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Slowlearner
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Joined: August 30th, 2017, 11:32 am

May 18th, 2018, 8:03 pm #1

I have one of my favorite of all the prose pieces, or flash fiction if you prefer, I've written up at CafeLit today. To call this one "flash" doesn't seem right. I don't know what I set out to do when I wrote it and this is what resulted. I hope you like it. It's only 700 words.

https://cafelitcreativecafe.blogspot.co ... jimmy.html
Last edited by Slowlearner on May 19th, 2018, 9:23 am, edited 1 time in total.
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toniclark
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Joined: May 5th, 2006, 6:47 pm

May 19th, 2018, 7:27 am #2

Thanks for posting. This is fun. I love the line, "Pears remained inscrutable." Also "Come inside so we can talk openly." Also nice: "It's like a light fur, Jimmy thought, put there to gather sunlight."

I love the structure of the piece, the inside vs. outside, the switch that takes place! Perfect ending, too. 

Congrats!

I'm back from a long vacation and a week of catching up on work and life. I haven't thought much about poetry for 3 weeks. 
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Slowlearner
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Joined: August 30th, 2017, 11:32 am

May 19th, 2018, 8:10 pm #3

Welcome back, Toni. I'm happy you liked the story.
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Osel
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Joined: June 20th, 2007, 3:33 am

May 22nd, 2018, 3:03 am #4

just loved it!
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