A Line Drawn in the Soup

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A Line Drawn in the Soup

russkigypsy
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Joined: August 18th, 2013, 10:27 pm

April 15th, 2018, 5:12 pm #1

A Line Drawn in the Soup
 
I'm sorry or is it excuse me
if I speak Russian with a distant
slight French accent.
 
The reason is my two aunties
with whom I spent a lot of time
back when I lived in Kiev
 
who spoke to me
only in that tongue. Well, OK,
that's also because a Napoleonic
 
general fell back and turned
his coat on the great Bonaparte
by marrying one of my great
 
grandmothers. Yet I assure you
I never thought I was a snob
until marrying my 4-generations
 
San Franciscan wife
who called me a French snob
whenever I'd be overly critical
 
of the Americans. Well, it's not
my fault if my tastes run along
the blue lines in the snow.
 
Not like some of our presidents
who sketch a crumbling red line
in the sand.
 
And yes I still like borscht
but not shchi.
That's where I draw the line.
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saore
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Joined: April 25th, 2009, 6:21 pm

April 22nd, 2018, 4:18 pm #2

russkigypsy wrote: A Line Drawn in the Soup
 
I'm sorry or is it excuse me
if I speak Russian with a distant
slight French accent.
 
The reason is my two aunties
with whom I spent a lot of time
back when I lived in Kiev
 
who spoke to me
only in that tongue. Well, OK,
that's also because a Napoleonic
 
general fell back and turned
his coat on the great Bonaparte
by marrying one of my great
 
grandmothers. Yet I assure you
I never thought I was a snob
until marrying my 4-generations
 
San Franciscan wife
who called me a French snob
whenever I'd be overly critical
 
of the Americans. Well, it's not
my fault if my tastes run along
the blue lines in the snow.
 
Not like some of our presidents
who sketch a crumbling red line
in the sand.
 
And yes I still like borscht
but not shchi.
That's where I draw the lin
very nice I enjoyed this poem. Diversity is a reality some people and political parties find hard to accept.

Sergio
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churinga
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Joined: May 22nd, 2016, 8:06 pm

April 26th, 2018, 12:30 am #3

A Line Drawn in the Soup. Witty title. 
 


The reason is my two aunties
with whom I spent a lot of time
back when I lived in Kiev
 back and then are doing the same work.  

general fell back and turned
his coat on the great Bonaparte
by marrying one of my great
 
grandmothers. Yet I assure you
I never thought I was a snob
until marrying my 4-generations
Maybe it's deliberate but you use 'great' twice. 

San Franciscan wife
who called me a French snob
whenever I'd be overly critical
Starting a new verse with San Franciscan..makes the last line of the previous verse seem odd, as if a enjambment created a nonsensical line.
You also use snob twice.
the blue lines in the snow.
Not sure what this refers too, blueblood?  

Not like some of our presidents
who sketch a crumbling red line
in the sand.
This seems like a separate thought which has little relevance to the rest of the poem.

And yes I still like borscht
but not shchi.
That's where I draw the line.
What's wrong with shchi? I looked up the recipe and it seems fine to me.




 
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russkigypsy
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Joined: August 18th, 2013, 10:27 pm

April 27th, 2018, 9:38 pm #4

Thank you Saore & Churinga for your time in commenting. The reason for my not liking shchi is strictly poetic license dealing with its alien sound & spelling. Otherwise in terms of gourmandizing I love all soups.
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Osel
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Joined: June 20th, 2007, 3:33 am

April 28th, 2018, 2:04 pm #5

shchi sounds and looks good to me. thanks for the intro. I am guessing it’s a ‘snob’ thing : looking down on cabbage, but not beets? looks as good as borscht to me. maybe not always the cabbage version. Might try nettles, for ( British) Be kind to Nettles week. I like the title, like the poem, think you could maybe tighten and amp it up a bit. enjoyed
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russkigypsy
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April 29th, 2018, 11:49 pm #6

Before we know it Russian/Ukrainian soups will be on the French cuisine menus... hahaha! Well, I agree that they are delicious but my line is artistic license. As to nettles I'll never forget with how often I was stung up to my knees when I was a youth. Ukrainian must have a version of the nettles soup but it's with sorel/shchiavel/szczawiowa with diced hard boiled eggs & of course lots & lots of sour cream.
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Joined: April 9th, 2011, 9:30 am

May 1st, 2018, 3:04 pm #7

I enjoyed the read. The diversity of our cultures is always interesting. I’m not familiar with too many Russian customs, I do much better with danish. I like how the different characters, aunties and grandmother all add their flavor.
Dale
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