Heart Like a Wheel

Hadley R.
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May 16th, 2018, 12:21 pm #1

Heart Like a Wheel
 
 
Cha-Cha was a local oddity
before she became a legend.
 
She wore jeans so tight
the older boys called her slut;
but still they tried
to get a look. She knew
more than they did
about cars.
 
The man next door called her lesbian,
which meant nothing to me
but sounded exotic.
I learned what it meant
the day my best friend's mother

was caught in bed
with another woman.
He fought himself bloody
when the word got out.
Although I didn't defend her,
I lent him my T-shirt

to wipe blood from his eyes
and felt my heart race
like never before.

 
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Ken Ashworth
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May 18th, 2018, 1:53 am #2

What I think works is the rear-view voice of the poem

Today the narrator would defend her.

There is a lot here. I am confused by the title because it was the name of a movie.

Strong close. The t shirt is very real
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russkigypsy
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May 20th, 2018, 7:01 pm #3

I really like the lively tone & pace & content. Succinctly told. The previous comment made me look up the meaning in the title & the way I read it is about 'stereotype'. Is it? If it is then maybe the reference in the title might be more obvious.
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Hadley R.
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May 21st, 2018, 4:30 pm #4

thanks to you both for your comments. this poem was much longer at one time. I have been very uncertain about the title. I did take it from the movie. Where I grew up was just down the street from Shirley "Cha-Cha" Muldowney.  https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shirley_Muldowney
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Ken Ashworth
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May 21st, 2018, 7:54 pm #5

I think Cha Cha might deserve her own poem
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Hadley R.
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May 22nd, 2018, 4:05 pm #6

you might be right
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Ken Ashworth
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May 23rd, 2018, 1:25 am #7

I wondered if the reference to her knowing more about cars than the guys might tie into to the movie. But it isn't my job to guess. Regardless it's a poignant poem without cha cha being identified.

If you are going to keep it, maybe a straight forward revelation that you lived near her?
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