Woo more child murder! Reminds me of a couple months ago when a kid shot another kid near my school.
I'll admit I haven't read Adonis' (admittedly short) story, but I liked his death. In the scene leading up to the death I really liked the humor value of the minor confusion Adonis had over Joachim saying "mur-killers" and Adonis acting like he was tough shit when he began fighting/finished fighting Joachim. I liked how Aura wrote the sudden realization that Adonis was done for, and the jarring change from how he was acting just a post ago was handled well. I liked the thoughts of regret and that Aura didn't go for a "everything's okay" death (I hate "everything's okay" deaths). However, I really wish that Aura had done a bit more with the death; I can't name exactly how
it was lacking, but after reading it I felt as if something more could have been done (perhaps elaborating on feelings regarding the things Adonis thought about besides his regrets).
Only one for now because of time constraints I am under. Also, if I can make a little note to everyone: I would super duper appreciate it if people put their thoughts on my two characters
on the wiki. Nobody's obligated to but I really love getting people's thoughts so I can improve.