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In a move that brings thoughts of Fiyori to mind, Mitch Gunther, leaps at her, biting her in the arm. She's pissed and slaps him, leaving for the infirmary with an overwrought line.Mitch wrote:RED CARD! Somebody stop this child molester!
Herein lies one of the big problems with Ali. There's a little too much focus on how beautiful she is, almost every sentence is laced with a descriptor of either her looks/ her ability to snatch men away. This really is a problem of Ali, most of the writing is good, but it often feels a need to overstate things that are already clear to the reader, or simply unnecessary for the current post. She uses the word 'muses' far too often, and other small things in the use of vocabulary that could be evocative if they weren't overdone. Still, it brings across her character fairly well, even if I feel that a lot of her lines are way over the top.Ali wrote:"I'll have you suspended for this, you know," she mused, no hint of remorse echoing in her words, "I don't think you understand who you're messing with. My Daddy's a senator, don't you know that I can pull the strings to get whatever I want? You people... I could make your lives a living hell. Remember that."
That doesn't add anything to what I want to say about Ali, but I just wanted to share that. Somehow Mariavel can't confirm the shot because Danya is speaking. It's amazing.Mariavel wrote:Shed never know if they hit Ali because the announcements came on after she shot.
this being in past tense makes me nervouswrote:Paris did have a brother though, his name was Andy.
i think paris might be an assassination roguewrote: A new ability Paris obtained was to listen to conversations unknowingly. Being stealthy and hidden; and he uses these materials to produce the deadliest venoms out there.
this is dumb. also paris is part hispanic and i'm just imagining trying to justify Persphone as a latino last name. this is also dumb.wrote:It is widely believed that Paris's last name was originally supposed to be "Persephone". Whether his handler, Strawberry_Prince, adapted the last name to "Persphone" to suit his tastes, or whether the spelling was simply a typo at first is unknown. Regardless, "Persphone" is the commonly accepted spelling of Paris's last name.
1. no one actually liking paris makes a hell of a lot more sense than the profile implication that he's Super Popularwrote:Unlike Paris though, people actually liked Taylor. People only sucked up to Paris because he could be the ultimate twat. Of course Taylor would have never let Paris know he thought this. The two were polar opposites but social equals none the less. Taylor had several one ups on Paris, but the leader of the so called Populars was not someone the pretty boy prince of Hobbsborough's sophomore set wanted to take on.
i know paris is part latino but he never speaks spanish anywhere else so this is hilarious to mewrote:He was tired, but he wouldn't rest until he had his venganza......Venganza......Venganza.....The word repeated in his mind.
brendan:wrote:Feelings. Who needs feelings? But this felt all too new to him. He was smart but in this kind of area he didn't know anything. Love was something that had never occured to him before, noone was ever intrested in him. Well they haven't really shown they were intrested, they probably were but they just didn't show it. How can anyone resist his charming looks?
basically these two were made for each other. their characters revolve around destroying the lives of others and not caring about people. it's Super romanticwrote:No, he was Brendan Xavier Snipes. He didnt have feelings, he was a cold, ruthless, rich-boy from england. He was the one people would cower of and admire at the same time. He was the one who could destroy a life with a phone call and rebuild one with a text message.
Since when did he care about anyone?
Well...apparently now. Feelings, who needs feelings?
presented without comment.wrote:After nearly three hours of phone calls, traveling across town and allowing a body-guard to beat the shit out of some drug dealer, Brendan had gotten the poison.
i don't know why i'm still surprised by paris's Complete lack of moral consideration and yet i am. probably because occasionally he'll display a Feeling for a second before being like nah nevermind its murder time. also im laughing at "Paris never really killed before"wrote: Looking around he suddenly saw another girl roaming about. Paris immediatly hid behind the corner of the stairwell; This was just perfect. Now he was trapped by both sides of the lobby, this greatly annoyed him. What was he to do now? Paris suddenly started calculating in his head, he devised a quick plot on how to deal with the girl and this situation he was in.
The knife in his hand shook as he was about to undertake this procedure. It was nervewrecking as Paris never really killed before.
im so tired. sometimes Strawberry Prince indicates that Paris is faking his emotions, but sometimes he doesn't, and i can't tell if i'm supposed to believe that he Did feel that and is being sociopathic again 10 seconds later, or if i was just supposed to intuit that he was faking. i don't know man. he drags anna out of the hotel and toward the park while thinking about how hes Totally gonna kill franco eventually.wrote:"Now lets go unless you want to end up like her." he whispered making a motion with his knife toward Brittany Ashworths body. Paris didn't plan on killing Anna she could be used as a shield or a way to escape out of other finite situations. He could kill Anna later when her body was too injured to keep up with his......traveling act.
wrote:Paris has officially checked out.
presented without comment other than this is hilariouswrote: The boy did have feelings for the populars, the people who've stood by him. They didn't deserve a death as gory as what he did to Brittany. They didn't deserve a to be bruttaly killed like the losers and nerds out there. Paris thought about this while nervously looking around waiting for something to happen as he would take refuge at a park.
Paris made up his mind, the next time he encounters someone that is popular he will give them a honorable death. He wasn't quite sure what an honorable death consited of or how it was accomplished. Maybe he should have payed more attention in history class. But definatly he would respect the fact a persons popular by the way he killed them. Sure it was sad, but he had to in order to survive. He had no other choice. That philosophy kept repeating inside his head over and over.
i'm sorry i keep quoting things but i cannot do this justicewrote:If he had the chance to kill this boy he would die the unpopular way. He obviously wasn't popular and dosn't deserve a clean or honorable death.
i have nothing to say to thiswrote:The boy started running, like a lancer would in the Crusades. Carrying his mighty lance Paris would arrive from the duel victorious!
wrote:Although people portray Paris as an evil person spawned from the devil he did have his values and morals
not the analogy i'd use to describe being drugged but you know what, sure.wrote: Paris started to feel exhausted, as if he'd been through a rough day at Disneyland. Walking from attraction to attraction.
how many titles do you even HAVEwrote:The Gossip King decided on some kind of ice breaker, hopefully this will get the ball rolling and the ice melting. Paris tried to become good, the good guy for once. Maybe being nice and kind will get you far? Then again so far acting like a goody goody made paris persphone the King of Mean positivley sick.
the best line in v2. don't bother disagreeing w/ me on this i will not budgewrote:"Well, Paris Persephone, the King of Gossip. We meet again."
wait so is he Not angry about SotF happening???????? uuuugh i know i'm repeating myself but like 90% of reading paris is just having no idea which of his emotions are real and which aren't. anyway paris decides that he likes Licinia because she's happy that a guy she hates is dead. in his paraphrased words, she's a loser, but the fact that she wanted revenge for what he did to her and has "the fire within her" is what Really counts. as stupid as this is i'm kind of happy that paris has found another human to interact with that might be interesting. then i notice on the wiki that he kills her. god fucking dammit pariswrote:Paris made a fist in his hand to show his apparent 'anger' to this inhumane campaign set off by the government.
Acting is reacting as they say.....
wrote:He wasn't a bad person, he was just a normal boy.
Being that half of her interests amount to "exacting revenge on people who have wronged her," I'll take the other three actual interests as the gift from god that they are. Kristey Burrowell is a tall girl, aged fourteen and in the ninth grade. She goes to P.J. Gilroy High School, and overall is somewhat average looking, with blond hair and blue eyes-Kristey has a profile wrote:Hobbies and Interests: Plotting, scheming, revenge, reading, studying, piano
I added the italics myself, to highlight the error here. I don't exactly know which one is canon yet, but the fact that this error managed to make its way through the critique process - or what little critique process there was, back in the day - doesn't really bode well for how the rest of the character will turn out.KRISTEY HAS A PROFILE wrote:Long, straight blonde hair, sometimes wears glasses, has blonde eyes, rather pale complexion, shoe size is female 8, light blue eyes
I guess the blue eyes are the canon ones. Neglected by her mother, who left another, older child with her birth father - whom she left after seven years - all she really knows about her mother is her pessimistic worldview. The only real influence on Kristey that has left is conservative values and right-wing views, though it has also made Kristey a more callous person. I'm guessing that in the years of V2, these two went hand in hand. Kristey also has no sexual desire whatsoever. Her mother's job, whatever it is, is good enough to afford a maid, a maid that Kristey renders obsolete by means of her own cleaning. Somehow, this intimidates the maid, but if I was the maid I'd spend my new free time cleaning out their fridge, or abusing whatever absurdly expensive television package they have.KRISTEY wrote:Kristey was always the tall, blonde haired, blue eyed bombshell, but she never fit the personality type associated with it.
I don't like this at all. Unexplained character relations, especially one as out of character for Kristey as this one, are forced and unrealistic. Unless some kind of relationship thread is hidden in the annals of the invisionfree board, I think that this not being explained is a pretty huge drawback, all things considered. I did some sleuthing through the site, actually, and while Xaldien had a thread in the pregame discussion section, it was for her other kid, so there's actually no documentation of any established relationship between these two kids.Wiki Page wrote:Kristey's relationship to Damien Carter-Madison and why she felt the need to protect him from the Valenti Syndicate in school is never explained in-game.
Marvin manages to break away to go to some other place, in order to "get to class" or something, while Kristey reminds him that eventually the two will have the talk she was aiming to have, but part of me is guessing that they never will. Oh well, it's not exactly the biggest missed opportunity, after all I've seen.Kristey wrote:"Did you eat a brain tumor for breakfast?"
Apparently this Renee girl is on some show or something, and most of the thread is spent with her mentally debating whether or not Kristey knows what this show is, while also running some insults at her that don't ever seem to land because for some reason Kristey figured out how to remain calm all of a sudden. Sticking up for Damien just compounds the weirdness here into a weird squishy ball of "Why are you doing what you're doing?" Kristey eventually gets up to leave, but first gets the address to a party from Renee, a party at Franco's place or something. Calls her Raggedy-Anne. Leaves. Meh.Chris D wrote:"Well, if it isn't the one who put the 'whore' back in 'horrible."
Kristey looks around for Peter in the Pagoda and manages to find him, because she lost him earlier while searching for Damien. In the meantime, she wrote her own name, Peter's, and Andi's onto the list, which is just kind of sick in my eyes. She adds Peter's name to get him onboard with the hunt, but Andi is only on there for her own personal game, and his addition to the list only works retroactively once she learns Peter's connection to Andi.LaZ pLeAsE wrote:((Cue the opening theme from Shadow of the Colossus...))
Speaking completely in character, it's all too likely that Kristey saved Mariavel's life, here. This alone is a cardinal sin, and not one I can altogether condone. However, I think it's funny that the first time I clicked the thread for Kristey, I scrolled through the whole thing and couldn't tell where she was, which kind of is telling to just how little she contributes here. She sneaks up on Chiaki, takes a punch, and then whacks her with a bat, strolling off into the distance. She returns now to the Pagoda, runs into this guy named John Davies, a guy who fancies himself a samurai. Standing off to the side, she watches as this guy takes off parts of his uniform, sitting down to rest. Seeing this completely boring guy who can't notice her for some reason reminds her of how much she wants to kill Damien, so she goes off and finds Damien next, because she should have just done that in the first place and spared herself the trouble of accidentally sort of saving Mariavel.Christ-y wrote:"It's very rude to eavesdrop."