Stacy Ramsey

Will
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Joined: January 24th, 2012, 7:55 pm

February 8th, 2012, 5:24 pm #1

Name: Stacy Ramsey
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Cheerleading, modelling, partying and gym.

Appearance: Stacy is 5’6” and weighs 125 pounds. She has long, slightly wavy, golden blond hair that falls down to just below her shoulder blades, with long, side swept bangs. Stacy has piercing emerald green eyes which are deep set and almond shaped. She has a clear complexion and an oval shaped face with a straight nose and full, pouty “duckbill” lips; because of this, there have been rumours around school that she has had lip augmentations. Stacy is very skinny with a slight tan to her skin. She has an hour glass shaped body and average sized breasts. With all of these factors combined she is seen as a very attractive girl. Stacy usually wears tight fitting, revealing clothes that enhance her figure, when not at school. She likes to wear makeup that boosts her beautiful facial features.

Biography: Stacy was born on the 9th of April 1994 to Samantha and Alex Ramsey. She has an older sister called Amy, who is 2 years older than Stacy and was born 3 weeks after Samantha and Alex’s wedding. Stacy was born two years after Samantha and Alex got married, when they were both 21, when they began to have marriage troubles due to continuous arguments. The birth of a new child was Samantha’s and Alex’s last chance to save their marriage in order to re-ignite their love for each other, and thankfully it did. However, over the years Samantha and Alex began to argue more again, which pains Stacy to watch as she hates to see her family falling apart. Luckily, with the help of Stacy’s sister, Amy, the family manages to defuse the arguments before they escalate into something more serious. In spite of this, Samantha’s and Alex’s marriage is slowly spiralling out of control again and Stacy has heard them talking about divorce.

When Stacy was 16 she was scouted by a modelling agency while shopping in a clothes shop in her local mall. She began to model for clothes magazines and has been doing it professionally ever since. However, she is not very well known as they are only small brands she models for, but she intends to model until she is internationally famous. Stacy’s parents are not very pleased with her modelling as they are afraid that if she becomes too well known, fame might go to her head and get herself into trouble. Stacy has always been proud of her modelling, especially as it’s the one thing her sister, Amy is jealous of.

Stacy adores her older sister, and considers Amy to be her best friend. They are often mistaken for being twins as they look almost exactly the same, as well has having an almost identical personality and interests. For example when Stacy and Amy were young they always used to practice cheerleading in their back garden. They both gained a passion for cheerleading when they saw a group of cheerleader performing in a football game that their dad was watching. Stacy loved the way they looked, how beautiful they were, and how they gracefully spun and flipped around the field. Since that day Stacy has loved cheerleading. When Stacy turned 17 Amy decided to take Stacy out clubbing with her. They both bought fake IDs and they managed to get into a club without any hassle. That night Stacy came back home drunk and threw up all over her bedroom floor; in the morning Stacy’s parents discovered what had happened and grounded her for a week, however this didn’t stop her from doing it again. Now, every weekend Stacy sneaks out of the house to meet up with Amy and go clubbing.

Amy is Stacy’s idol; ever since Stacy was young she has strived to be exactly like her sister, who has shaped her into the person she is today. When Stacy was 12 she began to wear makeup and revealing clothes when she saw her sister had started to wear them. At first, Stacy started to wear tight fitting clothes and a bit of lipstick, but as Amy began to start getting more courageous with her clothes so did Stacy. Stacy and Amy’s parents frown upon what they wear and they get into frequent arguments about it. Although Stacy and her parents often get into arguments they are still very close to each other. They are even closer now, since Amy moved out 5 months ago and Stacy has no one to spend time with at home, so she’s resorted to spending the majority of her time when she is at home with her parents. Every year Stacy and her family go on family holiday, which she greatly enjoys as she loves spending time with her sister and parents.

Due to Stacy’s good looks and choice of clothing, as soon as she joined Aurora High School she became one of the most popular girls in school. Stacy is one of the more flirtatious pupils at school and often leads on a lot of the boys in school. This flirtatious personality is once again a creation of her sister that came about after years of seeing Amy flirting with boys who she brought back to their house. Stacy is well aware of her good looks and uses them to her full potential. She if often known to use her good looks to seduce and manipulate boys into doing what she wants; doing this is one of the major contributions on how people view her in school. However, she doesn't give herself up easily or sleep around, so if someone wants to get into a sexual relationship they have to gain her respect. Because of the clothes she wears and because of her flirtatious personality, a lot of the other pupils at Aurora High School think that she is a slut. Whenever she hears people calling her a slut she sees it as a compliment as this is the exact angle she wants to be perceived in, although only in looks side of things; when they call her a slut due to her actions she gets deeply offended, as the people who call her this don’t know what she is really like. Stacy is actually a very kind and naturally smart person, and would never dream of being intentionally hurtful or horrible to someone. Stacy doesn’t like to show this side of herself to her friends in the fear that her peers might make fun of her for being a geek. Stacy is also a very sociable person and loves to go out with her friends to parties. Additionally she has little confidence when it comes to standing up to someone. This is the one thing Stacy is jealous of, as her sister can easily stand up to people without batting an eyelid. As hard as she tries to be like Amy in this area of her personality, Stacy can never seem to gather up enough courage to stand up to someone.

As a result of hiding her intelligence she doesn’t do well in classes at school. Stacy has done this ever since she first joined Aurora High School and became part of the popular clique; she’d seen how some people in her school had made fun of people for being too smart in classes and didn’t want this to happen to her, so she decided to act dumb. In order to hide her intelligence during class, she often talks during class and doesn’t complete work set for her. Furthermore, due to not completing work in class and frequent talking she regularly gets detentions. Consequently, the teachers at Aurora High School have to occasionally have to ring up Stacy’s parents to complain about her behaviour at school. This leads to more arguments between Stacy and her parents about why she does so badly at school. Stacy has yet to tell her parents why she does so badly at school, as she thinks that her reason is a stupid reason to do badly at school and that her parents wouldn’t understand. Stacy has a love/hate relationship with school. She loves the fact that she gets to hang out with her friends and goof off with them, but she hates how she can’t be herself during class, and that she always gets into trouble with the teachers because of it. As soon as she joined Aurora High School Stacy joined the schools cheerleading team, which she greatly enjoys; as a result her favourite class at school is gym, which is the only class that Stacy actually tries to do well in and doesn’t goof off. Stacy doesn’t enjoy any of her other classes. This is due to the fact that she doesn’t want to show much intelligence in fear her friends will make fun of her. Stacy would enjoy more of her lessons if she didn’t have to act stupid in almost all of all of them.

Advantages: As Stacy is a cheerleader, so she is very agile. She could also use her good looks and flirtatious personality to manipulate boys into protecting her.
Disadvantages: Although Stacy is a kind person not many people outside her friendship group know this, so people may only see her as a stereotypical manipulative, popular slut and attack her on sight. As Stacy has trouble standing up to people this could come at a disadvantage to her when she is faced against another people who are willing to kill her.
V6 Characters:
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----Cassandra "Cassie" Venus--------------------------------Eleanor "Elle" Duval----------
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--------B011: Finn Grant ------------------------------------- G020: Stacy Ramsey------
----------Weapon: Megaphone--------------------------Weapon: Bryan Calvert's SPAS-12
---------------------------Multishot---------------------------------------------- Caught in a Moment-------------------
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Finn Grant: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12
Stacy Ramsey: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9
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ifnotwinter
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Joined: April 6th, 2009, 5:22 pm

February 11th, 2012, 1:21 am #2

Hi again, Will. You're got a really good start here but I do have just a few edits I'd like you to make before Stacy slips through into pregame. My comments and requested edits will be in orange.
wrote:Name: Stacy Ramsey
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Cheerleading (School's cheerleading team) you don't need to have the text in parentheses there, it can just be 'Cheerleading' , modelling, partying and gym.

Appearance: Stacy is 5'62" she's five foot 62 inches? I'm assuming you mean either 6" or 2" -- if it's 6", please raise the weight accordingly and weighs 115 pounds. She has long, slightly wavy, golden blond hair that falls down to just below her shoulder blades, with long, side swept bangs. Stacy has piercing emerald green eyes which are deep set and almond shaped. She has a clear complexion and an oval shaped face with a straight nose and full, pouty "duckbill" lips; because of this, there have been rumours around school that she has had lip augmentations. Stacy is very skinny with a slight tan to her skin. She has an hour glass hourglass shaped body and C cup breasts Those are fairly large for a skinny person. We don't actually need cup size either, just small, average, or large works if it matters to the profile.. With all of these factors combined she is seen as being amongst the prettiest girls in Aurora High School I'd make this a little more neutral, as I've seen huge amounts of profile so far where someone is 'among the prettiest' or whathaveyou. "factors combined she is a very attractive girl" might work better.. Stacy usually wears tight fitting, revealing clothes that enhance her figure. There's a limit to how revealing her clothes can be at school. Maybe clarify that as "when not in school". She likes to wear makeup that boosts her beautiful facial features. During the abduction, Stacy is wearing black hot pants, a white tank top, a push up bra, a black cardigan and black sneakers. You can take this out and replace it when you apply for v5 proper.

Biography: Stacy was born on the 9th of April 1994 to Samantha and Alex Ramsey. She has an older sister called Amy, who is 2 years older than Stacy and was born 3 weeks after Samantha and Alex's wedding. Stacy was born two years after Samantha and Alex got married, when they were both 21, when they began to have marriage troubles, no comma due to continuous arguments. The birth of a new child was Samantha's and Alex's last chance to save their marriage in order to re-ignite their love for each other, and thankfully it did. However, over the years Samantha and Alex began to argue more again, which pains Stacy to watch as she hates to see her family falling apart. Luckily, with the help of Stacy's sister, Amy, the family manage to defuse the arguments before they escalate into something more serious. This is...a little strange. Their marriage isn't going well, so they decide to have another child. Fair enough, I've known people to make that (bad) decision. Somehow that helps, but their marriage then begins to fall apart again, but the kids keep it together? Generally when a marriage is failing, the kids involved aren't going to be able to save it. I would clarify or even just remove this.

Stacy adores her older sister, and considers Amy to be her best friend. They are often mistaken for being twins as they look almost exactly the same, as well has having an almost exact awkward syntax, 'identical' might work better personality. Amy is Stacy's idol; ever since Stacy was young she has strived to be exactly like her sister, who has shaped her into the person she is today. Stacy began to wear makeup and revealing clothes when she saw her sister had started to wear them when Stacy was 10 Again, awkward syntax. "When Stacy was 10 she began to wear..." might work better.. At first, Stacy started to wear tight fitting clothes and a bit of lipstick, but as Amy began to start getting more courageous with her clothes so did Stacy. At ten years old Stacy was wearing 'tight fitting clothes' and lipstick? She's not even close to going through puberty; while I understand she was imitating her sister I still might up the age a little bit. Stacy and Amy's parents frown upon what they wear and they get into frequent arguments about it. Although Stacy and her parents often get into arguments they are still very close to each other. They are even closer now, since Amy moved out 5 months ago and Stacy has no one to spend time with at home, so she's resorted to spending the majority of her time when she is at home with her parents. Every year Stacy and her family go on family holiday, which she greatly enjoys as she loves spending time with her sister and parents. This is all good detail, but I'd like it to be a little more chronological. That's actually my biggest issue with the profile -- it's very good, but the information is all spread around. Your Biography section should be basically chronological, moving from birth to present day and making sure to include detail about childhood. You have detail about her childhood, but it's scattered all over the bio. Please reorganize it so it's a linear flow of information.

Due to Stacy's good looks and choice of clothing, as soon as she joined Aurora High School she became one of the most popular girls in school. As a result of her popularity she became a part of the popular clique of people in school This sentence is pretty redundant, you can just remove it.. Stacy is one of the more flirtatious pupils at school and often leads on a lot of the boys in school. This flirtatious personality is once again a creation of her sister please explain this. Stacy is well aware of her good looks and uses them to her full potential. She if often known to use her good looks to seduce and manipulate boys into doing what she wants; doing this is one of the major contributions on how people view her in school how do they view her in school?. However, she doesn't give herself up easily or sleep around, so if someone want's no apostrophe to get into a relationship consisting of sex kind of weird phrasing, makes it sound like a sex-only FWB situation. Maybe 'a sexual relationship' would be better. they have to gain her respect. Because of the clothes she wears and because of her flirtatious personality, a lot of the other pupils at Aurora High School think that she is a slut. Whenever she hears people calling her a slut she sees it as a complement compliment as this is the exact angle she wants to be perceived in So she wants to be viewed as someone who sleeps with many boys and has loose morals? And considering girls are obviously taunting her, how is she able to just brush it off?. However, she is also a very kind and naturally smart person, and would never dream of being intestinally intentionally (intesinally = having to do with intestines) hurtful or horrible to someone. Stacy doesn't like to show this side of herself to her friends in the fear that her peers might make fun of her for being a geek because she's smart and nice? That doesn't make a lot of sense.. Stacy is also a very sociable person and loves to go out with her friends to parties. Additionally she is also a not very confident person 'has little confidence' might be better when it comes to standing up to someone. This is the one thing that Stacy is jealous of about her sister's personality, "This is the one thing Stacy is jealous of, as her sister can easily stand up to people without batting an eyelid. who can so easily stand up to people without battering an eyelid. As hard as she tries to be like Amy in this area of her personality, Stacy can never seem to gather up enough courage to stand up to someone.

As a result of hiding her intelligence she doesn't do well in classes at school. This comes a little out of left field. So she hides her intelligence for fear that people will call her a geek? How long has she done this?In order to hide her intelligence during class, she often talks during class and doesn't complete work set for her. Furthermore, due to not completing work in class and frequent talking she regularly gets detentions. Consequently, the teachers at Aurora High School have to occasionally have to ring up Stacy's parents to complain about her behaviour at school. This leads to more arguments between Stacy and her parents about why she does so badly at school. Stacy has yet to tell her parents why she does so badly at school, as she thinks that her reason is a stupid reason to do badly at school and that her parents wouldn't understand. Stacy has a love/hate relationship with school. She loves the fact that she gets to hang out with her friends and goof off with them, but she hates how she can't be herself during class, and that she always gets into trouble with the teachers because of it. Stacy is part of the cheerleading team at Aurora High School; as a result her favourite class at school is gym, which is the only class that Stacy actually tries to do well in and doesn't goof off. Her least favourite class in school is all of the other classes apart from gym. Just say that she doesn't enjoy any other classes. This is due to the fact that she doesn't want to show much intelligence in fear her friends will make fun of her. Stacy would enjoy more lessons if she didn't have to act stupid in almost all of all of...? Also, this should be up with the section about her schooling, not the section about her cheerleading..

Stacy's hobbies are cheerleading, modelling and partying. The reason for her having these hobbies is again down to the fact that Stacy dreams to be just like her sister, Amy. When Stacy and Amy were young they always used to practice cheerleading in their back garden. They both gained a passion for cheerleading when they saw a group of cheerleader performing in a football game that their dad was watching. Stacy loved the way they looked, how beautiful they were, and how they gracefully span spun and flipped around the field. Since that day Stacy has loved cheerleading. As soon as she joined Aurora High School Stacy joined the schools cheerleading team, which she greatly enjoys. When Stacy was 16 she was scouted by a modelling agency while shopping in a clothes shop in her local mall. She began to model for clothes magazines and has been doing so ever since for 2 years. Stacy has always been proud of her modelling, especially as it's the one thing her sister, Amy is jealous of. Hobbies/Interests should be integrated into the biography, not lumped all together in their own section. This kind of goes with the 'chronological order' issue. Also, is she modelling professionally? How has this affected her? Does she want to do it forever? What do her parents think of it? Is she well known? This is a big deal and should be elaborated one. When Stacy turned 17 Amy decided to take Stacy out clubbing with her How? Amy's only 19, and legal drinking age is 21. Does she have a fake ID too?. They made Stacy a fake ID and they managed to get into a club without any hassle. That night Stacy came back home drunk and threw up all over her bedroom floor; in the morning Stacy's parents discovered what had happened and grounded her for a week, however this didn't stop her from doing it again. Now, every weekend Stacy sneaks out of the house to meet up with Amy and go clubbing.

Advantages: As Stacy is a cheerleader, so she is very agile. She could also use her good looks and flirtatious personality to manipulate boys into protecting her.
Disadvantages: Although Stacy is a kind person not many people outside her friendship group know this, so people may only see her as a stereotypical manipulative, popular slut and attack her on sight. Some of the other girls at Aurora High School may be jealous of Stacy's good looks and frown upon Stacy's sluttiness, so they may turn on her. The second sentence is pretty much saying the same thing as the first, so I'd remove it. I think she has other disadvantages though...what about her inability to stand up to people?
I know it looks like a lot, but I think these edits can be completed relatively easily. Once that's done, post here and I'll happily give her another look! Please PM if you have any questions or concerns about the edits I'm asking you to make.

marc st. yves
light it up or burn it down we'll all die in fire
{food for thought}

phineas rosario
fall down seven times stand up eight
sebastian conway
can't see the forest for the trees
{book of sparrows}
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(so you've got to keep in mind, when you try to change the world for the better not everybody's gonna be on your side)
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Will
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Joined: January 24th, 2012, 7:55 pm

February 11th, 2012, 2:56 pm #3

Hi again! Edited now, I think I did everything you said, the height thing was just a mistake, I must have released the shift key before I hit the 2 making it a 2 instead of a ". That thing about the intentionally and intestinally thing made me laugh so much, I have no idea how it came out like that. Also sorry about the what she was wearing on the day of abduction and the hobbies paragraph, it said to include it in appearance so I was just copying that and it said about a paragraph including interests so i just bundled them all together. I tried my best to put it all in chronological order but there still might be some things out of place.
V6 Characters:
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----Cassandra "Cassie" Venus--------------------------------Eleanor "Elle" Duval----------
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--------B011: Finn Grant ------------------------------------- G020: Stacy Ramsey------
----------Weapon: Megaphone--------------------------Weapon: Bryan Calvert's SPAS-12
---------------------------Multishot---------------------------------------------- Caught in a Moment-------------------
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Finn Grant: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12
Stacy Ramsey: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9
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ifnotwinter
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Joined: April 6th, 2009, 5:22 pm

February 14th, 2012, 6:06 am #4

Great work, and we're almost there -- I just have a couple small things.

One is that I highly doubt her and her sister would be able to make fake IDs sufficiently 'real' enough to get them into the clubs. Maybe mention that they bought them or use the IDs of friends who look a lot like them.

The other is that you mention things happening when she's seventeen (clubbing) before she's sixteen (modelling). Reverse the order, and we should be good to go!

marc st. yves
light it up or burn it down we'll all die in fire
{food for thought}

phineas rosario
fall down seven times stand up eight
sebastian conway
can't see the forest for the trees
{book of sparrows}
[/center][/center]
(so you've got to keep in mind, when you try to change the world for the better not everybody's gonna be on your side)
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Will
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Joined: January 24th, 2012, 7:55 pm

February 14th, 2012, 10:36 am #5

Ok, edited.
V6 Characters:
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----Cassandra "Cassie" Venus--------------------------------Eleanor "Elle" Duval----------
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--------B011: Finn Grant ------------------------------------- G020: Stacy Ramsey------
----------Weapon: Megaphone--------------------------Weapon: Bryan Calvert's SPAS-12
---------------------------Multishot---------------------------------------------- Caught in a Moment-------------------
[+] Spoiler
Finn Grant: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12
Stacy Ramsey: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9
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ifnotwinter
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Joined: April 6th, 2009, 5:22 pm

February 14th, 2012, 8:44 pm #6

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marc st. yves
light it up or burn it down we'll all die in fire
{food for thought}

phineas rosario
fall down seven times stand up eight
sebastian conway
can't see the forest for the trees
{book of sparrows}
[/center][/center]
(so you've got to keep in mind, when you try to change the world for the better not everybody's gonna be on your side)
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