Barcelona is the world’s most beautiful woman. Who also has got sense in the head. ...Which isn’t a too often combination. - Henrik Rydström

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Joined: 10 Nov 2010, 02:39

14 Dec 2010, 18:22 #4

Content - 3/3
I like autobiographies, good writing here. The entire time, I just kept thinking if an actual NFL player wrote an autobio with the sentence "I’m not sure if the world was ready for me yet, but hey, I don’t give a fuck." I'd read that in a second.

Grammar - 2/2
Yeah, other than the two spacing issues that Keller already mentioned, very good here. Didn't even notice a misplaced comma. Solid.

Presentation - 1/1

Pros - 2/2
Three but had good length and info, I'm fine with it.

Cons - 2/2
See pros.

Total - 10/10

Average - 10/10
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<OPTION>Name: Zach Warren
<OPTION>Position: Cornerback
<OPTION>Number: 38
<OPTION>College: Northwestern
<OPTION>VFL Career Statistics
<OPTION>Season 1: 18 tackles, 3 TFL, 2 sacks
<OPTION>VFL Playoff Statistics
<OPTION>Drafted 10th overall in inaugural VFL Draft by Boston Rebels (11/28/10)
<OPTION>Named Boston Rebels General Manager, Season 1 Week 3 (12/20/10)
<OPTION>Switched from OLB to CB, Season 1 Week 5 (12/27/10)
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15 Dec 2010, 01:40 #5

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