Cactus
Mr. Danya
Joined: October 8th, 2006, 11:08 pm

September 8th, 2008, 11:59 pm #31

*cough* Adam/Keith/Wade/John *cough*

I'd include the others in there, but Ken and Mary did very little before their fairly spectacular (in comparison to their fairly banal existances), Ryan's been in a SCENE, and Dean hasn't appeared yet.
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Connor Lorenzen: When you're this good, image is everything.
Pregame: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - 5
Memories: 1

Morgan Dragosavich: Ahh, I'll figure shit out later. Let's go!
Pregame: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - 5
Memories: 1

Ross Miller: Just hangin' out, man.
Pregame: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4
Memories: 1 - 2

Claudeson Bademosi: It's a beautiful day, I think.
Pregame: 1 - 2
Memories: 1

Ariana Moretti: The verbal assassin.
Pregame: 1 - 2
Memories: 1
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B007 - Keith Jackson: At the end of the road he's running, looking back to survey where he's been.
B077 - Adam Dodd: You either die a hero, or live long enough to become the villain. The truth lies somewhere in between.
B087 - Sidney Crosby: It's only cowardice if other people are around to tell you so. Otherwise, it's survival.
B092 - Eddie Serjeantson: Fully in charge, but not much of an arborist.
B013 - Andrew Ponikarovsky: Probably could have used a proper license and a driving lesson.
G005 - Amanda Jones: A breath of fresh air, and in the end, that was all it took.
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B033 - Cole Hudson: Sprung a leak.
B011 - Adam Amato: Refused to besmirch those walls.
B099 - John Sheppard: Went out with a bang.
B122 - Ryan Atwell: Couldn't help but write a "Dear John" letter.
G034 - Jamie Li: Left us far before her time.
B011/99 - Burton Harris/Ken Lawson: The Kermit-squad.
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< | Angelina | Gilbert | Andrew | Art | Wade | Rupert | Mary | Alexander | Dean | Sarah | Zilya | Alicia | Staffan | Trent | Jodene | >
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Mrs. Ritch: Sweet Billy
The New Adventures of Ed-liver and Mike: Writing Essays and Making Pizza
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Ciel
Mr. Danya
Joined: May 26th, 2007, 12:17 am

September 9th, 2008, 12:20 pm #32

Wade - I like Wade much more than many of the other characters because HE, unlike all the other murderers who proclaim that they were forced when they really weren't, doesn't really have much of a choice. Most of his kills were unintentional (although you could say that he killed McKay in self-defense) and he actually regrets what happened, instead of wanting people to pity him simply in between slaughters.

Adam - I was kinda hoping Adam would be a little more active, not in rebelling against the game but just in general. He hasn't really done anything in about two months and that's disappointing. On the good side, he hasn't acted out of character at all which is better than what I can say.

Keith - Personally I don't like Keith at all, but as a character he is very down to earth. I think his paranoia (built from how many times he was attacked) is exactly how anyone else would react with the same shit on their plate. (I hope I worded that right >.<)

Jon - I haven't paid any attention to John Sheppard but from I've seen he was good.

However... what I think you should do (and you don't even have to listen to me because this is so trivial) is that if Wade hallucinates a cerebus or a zombie (or a boo of all things), he should at least mentally realize that what he is seeing could just be another student. I mean he can't just kill these things without thinking, he isn't stupid. Just a thought.

Yarrr. I shall critique the rest of your in a short while Adam: I'm at school so... heh. Don't exactly have the time to get creative. However, if anyone likes to take a stab at how my characters are doing then that's fine.

Dominica Shapiro
Brad Kavanagh
Madison Conner
Anna Kateridge

I'm not even counting Nutbrown because he's only had two posts to himself, and there's really no reason to go out of your way to say anything about Clive because... well, you should already know what my opinion about the character is because of how much I post as him.
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Super Llama
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Joined: July 20th, 2008, 3:52 am

September 9th, 2008, 6:45 pm #33

Ciel, at the moment, I'd have to say that Dominica and Anna have moved up to being my favorite characters of yours. I see Dominica sort of as the Spock of SADD (<__< shut up) except slightly evil, plus I love how she went from just another killer to what she is now. And I like how Anna is an oddball, but only subtly so. I'm finding it hard to predict how she'll be spending her time on the island.

And now for SL's big four:

-Laeil Burbank
-Noah Jacobs
-Hannah Rose
-Edgar Hoskins

Enough expository banter! Now we fight like men! And ladies! And ladies who dress like men! For Gilgamesh...it is MORPHIN' TIME!

V5 hopefuls:
Hiro Fukuyama: "N-n-no, I-I'm not scared."
Lucy Rosenberg: "If you're looking for friends, I don't think I can help you with that."
Angus McDonald: "To hell with you! If anyone here deserves to live, it's me!"

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Maria "Animal" Graham is dead at the Residential District.
Duncan McMahon is dead at the Residential District.
Sebastian Decartes is dead at the Infirmary.
Petrushka Ivanova is dead at the Groundskeeper's Hut.
banthesun wrote:She wanted those horrible metal balls to stop banging against her legs
ZombiexCreame wrote:But would Celeste even want help from a guy that whips out his pistol without a second thought?
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dinah_shore
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Joined: June 28th, 2008, 11:20 pm

September 9th, 2008, 11:37 pm #34

Holy Mother of Haggis!

What do Crash and I have to do for a bloody freakin' critique here?

Seriously guys Crash has asked for critiques on his characters countless times only to be mostly ignored. I'd crit them but he hears my opinion all the time anyways outside of the forum.

Actually, don't crit my characters yet. But crit his.

You BananaHeads.

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Super Llama
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Joined: July 20th, 2008, 3:52 am

September 10th, 2008, 3:20 am #35

I sorry. ;_;

I haven't really read much of your characters, except for Jake and Denise. And I've only really read Jake's death scene and Denise since she was in Sound and Fury.

I loved that part where Denise throttled the hell out of Shane, though (if only because he totally fucking deserved it for being so stupid.)

Enough expository banter! Now we fight like men! And ladies! And ladies who dress like men! For Gilgamesh...it is MORPHIN' TIME!

V5 hopefuls:
Hiro Fukuyama: "N-n-no, I-I'm not scared."
Lucy Rosenberg: "If you're looking for friends, I don't think I can help you with that."
Angus McDonald: "To hell with you! If anyone here deserves to live, it's me!"

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Maria "Animal" Graham is dead at the Residential District.
Duncan McMahon is dead at the Residential District.
Sebastian Decartes is dead at the Infirmary.
Petrushka Ivanova is dead at the Groundskeeper's Hut.
banthesun wrote:She wanted those horrible metal balls to stop banging against her legs
ZombiexCreame wrote:But would Celeste even want help from a guy that whips out his pistol without a second thought?
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dinah_shore
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Joined: June 28th, 2008, 11:20 pm

September 10th, 2008, 4:26 am #36

That's actually why I didn't want to be critiqued yet...my flagship is being really boring so far. (Also, Thanks!)

Okay Aaron.

Trish- No one actually likes Trish. Worst stock character ever IMHO.

Dorian- should be gay.

Lex- Your best character. Lex should win.

Jim- You do a great job accenting Jim's sex appeal, very effective.


This is just sad.
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Cactus
Mr. Danya
Joined: October 8th, 2006, 11:08 pm

September 10th, 2008, 4:36 am #37

*has critiqued both of you before, just for the record; hence, everyone else sucks*
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[+] Spoiler
Connor Lorenzen: When you're this good, image is everything.
Pregame: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - 5
Memories: 1

Morgan Dragosavich: Ahh, I'll figure shit out later. Let's go!
Pregame: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - 5
Memories: 1

Ross Miller: Just hangin' out, man.
Pregame: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4
Memories: 1 - 2

Claudeson Bademosi: It's a beautiful day, I think.
Pregame: 1 - 2
Memories: 1

Ariana Moretti: The verbal assassin.
Pregame: 1 - 2
Memories: 1
[+] Spoiler
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B007 - Keith Jackson: At the end of the road he's running, looking back to survey where he's been.
B077 - Adam Dodd: You either die a hero, or live long enough to become the villain. The truth lies somewhere in between.
B087 - Sidney Crosby: It's only cowardice if other people are around to tell you so. Otherwise, it's survival.
B092 - Eddie Serjeantson: Fully in charge, but not much of an arborist.
B013 - Andrew Ponikarovsky: Probably could have used a proper license and a driving lesson.
G005 - Amanda Jones: A breath of fresh air, and in the end, that was all it took.
[+] Spoiler
B033 - Cole Hudson: Sprung a leak.
B011 - Adam Amato: Refused to besmirch those walls.
B099 - John Sheppard: Went out with a bang.
B122 - Ryan Atwell: Couldn't help but write a "Dear John" letter.
G034 - Jamie Li: Left us far before her time.
B011/99 - Burton Harris/Ken Lawson: The Kermit-squad.
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< | Angelina | Gilbert | Andrew | Art | Wade | Rupert | Mary | Alexander | Dean | Sarah | Zilya | Alicia | Staffan | Trent | Jodene | >
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Mrs. Ritch: Sweet Billy
The New Adventures of Ed-liver and Mike: Writing Essays and Making Pizza
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