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Joined: August 11th, 2009, 7:39 pm

November 25th, 2011, 6:52 pm #361

I am backtracking some concepts (like two) because I can and you guys can't stop me.

Archemides:
Jamal Farouk
Now see, from that summary I have a very good picture of what Jamal does and what strengths and weaknesses he possesses. Unfortunately, that's about all I can really get from that; we need a little bit more description in the personality department: what are Jamal's attitudes towards people? What are his attitudes towards himself? Is he a perfectionist? An elitist? Does he just have lots and lots of hobbies and pursues them all with equal determination? And whilst we're on the topic, Jamal's weaknesses seem a little thin. Obviously the point of SOTF isn't to make someone who will perfectly balance in ability compared to every other character, but it seems Jamal's only problem is he's going to have trouble finding a tech savvy ally on the island. Nein, don't think about what Jamal will be able to do on the island yet. Take what you flesh out with the personality some and then see if you can't find more personality faults that go along with them: for instance if he's a perfectionist, then the strength comes from his diversive abilities and the weakness just writes itself. If you have a character that's too strong, then you could well bump into some problems generating any real conflict for him in his story.

Alexei Zavlasky
Alexei runs into a similar zone with Ramal, that being his general lack of any weaknesses or information on his personality. Give us more ideas of what goes through his head and consider elaborating on a few things that'll give him obstacles to overcome as he lives out the rest of his days, and I'm sure he'll make for a super character.

Dr. Roy
Leah
If I had to give a realistic timeline guesstimate, I would wager somewhere in the 6 months - 1 year + zone would be a reasonable time frame for her to reintegrate with civilised society. As for what causes the rehibilitation, I'd only really object to B since it seems to clash with her pre-existing personality. Then again, maybe she just grew up and changed what she thought about things with more experience under her belt.
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Megami
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Joined: September 22nd, 2006, 2:13 am

November 27th, 2011, 12:37 am #362

wrote:I've got a question regarding the sisters here, since I read their concepts and saw something interesting. You said that the two don't have a very good relationship with one another. Is it because their two personalities just clash? Or would that perhaps have something to do with Misa's "burying" of her asian culture? I don't know if that was the intent or not, but that's what popped into mind when I read Ayako's concept. I should imagine that Ayako would be none too happy if Misa tries to push her own heritage under the rug like that. It would be a very interesting avenue to explore, at the very least.
Cousin, but yes, that's exactly the rivalry I wanted to establish with the two. Same generation cousins with polar opposite opinions on their heritage. Kind of thinking I can establish a love/hate relationship between the two of them, and hopefully use it to expand on Ayako as a character when taking her loyalty to family into account. Might make for some interesting angles down the road.
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Mitsuko2
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Joined: October 7th, 2006, 2:40 am

December 1st, 2011, 12:38 am #363

Allegra “Ali” Hoffman - Queen bee of her clique, her family is one of the richest ones in town, and because of this, Ali has developed a feeling of superiority over her classmates. She will do anything it takes to get what she believes she deserves, and is used to having whatever she wants handed to her on a platter. She’s popular, but in an infamous way. She rules the halls of school with fear, and enjoys tormenting the “little people”. She also has a small dependency on her cocaine.

With Ali I’m thinking of having two other girls to be her basic posse that she struts around the school with. She’s probably going to be a cheerleader, and maybe someone could be her boyfriend. Not I the sence of her actually liking him, but more as arm candy for her.

Elliot “Eli” Stone - A Punk rocker in every sense of the term. Both his arms are covered in tattoos, as well as his left hip and right shoulder blade. His hair color is naturally brown, but normally dyes dark blue with red highlights. He is a chain smoker, always having at least three packs on his person at a time. He is lead Guitarist and singer of his band (unnamed as of now), and skips school regularly to smoke up. He is proudly out of the closet, but is a man’s man in every other way.

With Eli I’ll obviously need bandmates for him (bassist, drumer, keyboards, ect), and I’d like to have a few stoner friends he could chill with.

Norelia “Nor” Concepcion - Nor is a proud underacheiver. She’d rather go to a party than study and would rather smoke bud than go to class. She’s from the richer parts of town, but doesn’t like to shove it in people’s faces. She’s happy to smoke up a total stranger and loves meeting new people. She likes to paint, and feels that if she gave up weed she’d be giving up her muse. She can have a bit of a temper when she’s high, but her friends usually just laugh it off until she comes down. Even with her lackadaisical attitude, all of her teachers love her, and most other people find it hard to stay mad at her.

Nor is basically a chill, down to earth girl, so I figure she could hang with just anybody.


And those are my three
The Dan: she won me over with card games, brownies, sex and handcuffs

Edited as of 12/1/11

Alive: Norelia Concepcion, Elliot Stone, Allegra Hoffman

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Joined: June 7th, 2010, 10:39 pm

December 1st, 2011, 7:56 am #364

it is almost 3 AM and I am dangerously mentally unstable right now as anyone who stays up too late generally is so I'm not going to try reviewing anyone else's stuff because I will probably start criticizing my hallucinations

but apparently this is a great time to ask if the changes I made to my flagship are any good!! yay my life

So anyway Aidan Flynn is more or less definitely my flagship. His original personality was outlined like way back somewhere that I'm too lazy to find but basically he was an attractive womanizing jerkass who runs track and sings in a band and does drugs and is a big jerkfaced jerkass jerk. But then I got bored with that and also I realized in my head I was writing him pretty much as Hayley Kelly only straight and with a penis. So yeah changes abound.

I kinda outlined them in my looking-for-relationship thread but basically- his jerkassness is still a thing, but only on the outside. Basically he was teased a lot in his early adolescence (like, junior high) and built this false personality as a sort of protective shell. I'm still working on what exactly he was teased for- I always pictured him as kind of a brat at that age but I feel like being teased for being a brat wouldn't make him...become more of a brat to defend himself. Anyway, deep down he's quite idealistic and romantic. Wants to be that prince on a white horse, you know? And yeah, he gets plenty of girls, but he always ends up leaving them, because he knows they want him as Aidan Flynn, Asshole Extraordinare, not as the dorky nice guy he actually is deep down. His best friend, James Ford, is the one person who knows basically everything about him, having known him pretty much for forever. They have the raddest of bromances.

Also he is a massive closet dork and plays WoW and does online RPs and his friends online ~*understand him*~. His IRL friends don't so much. Though his friends might see glimpses of his true personality, most of them like him as AFAE as I'm totally referring to Aidan Flynn, Asshole Extraordinare from now on, and so he just kind of...performs.

It's kind of a shitty life. It's amazing he hasn't grown cynical from it, but he just can't. He's too ~*pure at heart*~. Ignoring all the sex that he has/feels guilty about.

And yeah I dropped the drug aspect for obvious reasons. Still sings lead in a band though. And does track.

So yeah, thoughts? :3
being meguca is suffering

[V5] ALIVE:
[x] Aidan Flynn [B???] // Passing slowly though the vector, damp with fog, the bog that grows the former business sector...
[x] Chitose Saionji [G???] // 公園に千歳は本を読む!

[V5] CONCEPTS:
Winston Evans aced the last English test and would like to point out how gorgeous your shoes are.
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[V4] ESCAPED:
[x] Garrett Hunter [B138] [KC: 0] // Sitting at home, figuring some shit out.
"If there's anything I can do...anywhere I can fight, send me there. I want to help." // ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕ - ♕

[V4] DECEASED:
[x] Hayley Kelly [G103] [KC: 7] // RANK 33
I don't want to go. // ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥ - ♥
[x] Jasper-Declan MacDermott [B129] [KC: 0] // RANK 93
Perhaps...it was worth it, after all. // ❂ - ❂ - ❂ - ❂ - ❂ - ❂ - ❂ - ❂ - ❂
[x] Vivien Morin [B062] [KC: 0] // RANK 131
Goodnight, Sylvie. // ♀ - ♀ - ♀ - ♀ - ♀
[x] Maria Santiago [G110] [KC: 0] // RANK 258
"So...I guess...I'm going to heaven after all..." // ✝ - ✝
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Joined: December 30th, 2008, 9:10 pm

December 3rd, 2011, 6:15 am #365

Lindsay Greene - Lindsay is one of the more socially active (slutty) girls in her senior class. Her parents have money, and she is kind of a bitch. Pretty smart, but doesn't like to do coursework. Needs to get into a good college or her parents will, like, kill her.

Vernon Vangenne - Vernon is an antisocial smoker who hates just about everything about going to high school. He doesn't get along with most other people outside of his circle of friends (probably all smokers) and doesn't really have any ambition in life. When he does speak, he's often blunt, and doesn't give a shit. Has a soft spot for animals.

Krista Quimby - Krista is the antithesis of Vernon and Lindsay; she's outgoing, studious and ambitious. She's got straight-A's, loads of extracurricular activites, a part-time job and is generally friendly and pleasant, though not above petty gossip and wild parties. She also has body image issues, mostly regarding her weight (only slightly pudgy).
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Joined: December 1st, 2011, 4:25 pm

December 5th, 2011, 11:30 am #366

Okay, first three SotF characters ever, probably gotta improve them but here's the basics.

Mallory McCormick – Mallory is a rather butch girl with barely passing grades who prefers to focus on anything to do with sports or tailoring. She's horribly blunt at times, seemingly missing the filter between her brain and her mouth, and often won't understand why people get offended at some of her comments. She's also extremely impulsive, making snap decisions about everything. She joins any sports team she can and also works backstage in theater related activities. She'll socialise with most people, but has a low tolerance for people attempting to roll over her.

Naomi Bell – A polite and intelligent girl who strives for good grades and works on the debate team. She is an avid reader and prone to quoting literature in arguments, debate-related or not. Though she attempts to be friendly to everybody, regardless of popularity, she often secretly looks down upon them and thinks that they should be grateful she socialises with them at all. She has a very high opinion of herself, and believes she knows what's best for everyone. Good intentions or not, she's a control freak whose politeness shatters when things don't go her way.

Joe Carrasco – A boy who wants nothing more than to be a mechanic and fiddle around with cars, but who is constantly being driven into being a doctor by his parents, despite his fear and disgust of blood and other bodily fluids. Constantly struggling to maintain high grades, he's always on the edge of a stress-related breakdown, and started smoking weed to keep himself relaxed, although he tries to hide this from his parents. Very shy and afraid of offending. He has few friends, but if he makes a friend it's for life. Also gay, but is still in the closet.
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(Sprites courtesy of the awesome Fenris.)

B020 - Daniel "Danny" Brooks | Weapon: Portable CD player with batteries | DECEASED
PREGAME - Past: 1 | Present: 1 2 3 | Sadie Hawkins: N/A
V6 - 1 2 3 4

G002 - Lillian "Lily" Caldwell | Weapon: Army Helmet | DECEASED
PREGAME - Past: 1 2 | Present: 1 2 3 | Sadie Hawkins: 1 2
V6 - 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19

G043 - Clarice Halwood | Weapon: Can of Air Freshener | ALIVE
PREGAME - Past: 1 2 | Present: 1 2 3 | Sadie Hawkins: 1
V6 - 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11
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B020 - Joe Carrasco | Weapon: Dressage Whip | DECEASED - "All the wishes... impossible. Gun's enough."
PREGAME - Present: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 | Prom: 1 2 3 4
V5 - 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19

G003 - Naomi Bell | Weapon: Electric Hedge Trimmers | DECEASED - "S-s-stop."
PREGAME - Past: 1 2 3 | Present: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 | Prom: 1
V5 - 1 2 | Meanwhile - 1

G043 - Mallory McCormick | Weapon: Flathead Screwdriver | DECEASED - "Okay... Hospital... Then tennis..."
PREGAME - Past: 1 2 | Present: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8
V5 - 1 2 3 4 5 | Meanwhile - 1
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Joined: August 11th, 2009, 7:39 pm

December 6th, 2011, 10:34 pm #367

Kay time to unveil concept #3 cause I've been toying with her for a while now like I do all my women.

Gabriella 'Gabby' Parker


Gabriella 'Gabby' Parker is a girl who lives for the stage. Graced with a fine voice and the chops to use it in front of a crowd, she has been partnered with her best friend [insert name that is yet to be made but handler is already confirmed] as her musical accompiant for some time now, the two enjoying a small amount of success in local open mic nights and the such. But Gabby isn't content to settle for just being a one night nomination the rest of her musical career, despite the dangers of stardom thrown into her face by her parents. Gabby wants to be the star! Even if she can sometimes unwittingly let the crowd go to her head and forget that she's a two person act, being up on stage with all eyes on her makes Gabby feel alive and she wants to live like that for the rest of her life!

oh there's a bunch of other details that would go in a proper profile but hey have a general overview. Anyone got anything to say by all means share it with me homies.
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Joined: October 4th, 2011, 4:36 pm

December 7th, 2011, 3:12 am #368

I haven't updated my concepts in a while, so let me simply explain all three of my characters to you:
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Rachael Alma Langdon is the younger of two children of a Virginian family. Her father Aaron is a shipping engineer and her mother Leanna is an elementary school music teacher. Her father got a promotion to manage one of Seattle's shipyards. Rachael and her parents moved to Seattle in the early summer before her Freshman year at Aurora High while her sister Bridget stayed in Virginia to study Law at the University of Virginia.

Since preschool, Aaron and Leanna had to speak to counselors about worries that Rachael might be exhibiting antisocial tendencies, mostly because she would hide from other kids and choose not to talk. They've talked to her, but it seems that Rachael is just a very shy and quiet girl. She has attempted to make friends over the years. While Bridget always was capable of being a good sister/friend, Rachael had to make friends her own age.

For most of her early life, Rachael would stray away from talking to other students. She would talk to them when required and some kids would be nice to her, but most kids just saw her as a creepy loner and used her as a doormat. This would change when the Langdon's moved to Seattle. Leanna asked Rachael to try and make friends. While she was initially shy and hesitant, she soon found herself in the pleasant company of students like Garrett Booth and Alina Rivette. With actual friends, Rachael would show a little more interest, but she retained some of her old habits, such as only speaking when she had to and being very terse.

In her academics, Rachael is a fairly decent student, usually ending on the A-B honor roll. Her best subject is English. Rachael is considering a career in teaching, hopefully becoming an English teacher.

Outside of school, Rachael is on pretty good terms with her parents. She has been very close to her mother since her youth, usually doing activities with her. Her mother, being a music teacher, introduced her to a lot of different musicians. Rachael tends to like a variety of musicians, her favorites including The Beatles, Radiohead, Bjork, and Adele. She and her mom began taking yoga when Rachael was in middle school, and they continue to take it every weekend. Leanna wanted her daughter to try out some new activities to make friends, and Rachael soon discovered a passion for kickboxing, and continues to practice it and occasionally participate in tournaments. However, Rachael will admit that she is mostly interested in kickboxing because it's cathartic and helps her stay in shape, so she has no interest in going professional.

Physically, Rachael is about 5'1" and weighs roughly about 110 pounds. Since kickboxing and yoga tend to keep her in shape, she is known to not shy away from eating anything placed in front of her. Her father's farmer roots also taught her to have an open palette, so she will eat bizarre foods like beef tongue with no qualms. Rachael is fairly small chested, but her recreations keep her body toned and slim. She has long chocolate brown hair (I'm certain that her hair is chocolate colored. If anyone knows what that would be specifically called, let me know) that falls past her waist. Her hair is very thick, and she tends to tie it in a braid that usually falls over her right shoulder. She also wears a green headband behind her fringed bangs and small green earrings. Her fashion sense tends to cover her body up, although she doesn't do this on purpose. In cold weather, she will wear large sweaters with sleeves that tend to cover half of her hands and long floor length skirts. In warm weather, she tends to keep the long skirts which usually are lighter colored and long loose shirts.

Current relationships:

Friends
Alina Rivette (Inky)
Garrett Booth (DocBalance)
Alfred (DocBalance)
Lisa Grzybowski (Stark)
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Claire Emilia Monaghan is the third of four children in the Monaghan household. Her father Patrick is a cardiologist and her mother Donna is a Divorce Attorney. She has two sisters and one brother. Her sister Emma (24) is an art teacher in Tacoma and her brother Mason (21) is a Junior at Washington State University's Animal Science program. Her younger sister Jessica (14) is a Freshman at Aurora High.

Claire lived in a fairly traditional home. Although her parents were busy with work, they would always find time for Claire and her sibling's activities and take an active part in their lives. When they learned that Emma was excelling in art, they signed her up for art classes. When they saw that Mason really liked taking care of animals, they got him to volunteer at local animal shelters. At age eleven, Claire revealed to her parents what she wanted to be: a film director.

Before her love of film, Claire had simply been the really talkative and wild child in the family. She was always reading, studying, and sharing the things she learned. It wasn't until she saw Alfred Hitchcock's Strangers on a Train on TV one night that she was hooked into the subject. From that moment on, film became her life. She would read books on the subject and find time to watch any movie she can, and because her parents had HBO, Cinemax, and Turner Classic Movies, she was given the chances. Patrick and Donna realized how passionate she was, and gave her her first movie camera for Christmas when she was twelve.

From that moment on, Claire would continue to study film all while making her own. Most of her movies were shown to her family, but she would also share them with her friends and acquaintances. Mason introduced Claire to websites like Wikipedia, TVTropes, and 4Chan when she entered high school, and she used this to help her with her education. With all this information present, Claire was able to learn various techniques and trivia in film, which she continued to dispense to others. When she found out about YouTube, Claire started an account and began uploading her work.

Claire's body of work tends to be about human tales. Most of the short films she has made tend to be about real people and the real things they face, such as filming Emma as she made a sculpture for her class and using that as a piece of performance art. Any fictional work will have some elements of realism and relatability. She isn't that into big budgeted blockbusters, but she would prefer to make movies along the lines of Three Colors or Hunger.

In Aurora, Claire is a fairly well known person due to her Type A attitude. She's very social, isolating certain conversations in a crowd and chiming in with her opinion. This has caused her to earn a "love-hate" status, where some people will find her engaging and interesting while others find her annoying and loud. Academically, Claire excels in her subjects, earning straight-A's. Even though she is prone to spouting useless and random information, she is really good at receiving other information, so she tends to handle school well.

Outside of classes, Claire is a member of Film Club, had a brief stint in Fashion Club (she got all that she needed from that club), and writes movie reviews for the school paper. Online, she is a frequent user of Facebook, Tumblr, YouTube, That Guy with the Glasses, Wikipedia, TVTropes, 4Chan, and Twitter, so she is well connected to current events in Aurora and the world.

At home, Claire tends to get along well with her parents and Jessica. She and Jessica have a very close relationship and tend to share a lot with each other. Claire tends to go home and get on her computer to do schoolwork and surf the web. This causes her eyes to strain and her back to sort of arch. She is also developing an addiction to caffeine and Adderall to stay focused on everything. As a mental exercise, she will get on the treadmill in her father's gym and run for a bit to get her brain cells flowing. This has allowed her to develop good cardio, which her father is strict about in the home.

Physically, Claire stands at about 5'6" and weighs 135 pounds. She had small brown eyes and light brown hair that falls past her shoulderblades and reaches about midback. She began wearing glasses in ninth grade because she thought these fake glasses she found at a pharmacy made her look cooler, like Tina Fey. Her clothing tends to be very casual, usually loose t-shirts and denim jeans. Her shirts are usually pop culture related and depict characters and scenes from movies and shows like Adventure Time and Harry Potter. She also tends to wear a jean jacket and a beret. She will dress more girly for special occasions, but tends to look very slacker otherwise.

Currently, Claire is making her first attempt at the Seattle Young Filmmakers Festival. The festival is a competition for young film enthusiasts in Seattle to make films and enter them to show to a large public. Claire is deciding to make a feature film based on a Survival of the Fittest fanfiction she wrote online called Friends to the End. She is also considering applying to film schools like USC, UCLA, and NYU.

Current Relationships:

Friends:
Jack McDonald (Flare)(Also has a crush on him)
Amy Bachelor (Pippin)
Donald McCormac (Buttonmolder)

Acquainted from Friends to the End:
Zubin Wadia (decoy73)
Edgar Tolstoff (storyspoiler)
Allen Blue (paradise)
Garrett Booth (DocBalance)
Mallory Vanderverve (storyspoiler)
Alexei Zavlasky (Archimedes390)
Jaquilyn Locke (LocoBroJoe)
Cassidy Kant (LocoBroJoe)
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Laura Jane Nyquist is the only child of Jerome and Lucille Nyquist, an entrepreneur and socialite. From an early age, Laura has been viewed as an accessory to her parents, usually only spending time with them when they would look better. Most of her early life, Laura was raised by an ever changing roster of maids and servants. She had everything she wanted, but she was never much of a happy child. In school, Laura was known to act up and get in trouble. Acts of her delinquency include getting into fights and swearing in front of her teacher. When she was threatened with expulsion for bringing a pocket knife to school, her parents took notice and made several rules for her.

For the most part though, this meant sending Laura off to do a bunch of activities away from home in an attempt to enrich her. She didn't have much fun in ballet, violin, ice skating, or karate, however, she did find an interest in a sewing class she took. She enjoyed drawing dresses and sewing, so she found that as an outlet.

As she got older, Laura found herself still unimpressed with her life. In middle school, she realized how pretty she was and used her knowledge of fashion to elevate herself in school. She soon found herself falling into the popular crowd and began to be a part of the trendy cliques. In high school, she tried out for and made the cheerleading squad. She also partook in many elicit actions such as drinking, drugs, excessive partying, and fornication. She went through a lot of boyfriends and flings, never really satisfied with any man she was with.

And then it all came crashing down. Towards the end of her Sophomore year, Laura found herself crouching over a toilet puking her guts out. The test she bought at the local pharmacy confirmed her suspicions: she was pregnant. Laura informed her parents of this development, and while initially shocked, they decided to take advantage of this situation to better Laura and their lives. As for the father of her baby, Laura simply told everyone that she didn't know who it was because she went through a lot of guys around the time of the conception.

When the news broke out at school, Laura discovered that many of her friends no longer looked at her the same way. She soon found most of her friends no longer wanted to associate with her, especially since many suspected that their boyfriends were possible fathers. The only friend Laura found to really appreciate at the end of this was Norelia Concepcion, who helped her through her pregnancy.

Laura gave birth to her daughter Sophia Maria Nyquist towards the end of her Junior year of high school. In this time, she found out how much her parents had changed in this time. They began imposing curfews and searching her room for any paraphernalia. Aside from being a new mother, Laura' parents made her get a job at a fast food restaurant to make her own money, since the cut her off from their credit cards. She also had to drop cheerleading due to overscheduling, but she was allowed to stay in Fashion Club.

Once she graduates, Laura plans to go to a community college to get her degree in business so she can open her own clothing store while balancing work and motherhood.

Laura tends to still carry some of her personality traits from her old life. This includes sarcasm, haughtiness, and a quick temper. Since Sophia's birth, she has softened a bit, but the combination of stress and her loss of popularity have made her really easy to anger and overreact. Some say she is much nicer when Sophia is around her, but mostly if Sophia isn't crying.

Physically, Laura stands at about 5'4" and weighs 122 pounds. She has big blue eyes and dark brown hair that she usually ties back in a ponytail that reaches her elbows. She usually ruffles her hair a bit so some sticks out on the right side of her forehead. Her clothing is fairly stylish, usually wearing loose shirts with wide open collars and miniskirts that reach her knees. She also makes herself taller by wearing high heels that give her a few extra inches. Laura has put on weight since Sophia was born and hasn't had as much time to work out.

Current Relationships:

Friends:
Norelia Concepcion (Mitsuko2)

Enemies:
Bitch Squad
Certain Cheerleaders
Miranda Miller (KamiKaze)
Allegra Hoffman (Mitsuko2)
Lee Penbur (DocBalance)

Former Boyfriends, flings, and possible baby daddies:
Jasper Rourke (Inky)
Maximilian Sawyer (Flare)
Zack Spinks (Aphex_Nobody)
I know I have divulged a lot of information, but I really needed to put this into words so I could keep track on how I am progressing. I also don't want to start another relationship thread. So, if you want to be acquainted with any of my concepts, let me know. I am looking for enemies for Rachael (people who see her as a doormat), people for Claire's movie (you could also post here and read about the movie if you are interested), and Laura can always take more definite friends and enemies, as well as people who could be the father her baby (if you want to be the father, PM me, because we will have to discuss this).

Any thoughts? Suggestions?
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Nadia Riva
"You don't think I'm pretty enough to be a model? And you're telling me while wearing that face?"


Noah Whitley
"You look like you could use a laugh, and I have just the joke for that."


Alba Reyes
"Woo hoo! Three holes in one! That's a new record!"
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Girl #007-Rachael Langdon
"I really am going to die, aren't I? Oh god, what am I going to do?"


Armed with a Solar Powered Scientific Calculator
Stabbed with a sword by Marcus Leung.
Girl #018-Claire Monaghan
"You know, I always thought I'd be seen by millions. Fuck Murphy's Law."


Armed with a Shotgun Flashlight (1 Bullet) and a bulletproof vest

Girl #035-Sophie McDowell
"People often find inspiration in the darkest times. I guess I can too."
Killed by a grenade thrown by Summer Simms

Armed with a lead pipe.
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19:10 Laurelena: When octopi eat hamsters, the resulting laughter is a mix of colorful idiocy and dainty ice skating

18:10 Mimi: "how many nipples does Miss Piggy REALLY have?"

16:57 Mimi play Fergaliscious
16:58 Mimi IF YOU EVER WANT FANS
16:58 Mimi YOU NEED FERALISCIOUS
16:58 Mimi FERGALISCIOUS
16:58 Mimi Omg
16:58 Mimi feral-liscious
16:58 Mimi that's
16:58 Mimi blowing my mind

16:57 KamiKaze Laurie, if you ever become a mod, let it be known that one day you will critique someone's profile who had a girl killing her family friend because he raped her, and the person will insult you by calling you a talking Oshawott doll.

21:42Acidic i AM ANAL WART MAN

00:19Delroy.... I HAVE AN IMAGE OF HANSEL FUCKING TRAVIS WITH A CHAINSAW STUCK IN MY HEAD. HOW IS THIS IN ANY WAY GOOD!?


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Rachael Langdon
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Rachael Langdon and Claire Monaghan
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Rachael Langdon


Claire Monaghan
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Claire Monaghan
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December 7th, 2011, 3:24 pm #369

Laure hun, I'm looking at Rachael and it's just occuring to me that for a girl who's traumatised so severely that she never speaks to anyone at all even a single word, she seems pretty much perfectly adjusted otherwise. Considering her active range of hobbies, friends and interests. In fact the point about her looking frightened a lot doesn't even seem to flow that much with the rest of the girl who I'm looking at, who quite honestly I could think was mute due to a physical reason rather than any social trauma if I hadn't known about it in the first place. If an event's going to have an effect on someone's life to such a severe point even years later it really should show in a few other aspects of their personality, at least I think so.
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December 7th, 2011, 4:05 pm #370

Slamexo wrote:Laure hun, I'm looking at Rachael and it's just occuring to me that for a girl who's traumatised so severely that she never speaks to anyone at all even a single word, she seems pretty much perfectly adjusted otherwise. Considering her active range of hobbies, friends and interests. In fact the point about her looking frightened a lot doesn't even seem to flow that much with the rest of the girl who I'm looking at, who quite honestly I could think was mute due to a physical reason rather than any social trauma if I hadn't known about it in the first place. If an event's going to have an effect on someone's life to such a severe point even years later it really should show in a few other aspects of their personality, at least I think so.
I understand what you are saying. My idea of Rachael was sort of that the frightened look thing was sort of based on her preexisting personality, where she was really shy and hard to get to open.

As for the incident's effect on her, again, the issue is mostly that I am still trying to think of the best possible story for that. I just realized that I forgot to mention that she started seeing a therapist following the incident. Four years of therapy might have helped her a bit with not being as depressed, and she might be on some medication.

As for why she is still not talking, I have two possible solutions that I am trying to work with. The first is that the memory of the event is repressed. She might have known what caused her problem, but have buried the memory because she doesn't want to speak of it or remember it. Her medication might have some issue with it, but I'm still not sure.

The other solution is that Rachael is an unreliable narrator. If you think about it, you only really know her from what she tells you. The fact that she can only speak through secondary methods gives her an extra filter, so she can choose what to say to others. It's entirely possible that she isn't being as honest about the incident or her disability. Still, if I were to use this solution, I would really have to work on her excuse as to why she would lie to her parents, friends, and everyone else in her life.

These are just ideas though. I probably should add the therapy thing to her info though.
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December 7th, 2011, 4:25 pm #371

I'd like to mention at this point that we don't tend to accept alluded to 'unknown incidents' in profiles. It makes it too easy for character elements that we as a staff don't like to see to slip under the radar.

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December 7th, 2011, 7:30 pm #372

If you have to really reach to incorporate an element such as being entirely mute, it might be best to drop such an element because it doesn't help the character at all.

Just remember that handy tip: If some auxillary element like a false leg or blindness can't be removed and leave an otherwise compelling character, then the character is too based on that element.
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December 7th, 2011, 8:10 pm #373

Listening to all of these suggestions, let me throw an idea out:

What if Rachael is only mute because she chooses to not chime in that often? Thinking about silent characters like Silent Bob and Ferb, what if Rachael was the type of person who would only speak if she had something very profound to say, or simply was subordinate to everyone? This way, she still keeps to herself and becomes harder for others to read, but she still has the chance to voice her opinion on subjects and join in on others. So essentially, she can talk, but you won't hear her speak that much due to her shy nature.

To retcon her disability, she might have had a throat infection or some other issue that left her mute for a while, so part of her reasons for not speaking are because it hurts to speak extensively and she has learned to only speak when she absolutely has to.

Is this too silly, or would it be easier to form a character?
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December 7th, 2011, 10:03 pm #375

This is my first concept for a character in SOTF, and my first time posting, so let's see how it goes.

Name: Charlie Stone

Hobbies and interests: Charlie has a wide array of hobbies and interest, he loves indie music, listening to it almost all of the time, even trying to play some tunes on his guitar, on another side, he likes to play tabletop games with whoever is up to it, and enjoys most video games, RPG's preferred. He likes to go out, hanging out with friends or partying, as long as he does something interesting and fun, doing some kind of sport or going to the gym is also part of his life. Ultimately, he loves to read a bit of everything, that way, he won't be caugh unaware by anything mentioned in a conversation.

Apperance: For a boy, he isn't particularly tall, he barely reaches the 5'7 mark and weighting only 140lbs. He has brown light hair which seems to change color depending on the seasons, during summer it approaches a dark blonde, and sometimes it takes a more reddish approach. His face has a mix of sharp and delicate features, the latter ones predominationg. He has brown eyes and pale skin. He tends to dress in some simple looking clothes, primarily, a white shirt, blue jeans and black converse, accompanied by a neck chain.

Charlie is the only son from the Stone family, his mother, is a teacher and spends most of her time teaching students both from school and on their houses, his father, on the other side, works on a bank across town. Since he was a little boy, his parents demanded that he was the perfect son, excellent at school, with lots of friends and someone who could dominate any sport, and he did his best to defraud them. He was never sure if this was on purpose or not, but he hated the fact that his family always said that only the best end up being someone in this life, so he was never the best. The fact that he had respiratory problems didn’t seem to help him, he could play any sport, as long as he didn’t move much, if he did that, he would soon start to turn red and being able to breathe turned into a fight. Combining this with his lousy grades and the constant harassment from his parents and you had the recipe for a nightmarish childhood.

Somehow, during all this time, Charlie developed a simple system as to ignore everything bad that happened to him. It started when he grew apart from his parents, treating them with coldness and never bothering to check on them or even ask them how things had gone, and if they asked him something, his answers were short and sharp. Everything was easier now; he would ignore them and live his life as best as he could, playing various video games and reading as much as he could so his mind would lost in something else, with time he even stopped crying during those nights when he felt particularly unhappy. Yet, this attitude would soon extend to the rest of the boys his age, he would start to treat them like crap, and make an image of him as a bully. One night, when he was fifteen, all of this changed.

He had a dream or a nightmare, he never knew nor was able to remember, but when he woke up, his body and mind kept saying change, it is time to change. And so he did, starting with music, that was when he really learned about indie music, or rather, actually took the time to hear it, immediately becoming enthralled by it, next thing he knew, he had bought a guitar and did his best to play like the songs. Now, he had to change his attitude or make them think he had, so he lied and made it look as though he was a new person, he started to treat people with respect and hear them, advice them if they needed, and gain their trust. He was never a popular kid, but he didn’t that either, now, he had a group which accompanied him if needed.

When people learned to trust him and were fond of him, he started to let out little hints of his real self, remarks he did, comments, not many, but enough to grow them accustomed to them, he started dating some girls, and after some time, they would hook up, then the cycle would start again, but never did he damn them directly, he would play the situation so that it didn’t seem to be his fault. Why would he take all the time to act as someone else, to dominate a situation like this? His family could be the best answer, their approach to life, stuck on him in the end, even if he doesn’t acknowledge it, as they said to him so many years ago, only the strong survive.

Advantages: Charlie knows how to lie; he does it as easy as some others take a deep breath, and this has helped him in the past. Since his childhood, he has spent much time reading, and while many things may be bullshit, most of them aren’t, and some extra knowledge, always comes in handy. Finally, he knows he can’t do everything on his own and there is always someone else that can do it, it is all about finding that person.

Disadvantages: His breathing problem can come as an important problem if he has to run from somewhere, while he could keep going, chances are that he would black out or faint. He sometimes is very cold and is crude when saying something, this may seem harsh to someone and may give them the wrong idea.
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