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Ken Ashworth
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Joined: September 3rd, 2017, 10:05 am

December 5th, 2017, 5:37 pm #1

Against the advice of my cardiologist,
(alcohol and blood thinners don't mix)
I set out for the Alamo bar, order Tequila.

One shot turns into many, and soon
Santa Anna and his army ride
through my head, me being out
of shape having given up
drinking for twenty eight years.

My friends in AA would demand
I pick up another white chip,
hang my head, confess my crime,
and get a new sponsor.

But the dark-eyed woman
in the corner with an outlaw smile,
who matched me shot-for-shot,
whispered "viva Tejas", does not

give a damn I'm 64 with a bad back,
etectile dysfunction, wake up
every three hours having to piss.

Tonight, I'm Poncho Villa
or Zapatta come down
from the hills to plunder
her breasts, kiss her hair,
take her home on
the back of my horse.
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Greta B
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Joined: April 2nd, 2008, 10:17 am

December 5th, 2017, 7:45 pm #2

Ken Ashworth wrote: Against the advice of my cardiologist,
(alcohol and blood thinners don't mix)
I set out for the Alamo bar, order Tequila.

One shot turns into many, and soon
Santa Anna and his army ride
through my head, me being out
of shape having given up
drinking for twenty eight years.

My friends in AA would demand
I pick up another white chip,
hang my head, confess my crime,
and get a new sponsor.

But the dark-eyed woman
in the corner with an outlaw smile,
who matched me shot-for-shot,
whispered "viva Tejas", does not

give a damn I'm 64 with a bad back,
etectile dysfunction, wake up
every three hours having to piss.

Tonight, I'm Poncho Villa
or Zapatta come down
from the hills to plunder
her breasts, kiss her hair,
take her home on
the back of my horse.
I love this entirely. I would like to be that woman.
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Ken Ashworth
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December 5th, 2017, 9:57 pm #3

Greta B wrote:
Ken Ashworth wrote: Against the advice of my cardiologist,
(alcohol and blood thinners don't mix)
I set out for the Alamo bar, order Tequila.

One shot turns into many, and soon
Santa Anna and his army ride
through my head, me being out
of shape having given up
drinking for twenty eight years.

My friends in AA would demand
I pick up another white chip,
hang my head, confess my crime,
and get a new sponsor.

But the dark-eyed woman
in the corner with an outlaw smile,
who matched me shot-for-shot,
whispered "viva Tejas", does not

give a damn I'm 64 with a bad back,
etectile dysfunction, wake up
every three hours having to piss.

Tonight, I'm Poncho Villa
or Zapatta come down
from the hills to plunder
her breasts, kiss her hair,
take her home on
the back of my horse.
I love this entirely. I would like to be that
woman

I find that difficult to believe
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rosered17
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Joined: November 6th, 2007, 11:17 am

December 6th, 2017, 1:25 am #4

Nice one, Ken!  Stanzas 3-6 could stand on their own with S.1-2 assumed by the reader.  You could also perhaps use L. 1 or 2 as the title.
Love it as is, too.
In our dreams, Greta and I would both love to be that woman.  (Her husband and my boyfriend would not like it much, though. Old  men are like that.)  It sounds wild and romantic.  And that's what makes the poem so appealing.
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TerryO
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December 6th, 2017, 4:22 am #5

Love this: "viva Tejas." Could be a title, but it would give away too much at first. I think erectile might be misspelled. Good one. You doing a 7?
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Ken Ashworth
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December 6th, 2017, 7:20 am #6

rosered17 wrote: Nice one, Ken!  Stanzas 3-6 could stand on their own with S.1-2 assumed by the reader.  You could also perhaps use L. 1 or 2 as the title.
Love it as is, too.
In our dreams, Greta and I would both love to be that woman.  (Her husband and my boyfriend would not like it much, though. Old  men are like that.)  It sounds wild and romantic.  And that's what makes the poem so appealing.
Ah. OK that makes sense.
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Ken Ashworth
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December 6th, 2017, 7:21 am #7

TerryO wrote: Love this: "viva Tejas." Could be a title, but it would give away too much at first. I think erectile might be misspelled. Good one. You doing a 7?
I may try. Little void of material lol.
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Slowlearner
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December 6th, 2017, 8:10 am #8

Hi Ken,

Sounds like a using dream to me. Of course, the woman matching you shot-for-shot would be just as much a mess as the narrator. As a sort of euphoric recall, it captures that sensation well. The very irrationality of it matches how those things usually go. Good job.

John
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December 6th, 2017, 9:49 am #9

Ken Ashworth wrote:
Greta B wrote:
Ken Ashworth wrote: Against the advice of my cardiologist,
(alcohol and blood thinners don't mix)
I set out for the Alamo bar, order Tequila.

One shot turns into many, and soon
Santa Anna and his army ride
through my head, me being out
of shape having given up
drinking for twenty eight years.

My friends in AA would demand
I pick up another white chip,
hang my head, confess my crime,
and get a new sponsor.

But the dark-eyed woman
in the corner with an outlaw smile,
who matched me shot-for-shot,
whispered "viva Tejas", does not

give a damn I'm 64 with a bad back,
etectile dysfunction, wake up
every three hours having to piss.

Tonight, I'm Poncho Villa
or Zapatta come down
from the hills to plunder
her breasts, kiss her hair,
take her home on
the back of my horse.
I love this entirely. I would like to be that
woman

I find that difficult to believe
Well, it sounds like a great adventure ... for a me of 30 years ago.
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TerryO
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December 6th, 2017, 11:01 am #10

Yes. I think many of us on The Waters wish we were about 30 years younger. 
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