Roy Davis

Some Guy
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Joined: May 22nd, 2015, 7:34 am

May 26th, 2015, 9:17 pm #1

Name: Roy Davis
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Grade: 11th
School: Cochise High School
Hobbies and Interests: climbing, gambling, old sitcoms

Appearance: Roy is 5'8 and weighs 132 pounds. He is wiry but well muscled, especially in the forearms, with an acquired tan. His hands are callused and his body well scarred.

Roy's face is of a triangular shape, his energetic brown eyes flanking a medium sized nose that shows the tweaks that come with multiple breaks. His upper lip is covered with a mustache kept perpetually in a stage of stubble. His shaggy, yet not long, brown hair is messily combed to the side with practiced fingers, though it's uncommon for it not to be hidden under a hat.

Roy tries to dress professionally when not on a climbing excursion, tending to wear short sleeve button ups, accompanied by narrow ties and clean jeans. His attempts at formality are stymied however, by his ragged, dirty adidas and his red and white trucker's hat.

Biography: Danny Davis met Lily Jones when she, a lawyer who had just moved to Kingman for work, brought her car into his mechanic's shop for repairs. Danny offered to trade the work for a dinner, Lily accepted, and they began dating. Three years later they were married.

Roy was born two years later. His early years went great, he was a happy, bright child. His parent's similarly thrived; his father opened two more repair stores and his mother was getting higher profile cases.

Everything changed when Roy was 4. His parents were driving home from a party christmas eve when their car was struck by a drunk driver, killing them both on impact. Roy's christmas gift was months of being shuffled between family members.

Ultimately, Roy ended up in the custody of his uncle Tony Davis. Tony was an insurance salesman without a family of his own, the challenge of raising Roy was an unexpected and unwanted surprise.

Luckily, it turned out Tony needed a family just as much as Roy did. Roy quickly bonded with his uncle, they became like father and son rather than blood-tied strangers. As a child he tried to imitate Tony, he tried to dress as formally as his uncle, and instead of waiting for saturday morning cartoons, Roy looked forward to watching reruns of old sitcoms with his uncle after work.

Elementary school was exciting for Roy. While not gifted intellectually, he quickly made friends of teacher and student alike. Grade school was also when he was introduced to one of his great passions. During 5th grade Tony took Roy with him on one of his monthly climbing trips. That first trip up the Hualapai mountains was more of a casual hike. Regardless, when Roy reached Aspen peak, and saw the landscape far below him, he was hooked.

Tony was soon forced to change his plans to accommodate biweekly climbs. At Roy's insistence they swarmed up steeper and more dangerous routes. By 8th grade Roy had surpassed Tony, a lifelong climber himself, and was leading their way up the mountainside. In his enthusiasm Roy would often cut himself multiple times on a climb, only noticing his injuries when he reached the peak.

When Roy entered Cochise High he continued to underachieve, receiving Ds and Cs in most subjects. In his own eyes however, he was thriving. Roy had taken up free climbing, and had successfully climbed to Hualapai Peak, the highest point in the area, without assistance from ropes or any safety apparati.

Freshman year was also pivotal for Roy in that he reconnected with another member of his family. The last time Roy had seen his maternal grandfather was at his parent's funeral, a hazy memory for the teenage Roy. Lawrence Jones, Larry to his friends, had not taken his daughter and son-in-law's death well. His wife had passed peacefully a few years earlier and there wasn't anyone to prevent his imminent nosedive. Larry's next decade was spent in the bottle, a friend that helped him forget. He had tried to contact Roy a couple of times throughout the years but it wasn't until Roy's 15th birthday, when he arrived sober and bearing gift, that he actually started a relationship with his grandson.

Larry moved to nearby Laughlin, and made his money as a gambler. On the weekends when Roy wasn't climbing he would go stay with his grandfather. They talked about many things, such as politics, business and Roy's parents. Eventually Larry started taking Roy, unbeknownst to his uncle, to less than legal private poker tournaments. While he originally was just a spectator, after a while Roy convinced his grandfather to allow him to play. Roy found that winning a hand of poker gave him the same thrill as climbing did, his new hobby found a place next to climbing in his mind and schedule.

As Roy enters his junior year he is enjoying life. He continues to pursue climbing and play cards. He is content to fly under the radar grade wise. All in all Roy is living in the moment rather than living for tomorrow.

Advantages: Roy is physically fit and comfortable with danger due to his climbing experience, additionally his card playing had given him the ability to read people.
Disadvantages: Roy is not motivated in most activities, nor is he book smart. Also his pursuit of adrenaline may lead him into damaging situation.

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MK Kilmarnock
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Joined: April 14th, 2009, 10:12 pm

May 26th, 2015, 10:13 pm #2

Hi, Some Guy! Welcome to Survival of the Fittest. Before the staff can take a look at Roy, his profile needs to fit our template for character registration exactly as shown here.

Specifically, colons are needed after headers, the Appearance section should start immediately after 'Appearance:' (as in, on the same line without pressing enter first), and there should not be an extra space between the Advantages and Disadvantages sections.

When you've fixed that up, post here letting us know and we'll get to work as soon as we can!
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Joined: May 22nd, 2015, 7:34 am

May 26th, 2015, 11:37 pm #3

Name: Roy Davis
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Grade: 11th
School: Cochise High School
Hobbies and Interests: climbing, gambling, old sitcoms

Appearance: Roy is 5'8 and weighs 132 pounds. He is wiry but well muscled, especially in the forearms, with an acquired tan. His hands are callused and his body well scarred.

Roy's face is of a triangular shape, his energetic brown eyes flanking a medium sized nose that shows the tweaks that come with multiple breaks. His upper lip is covered with a mustache kept perpetually in a stage of stubble. His shaggy, yet not long, brown hair is messily combed to the side with practiced fingers, though it's uncommon for it not to be hidden under a hat.

Roy tries to dress professionally when not on a climbing excursion, tending to wear short sleeve button ups, accompanied by narrow ties and clean jeans. His attempts at formality are stymied however, by his ragged, dirty adidas and his red and white trucker's hat.

Biography: Danny Davis met Lily Jones when she, a lawyer who had just moved to Kingman for work, brought her car into his mechanic's shop for repairs. Danny offered to trade the work for a dinner, Lily accepted, and they began dating. Three years later they were married.

Roy was born two years later. His early years went great, he was a happy, bright child. His parent's similarly thrived; his father opened two more repair stores and his mother was getting higher profile cases.

Everything changed when Roy was 4. His parents were driving home from a party christmas eve when their car was struck by a drunk driver, killing them both on impact. Roy's christmas gift was months of being shuffled between family members.

Ultimately, Roy ended up in the custody of his uncle Tony Davis. Tony was an insurance salesman without a family of his own, the challenge of raising Roy was an unexpected and unwanted surprise.

Luckily, it turned out Tony needed a family just as much as Roy did. Roy quickly bonded with his uncle, they became like father and son rather than blood-tied strangers. As a child he tried to imitate Tony, he tried to dress as formally as his uncle, and instead of waiting for saturday morning cartoons, Roy looked forward to watching reruns of old sitcoms with his uncle after work.

Elementary school was exciting for Roy. While not gifted intellectually, he quickly made friends of teacher and student alike. Grade school was also when he was introduced to one of his great passions. During 5th grade Tony took Roy with him on one of his monthly climbing trips. That first trip up the Hualapai mountains was more of a casual hike. Regardless, when Roy reached Aspen peak, and saw the landscape far below him, he was hooked.

Tony was soon forced to change his plans to accommodate biweekly climbs. At Roy's insistence they swarmed up steeper and more dangerous routes. By 8th grade Roy had surpassed Tony, a lifelong climber himself, and was leading their way up the mountainside. In his enthusiasm Roy would often cut himself multiple times on a climb, only noticing his injuries when he reached the peak.

When Roy entered Cochise High he continued to underachieve, receiving Ds and Cs in most subjects. In his own eyes however, he was thriving. Roy had taken up free climbing, and had successfully climbed to Hualapai Peak, the highest point in the area, without assistance from ropes or any safety apparati.

Freshman year was also pivotal for Roy in that he reconnected with another member of his family. The last time Roy had seen his maternal grandfather was at his parent's funeral, a hazy memory for the teenage Roy. Lawrence Jones, Larry to his friends, had not taken his daughter and son-in-law's death well. His wife had passed peacefully a few years earlier and there wasn't anyone to prevent his imminent nosedive. Larry's next decade was spent in the bottle, a friend that helped him forget. He had tried to contact Roy a couple of times throughout the years but it wasn't until Roy's 15th birthday, when he arrived sober and bearing gift, that he actually started a relationship with his grandson.

Larry moved to nearby Laughlin, and made his money as a gambler. On the weekends when Roy wasn't climbing he would go stay with his grandfather. They talked about many things, such as politics, business and Roy's parents. Eventually Larry started taking Roy, unbeknownst to his uncle, to less than legal private poker tournaments. While he originally was just a spectator, after a while Roy convinced his grandfather to allow him to play. Roy found that winning a hand of poker gave him the same thrill as climbing did, his new hobby found a place next to climbing in his mind and schedule.

As Roy enters his junior year he is enjoying life. He continues to pursue climbing and play cards. He is content to fly under the radar grade wise. All in all Roy is living in the moment rather than living for tomorrow.

Advantages: Roy is physically fit and comfortable with danger due to his climbing experience, additionally his card playing had given him the ability to read people.
Disadvantages: Roy is not motivated in most activities, nor is he book smart. Also his pursuit of adrenaline may lead him into potentially harmful situations.

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MK Kilmarnock
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Joined: April 14th, 2009, 10:12 pm

May 27th, 2015, 12:08 am #4

Apologies, I feel like I should clear up some confusion.

Your edits should be made to the first post of the thread, and then you post telling us that you made the edits and we take another look. On the bright side, you seem to be mostly conforming to the template now.

Go ahead and just fix that up for me.
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Coleen Reagan - The girl who half-loved the world
[+] Spoiler
V5 Roster:
Cody Patton : That bitch.
Sean Mulcahy : The world was kind to reprieve him of his fear...
Jessica Sanders: She hoped it would be quick...
[+] Spoiler
20:17Sideliner:Toben and Ricky are like a sibling version of the Joker and Batman, only Batman is just as much of a mass murderer. He just hides it better.
19:58LaurelsHow does your dick smell like Fritos?
14:36 MimiI THOUGHT YOU GUYS WERE FRIENDS > 14:36MimiI THOUGHT YOU REALLY LICKED HER
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Joined: May 22nd, 2015, 7:34 am

May 27th, 2015, 12:39 am #5

Done. Sorry about my messups.
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May 27th, 2015, 4:55 pm #6

Edit complete.
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MurderWeasel
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Joined: February 18th, 2009, 7:01 am

June 8th, 2015, 12:01 am #7

Heya, Some Guy, and welcome to SOTF! Sorry this took so long to get to; it's been a very busy time for staff with the end of the school year.

Roy's profile is a really good start, but he is DENIED pending some edits and fleshing out.

How long is Roy's hair? I'd also like just a bit more facial description from him--a nose size and face shape are good, but I'd like to know just a little more. How are his teeth? What are his eyebrows like?

Button-ups aren't too unusual, but wearing a tie to school is really strange. Why does he go above and beyond to that extent, especially given the undercutting you mention afterwards? Alternately, a ditching of the tie would take care of most of my concerns there.

I'd like a little more information on Roy's mother moving to Kingman for work. Kingman actually has below-average job prospects for lawyers, which makes it a somewhat odd destination for her. Also, where did his father open up the other repair shops?

I'm pretty uncertain about the death of Roy's parents. It's a really big thing to happen, especially at such a young age, and it raises a lot of questions about Roy's life growing up. How did he feel about the situation, both at the time and as he grew old enough to understand it? Who ended up in charge of his father's shops? Why did his family settle on his uncle as his caretaker? How did that work out on a practical level? Since his uncle has a career that often requires a lot of travelling, it strikes me as potentially quite difficult for him to juggle caring for Roy with actually keeping up with his work.

The biggest thing here, though, is that the deaths of Roy's parents don't seem to have much of an effect on him or his life experience beyond pushing him into the care of his uncle, who very quickly becomes basically his father anyways. I wonder, therefore, whether Roy's story might be a little more grounded and less complicated if Tony was his father. You absolutely don't have to go this way if it doesn't fit your vision of Roy, but the death of one or both of a character's parents is a big deal and tends to need some pretty serious exploration, and in this case I'm not really seeing too much impact from it on Roy or his story and so wonder whether it's a necessary element.

I'd like a bit more information about Roy's growing hiking/climbing interest. It seems a little odd that he wouldn't have better safety training, especially since Tony is an experienced climber himself. I'd also like to get a slightly clearer picture of what it is that Roy and Tony are into. Are they full-out rock climbing, or just going on intense hikes? Often the same trails allow for both options. Finally, I'd like to explicitly know a bit more about what about climbing appeals to Roy. Is it the adrenaline (as is suggested elsewhere)? The chance to spend time with his uncle? The beauty of nature? Some combination thereof?

I'd like to know a bit more about Roy's gambling and his grandfather, especially in light of his age--even in an underground scene, the legal risks of involving minors are notable. Did this concern his grandfather? Also, which side of the family is Tony from? Is Larry his father, or a near-stranger?

That aside, the biggest things I'd like to see are more details on parts of Roy's life not touched on so far. Who are Roy's friends at school? How does he act around them? Is there anyone he doesn't get along with? How does he feel about his academic struggles? Are there any classes he does better in? Any in which he particularly struggles? Has his relationship with his uncle changed over the years in any notable ways? Does he have any aspirations for or concerns about his future, especially since college may not be on the table due to his grades?

Roy's danger-seeking could be expanded a bit. I'm also not totally sold on it as a disadvantage, because SOTF is very different from even a super intense hike. There's a big difference between seeking out danger in a scary yet largely-controlled situation and taking unneeded risks in an already incredibly risky set of circumstances. It doesn't necessarily have to go, but I'd like to hear a lot more about it at least.

And a bit of grammar:

"Christmas" and "Christmas Eve" should be capitalized, since they're proper nouns.

"Ultimately, Roy ended up in the custody of his uncle Tony Davis. Tony was an insurance salesman without a family of his own, the challenge of raising Roy was an unexpected and unwanted surprise." -> "Ultimately, Roy ended up in the custody of his uncle, Tony Davis. Tony was an insurance salesman without a family of his own, and the challenge of raising Roy was an unexpected and unwanted surprise."

"Hualapai mountains" -> "Hualapai Mountains" and "Aspen peak" -> "Aspen Peak"

Post when you've got that all taken care of, and I'll give Roy another look. I just want to say again here that Roy's profile is a great start, especially for a first character, and I think once you've got everything hammered out he'll be in really good shape. The core of his concept is really interesting, and I'm eager to see where you take him.
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MurderWeasel
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Joined: February 18th, 2009, 7:01 am

June 23rd, 2015, 4:05 am #8

This character biography has had no alterations for more than two weeks and has been put in the abandoned characters forum. This profile is eligible for resubmission by the handler upon alterations requested by the staff.
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