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Charming. And it kinda goes from there. I respect Cake's ability to make Miles seem real while also making him extremely vile. His high and mighty attitude is tempered with enough friendly moments to show that he's not some Chaotic Evil ignoramus doing bad things for the heck of it. Instead, he's a little politician, dissing folks when he can get away with it and otherwise exuding a kind of slimy chumminess that makes your skin crawl. It's to the point where his prom invitation, important and awkward affairs for Garrett and Maynard, was just him trying to win a pick-up contest. With every smug line or haughty gesture, he makes it more and more obvious that he's setting himself up for a fall, and it's going to be great!wrote:"Ugh. Smells like poor people."
I fell that shows a lot about Ruby just from implication, and I find that endearing. However, I will also note that a lot of problems with Ruby start with her profile, namely the latter half of her biography. About 4 paragraphs are dedicated to the relationship between Ruby and another character, Brian Zhandovich, which detail their friendship, dating period, and eventual break-up and reconciliation due to Ruby being a lesbian. The tricky dagger in this is largely the fact that Ruby and Brian are both written by Fiori, and this causes a lot of writing flubs down the line.wrote:upon reaching 11th grade she has began work on a novel which she has personally described as being a dark neo-noir murder mystery set during an alternate version of the 1970's with vampires.
Writing about a writer having writing problems in a writing forum? You're alright, Fiori.wrote:"To say that Ruby could be a somewhat critical person at times would be something of an understatement, and nowhere was this more true than when it came to her own work. To Ruby, what sounded like a cool and scary scene in her head just looked cliche and downright terrible on paper."
I predict this little moment here is from Fiori's history with V4, especially with how ammo was done back in those days. I just thought it was a nice little piece of history, and a little extra to how Ruby's handling of her firearm in this instance. So yeah, it's largely a good thread.wrote:Lets see... Five clips. Fifty bullets each, so thats about two-hundred and fifty overall. Have to make sure these count.
This is a rather quizzical piece, and I feel it shows a big detachment between a writer and their character - not just in the present state, but as a whole. The fact that Ruby lost her virginity to Brian is the strangest thing to emphasize a sentence that should be a defining statement. There are multiple options that could have been used in place of that (her best friend for several years, one of the few people who knows her deepest secret, the person who literally died taking a bullet for her). And, comparatively to most people still alive at this point, Ruby has shrugged off the more messed up events that have transpired thus far and she has an active hand in. Even as she's dying, It feels like I'm being led to believe it's been Ruby against the world this whole time, when in reality she's her own worst enemy.wrote:"No, I don't know what you've been through the past few days, but what I do know is that several days ago I saw the boy I lost my virginity to die right before my very eyes. That's not the kind of shit you can shrug off easily."
wrote:"Sounds to me like the only reason you want us to be your friends is so that you can have your own pair of personal bodyguards you could toss aside the moment you no longer need them."
wrote:"But how am I meant to know that you won't leave me for dead the moment you get the chance, just so you could get your hands on the gun you've been coveting since the moment we met? Useful ally or not, I cannot take that risk."
"You're all freaked about staying alive but there's no one in this immediate area who's going to kill us, and if there was, we'd be toast already, yeah?" Ian crossed his legs and sat on the ground in a firm, if foolish, decision. " Oh I don't know, someone with legs could walk up and kill you but what are the odds amirite?
.Ian wrote:"Sup Kat? I mean," he shrugged a bit sheepishly, "besides the obvious, I guess." He scratched the back of his neck, wondering why this whole thing felt so awkward. Ian wasn't terrible at the whole making-new-friends thing, and these weren't even new people just -- new circumstances, really. Awkward new circumstances. Ian wasn't going to kill anyone, he knew that much. There was no way he had the stomach for it. I might get desperate enough entered his mind, and he shooed it away
Ian wrote:It wasn't like he was in denial, or anything. Denial was pointless and ridiculous. There wasn't anyone who was going to rescue them, and there wasn't any way of stopping people from killing, so far as Ian could see. It was kill or be killed -- and Ian had cherry bombs, and James had Clue. What are you gonna do, someone comes and points a gun at you, shoots you in the head? There's nothing you can do.
Ian wrote:"You kill this early and people will call you on it! They'll hunt you!" He had no idea where the words were coming from, could follow no straight line of thought. "You gotta wait till there's no other option, that's the only safe way to do things!"
wrote:Werepuppyn - Today at 4:43 PM
"francis fell down the stairs and landed in a puddle of delicious cream of mushroom soup"
wrote:KLOUJI GINSENSHIHSNESNIG IJUOLK - Today at 4:45 PM
and then francis got eaten by a soup monster
THE END!wrote:Werepuppyn - Today at 4:46 PM
and that soup monster...... was KERMIT HIMSELF