When The Heaven Rages

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When The Heaven Rages

Joined: 07 Jan 2009, 17:25

12 Jan 2016, 15:59 #1

Something brews in his heart.A poet is disturbed. He has to sort it out it out.
Our Gods were also human onceperhaps it brought them nearer to us.
When a woman is wrongedwhenever a woman is wrongedit brews.
The Gods are also bewildered.they do not know where the humane startsand where the godliness stops.
The very great appear smallthe small greatthe mediocre majestic.
All women stay together.their common theme is individuality.when the earth opens for the daughter-in-lawthe mother in law also loses her breath.
Such is the power of this reawakening.
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piphany
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Joined: 13 Jun 2009, 23:40

13 Jan 2016, 05:48 #2

There's a lot in here as the poem intermingles a human poet's efforts with epic, mythological or religious events. It sounds as if naturew and spirit support and defend the poet.
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Joined: 07 Jan 2009, 17:25

13 Jan 2016, 08:38 #3

Is this a list poem?
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piphany
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Joined: 13 Jun 2009, 23:40

13 Jan 2016, 19:48 #4

I saw it as a list of concepts that a poet has to sort through. I do, however, have a very liberal idea of what a list poem is.
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emurer
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Joined: 01 May 2010, 18:37

17 Jan 2016, 13:51 #5

It has kind of a ghazal feel to it.
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Greta B
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Joined: 02 Apr 2008, 14:17

18 Jan 2016, 17:30 #6

Love these lines:

All women stay together.
their common theme is individuality.
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Osel
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Joined: 20 Jun 2007, 07:33

01 Dec 2017, 19:04 #7

this is a very good poem, with a lot of insight, and it reads like a charm. Don’t know if it consitutes a “list poem”, but my feeling is, these cincepts (of forms and scaffolds) are made for us, we were not made for them. As long as a poem holds its own, in the end, the form, if any, was well employed. I would fix the spacing and any punctuation, or make it consistent, so it doesn’t look like it might have been posted on the fly, and submit this somewhere! 


The very great appear smallthe small greatthe mediocre majestic.   . true, true. 
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