A Stranger in Town

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A Stranger in Town

jed
Ultimate Virginian Fan
Joined: 06 Jan 2008, 16:41

23 Oct 2010, 00:36 #1

A Stranger in Town By Nic Fewer.

Patrick Reilly watched as his son Billy's horse came down the short track leading to their small ranch. Billy had gone into town about an hour ago and had refused to carry his gun, a new Colt .45 Peacemaker his father had given him for his recent 18th birthday.

Mr Reilly had given Billy the gun to protect him from the town bully, an obnoxious braggart named Johnny Murdock. Mr Reilly, an immigrant from County Meath in Ireland, had suffered because of bullies back in the old country and was determined his son wouldn't suffer, too.

He was amazed to find Billy was a natural with a gun, quick on the draw and an accurate shot after very little practice. As Billy prepared to go into town, his father had asked "Aren't you bringing your gun, Billy?" His son replied "Pa, if I run into Johnny, I don't want to have to kill him, he may think he's quick on the draw, he always boasting about it, but I'm pretty sure I'm quicker. If I have to draw on him, I might kill him, I don't want that on my conscience"

Patrick put his arm around his son's shoulder, saying " I respect that, son, and I'm proud of ya for having such a responsible attitude to carrying a gun, but I do worry about you, especially since your Ma passed away 3 years ago and this bullying by Johnny started" Billy's mother Kathleen, also from County Meath, had died after a short illness. "I know, Pa, I'll be careful" Billy reassured his father and then rode off towards town.

As Billy got down from his horse, his father could see a cut on his face and that his shirt was torn. "What happened , Billy?" he asked with concern in his voice. "Did ya run into Johnny?" "It's fine, Pa" Billy answered "and it's all over" "Come inside and tell me what happened" said Patrick, supporting his son as they walked into the house.

"Well, it was like this, Billy began........

After collecting a book he had ordered, a novel, Dorian Gray by the Irish writer,Oscar Wilde at the store, Billy was walking down the street when he saw Johnny coming towards him, accompanied by the two younger men, Gus Smithers and Jack Ogden, who usually hung around with Johnny, providing him with backup should any of his victims attempt to fight back.

" Well, lookee here, boys, if it isn't the Reilly kid" sneered Murdock. "Lets see if we can get him to fight" Approaching Billy, he said "What ya got there, Billy boy? "Is a that book?" "Why, it's a mighty fancy book, boys, with gold letterin' an' all" "Give it here, Billy" Murdock demanded, snatching it from Billy's grasp and then throwing it to Jack, who then threw it to Gus. Gus flung the book back to Johnny, who then opened it and tore a handful of pages from it. "I geuss your'e gonna miss a whole part of the story, boy" he laughed, tossing the torn pages in the air.

Billy had saved up for a long time for the book and waited for it to arrive from New York. He pushed Murdock saying "Why can't you just leave me alone, Johnny?, What is wrong with you?" Murdock lashed out, his violent punch sending Billy sprawling to the ground. "I'd say there was something wrong with you, boy, I know you have a gun , how come you don't carry it, huh? Murdock glared down at him. Wiping the blood from his cut face, Billy responded, "I don't want to kill you, Murdock"

"Kill me?" Murdock and his two friends laughed, a laugh that sounded like three mules braying. "You kill me?, why you......" Murdock was about to kick Billy in the face when a quite, but commanding voice spoke. "Leave the boy alone" A stranger stood there, an angry look on his face. "Mister, you better stay out of my business or else....." Murdock snarled. "Or else what?" the stranger snarled back "I'm making this my business, I geuss I can even things up a bit seen as as it's 3 against one"

Murdock turned to face the stranger, "No one tells me what to do, mister , you better draw" Johnny's Colt had barely cleared his holster as the stranger's Colt appeared as if by magic in his hand . the barrel pointing straight at Johnny's stomach. The bully went pale, his gun fell from his hand, his legs buckled and he fell to his knees, crying "Please don't shoot me, mister" as he held his hands up. Gus and Jack looked at their friend and started laughing. "I don't think I'm going to have to shoot you, kid" the stranger said, holstering his gun and then reaching and helping Billy to his feet. "Here, son, let me help you up" Pity about your book, but I know my employer has a copy I'm sure he will lend you" Billy and the stranger walked away, and Gus and Jack went the opposite direction, leaving Murdock there while the towns people laughed at the sight of the bully on his knees, no longer a threat.

"What was the stranger's name, son?", Reilly asked "that was the funny thing, Pa, he didn't say his name, Billy answered, just that he was foreman of a ranch near Medicine Bow" "I'd sure like to thank him for helping you, is he still in town?" his father asked. " Yeah, he's staying at the hotel a few days, lookin' at some cattle out at Anderson's place" Billy informed his father. "How would I know him to see?" Reilly enquired. "Well, Pa, he wears a heavy red corduroy shirt with a black leather waistcoat and a black stetson, oh and he rides a beautiful Appalosa"

I think all of you will know who the stranger was, this was an attempt to write a story about him without mentioning his name.

Nic.
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Faraway
Trail Boss
Joined: 10 Mar 2009, 23:05

23 Oct 2010, 21:32 #2

Nice one Nic, Loved how you brought the V into it.



Eithne.
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jed
Ultimate Virginian Fan
Joined: 06 Jan 2008, 16:41

24 Oct 2010, 00:41 #3

Thanks, Eithne, you'll notice I didn't even mention him in the note at the end!

Nic.
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Bob
Ranch Owner
Joined: 27 Jan 2008, 04:16

24 Oct 2010, 03:22 #4

Faraway @ Oct 23 2010, 09:32 PM wrote:Nice one Nic, Loved how you brought the V into it.



Eithne.
Same here, Nic. I thought it was going to be a generic Western story (good, though!) until you-know-who came in at the end.
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jed
Ultimate Virginian Fan
Joined: 06 Jan 2008, 16:41

24 Oct 2010, 12:26 #5

Thanks, Bob, I'm glad you liked it.

Nic.
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LynBeiler
Wrangler
Joined: 24 Oct 2010, 17:52

25 Oct 2010, 03:30 #6

Wonderful story, Nic.
Loved it-- thanks for posting it!

Lyn
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lizzierock
Card Shark
Joined: 01 Mar 2008, 02:03

25 Oct 2010, 13:36 #7

Enjoyed it very much Nic.

Betty

(Are the Reillys family names?)
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jed
Ultimate Virginian Fan
Joined: 06 Jan 2008, 16:41

25 Oct 2010, 14:00 #8

Thanks, Betty.
Yes, Reilly was my maternal Grandmother's name and she had a brother named Patrick, or Uncle Paddy as we knew him. I think Paul Green said he had Reillys in his family, too.

Nic.
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jed
Ultimate Virginian Fan
Joined: 06 Jan 2008, 16:41

25 Oct 2010, 14:29 #9

Hi, Lyn,
I'm glad you liked the story, too. I could have given a different description at the end, sandy hair, blue shirt, fawn waistcoat and he rides a Buckskin paint horse, and we know who that is!

Or of course, I could have described him as Adam (or Joe or Hoss) Cartwright, Rowdy Yates, Paladin, one of the Maverick boys or any other western character. But the point of the story was to avoid naming the nameless hero.

Nic.
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Dusty
Cowhand
Joined: 20 Aug 2008, 23:26

19 Sep 2011, 21:01 #10

Hi Nic,

nice one. I already had a hunch of whom you're talking when you wrote ""Or else what?" the stranger snarled back" Then I liked very much "Johnny's Colt had barely cleared his holster as the stranger's Colt appeared as if by magic in his hand".

I'm not sure if others will agree with me, but I think you could've left out "he was foreman of a ranch near Medicine Bow" and everyone would have known who you're talking if it had just been "Pa, he didn't say his name, Billy answered".

Thanks for another fanfic, Nic. I love the short ones. I know I can finish reading them.

Dusty
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BlazingStar
Cowhand
Joined: 30 Jun 2012, 17:12

20 Mar 2015, 16:34 #11

An enjoyable read, Nic, and congratulations at achieving your story goal.

To me, the Virginian's dialogue was perfect and completely identifiable. In general, I always admire him in situations like you've put him, where he defends against injustice, mistreatment, etc.; his integrity is without debate. I also liked the part about the book, when the Virginian mentions that Judge Garth has a copy he might lend the boy. Being a book enthusiast myself, I've often wondered what titles are shelved in the Judge's study, and regarding Oscar Wilde, I had to smile. I've read a few of his books and have enjoyed them very much.

Again, nice job on this. I hope you, and other Virginian fans, continue to write and post fan fiction. It's always fun to read a new take on our favorite characters and episodes.
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