Janie Sinneave

Joined: June 30th, 2010, 10:06 pm

April 27th, 2012, 4:16 am #1

Name: Janie Sinneave
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Grade: Senior
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Horseback riding, grunge and punk rock, animal rights

Appearance: Janie is a small girl, standing at 5'0 and 103 pounds. She has pale skin, with a small smattering of freckles across the bridge of her nose. Her naturally light-blonde hair is cut into a Chelsea (long bangs, but a close crop cut or shaved cut over the rest of the head). She has small, round blue eyes, and long eyelashes that she accentuates with dark mascara and heavy eyeliner. She wears a pair of cats-eye glasses due to the fact that she is somewhat cross-eyed. She has naturally high cheekbones, and a thin, heart-shaped face. She wears pink gloss on her lips at almost all times. Janie sports two studs in both of her ears (one gold ball and one small diamond), as well as an industrial piercing in her right ear.

Janie has a pretty casual style of dress. On most school-days she wears basic dark skinny jeans and graphic tees. She also enjoys wearing leggings, t-shirt dresses, and belts. Her favorite outfit is a dark brown t-shirt dress with lighter brown lace patterning, a thick black belt, and black leggings. Janie is never seen without her favorite pair of combat boots, which she found at a thrift store her sophomore year. She usually sports a series of gold, black, and silver bangles on her left wrist.

Biography: Janie was born to Victor and Molly Sinneave, their second of three children. Her siblings were both three years apart from her- Thomas being the oldest, and Samantha being the youngest. From an early age, Janie had what her father liked to call "middle child syndrome." Next to Thomas, a troublemaker who was perpetually in detention, and Sam, a straight-a student with mood swings, Janie was relatively normal. This had the unfortunate side effect of taking most of her family's attention away from her. Further, almost all of her teachers expected her to be exactly like Thomas, which left Janie searching for an identity separate from her siblings'.

At age six, Janie joined dance classes at the local YMCA. Within three weeks, she dropped out, instead opting for a karate class. She dropped this, too, after suffering a minor bruise and deciding she had a very low threshold for pain. Janie was easily bored, and often attracted to new things. She followed her impulses severely, and never committed to anything for very long. This pattern of joining classes and dropping out continued until Janie was nine, when her parents gave her an ultimatum, demanding she either pick a hobby and stick with it, or stop taking classes altogether.

After a few weeks of pondering, Janie came up with her answer: she wanted a pony. Her parents, however, did not have the spare money to buy her a horse-the family was somewhat well-off, as Victor was a lawyer, but they didn't want to toss the money away, especially with Janie's habit of not sticking with her hobbies. After much insistence, they did agree to let her take horseback riding lessons, expecting her to drop the class after a few weeks. Much to their surprise, Janie wound up falling in love and sticking with it- though her parents never did buy her a horse of her own. Her love for horseback riding was born from the freedom she felt while doing it: horses were wild, fast, and riding one felt like flying.

After taking up horseback riding, Janie became more interested in the horses themselves. Eventually, Janie's love of horses spread into a general love of all animals. She was highly interested in animal behaviors and life, and in the treatment of animals altogether. After learning about the horrors of slaughterhouses, Janie became a vegetarian, a decision that lasted about three weeks. Since the age of 12, Janie has been going back and forth between being a vegetarian and a meat eater. She generally avoids meat when she can, and still argues in favor of the ethical treatment of animals. She spends a lot of her spare time supporting causes that protect both wild and domesticated animals.

Janie went through most of her life in her older brother's shadow. Thomas was notable for being a generally rude person. He talked back to teachers, almost failed most of his classes, spent at least twice a week in detention, and was suspended from school twice. Despite his reputation of acting out, he was always nice and respectful to Janie, and the two of them had a solid and sturdy relationship for most of their life. After graduating high school, Thomas joined a rock band as a bass player, and moved to a different part of the city. Janie makes a point of seeing him at least once a month.

However, almost every teacher Janie had ever had also once had Thomas. Most of them made the assumption that Janie was going to be just as belligerent and difficult as Thomas, not knowing that Janie was actually much more soft-spoken and generally kind than her brother. This led to many irritating classes where Janie was brushed over or ignored by teachers who assumed she had nothing to add, and while most of them eventually realized Janie was different, she struggled to find an identity outside of her brother.

One day during her Sophomore year, Janie wandered into a record store. The clerk was playing a Sex Pistols bootleg over the speaker system, and Janie almost instantly loved the music. It expressed all of the anger and disjointed angst that Janie felt as a teenager. Janie felt she had finally discovered an identity she could fit into: punk rock. She shaved off huge portions of her hair, leaving it in a Chelsea, and started wearing more jewelry to school. She went thrift store shopping, eventually finding a pair of black combat boots she fell in love with. To Janie, this change in her physical appearance was what set her apart from the rest of her family, and made her an individual.

Janie's parents ultimately approved of her change in style, even if it was a little extreme. They wanted Janie to be able to express herself and be happy, and figured the shaved-head, punk-rock aspects of her personality was just a phase. Anything that improved her self-worth and helped her grow as a person was okay in their books- though they did draw the line at facial piercings and tattoos.

Unfortunately, Janie wasn't a very punk-rock person personality-wise. For one, she still rode horses every weekend. She also loved all animals, and often tried to donate her time volunteering at animal hospitals. Thomas told her that the main way to be punk was to smoke, but Janie started choking halfway through her first cigarette and never picked up another. Further, Janie still unabashedly listened to mainstream music, and was a mostly easy-going, fun-loving person.

Janie's relatively kind personality earned her a lot of friends in school, despite her odd appearance. Changing her look gave her more self-confidence, and because of that she was able to fit into more social circles. Janie quickly made friends in almost all of her classes, never quite sticking into a specific clique, though her best friends are usually other artistic students. Janie still acts impulsively and noncommittally, which is mostly evidenced through her schoolwork; she gets B's and C's in every class, never applying herself too hard beyond what interests her. The only subjects she really excels in are Biology, which she enjoys, and math, which she detests, as she finds it too tedious and dull.

Janie's lackluster academic record is a stark contrast to her sister Samantha's. Sam is a straight-A student, incredibly attractive, and borderline bipolar. Sam's near-perfection had always grated on Janie, and the two of them had a difficult relationship from the start. While Thomas and Janie bonded over not-quite fitting in, Sam outright rejected both of them for being what she deemed "outcasts." After Thomas moved out of the house, Sam and Janie's interactions became as rare as possible. The two spend more time away from each other than they do together, and whatever interactions they do have are short, stilted, and uncomfortable.

This is a stark contrast with Janie's relationship with her parents, which is mostly healthy. Janie is closer to her Mother than her Father, and the two often watch TV together and talk about Janie's life in general. Janie is, however, still close to her father, who often takes her out to the movies or mini-golfing, or other silly activities- though they never get as in depth about Janie's life as she does with her mother. Janie and her parents occasionally argue about her grades, but for the most part they accept that she's going to excel in what interests her, and encourage her to do what she wants to do in her life.

Advantages: Janie is socially active and friendly, which could earn her a lot of allies in the game. She's relaxed and easy-going, which could keep her from panicking in troublesome situations.
Disadvantages: Janie has a bit of a flighty attitude, and doesn't always make decisive choices, which could lead to her failing to make a life-saving decision when the need arises. Her kind personality could lead to her not properly assessing a threat, and putting herself into danger by trying to comfort or change players within the game.
It's hard to get ahead when half your friends are dead!
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G056-- Alda Abbate- Weapon: Cat O' Nine Tails -- STATUS: ALIVE---The Usual Suspects--I think I'm starting to get that you and I don't owe these people anything. -- (But who needs love when there's Southern Comfort?)
G015--Janie Sinneave -Weapon: Travel Sized Game of Hungry Hungry Hippos --STATUS: ALIVE -- Not Like Any Previous Sleepovers--"This is real. This is real." -- (She doesn't have anything you want to steal. Well. Nothing you can touch.) (shirt reference)
B064 --Ian Valmont -- Weapon: Cherry Bombs x 12 --STATUS: ALIVE-- Everything Here is a Small Cap Investment--I can go it alone. -- (Baby in our dreams, we can live our misbehavior.)
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MurderWeasel
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Joined: February 18th, 2009, 7:01 am

April 28th, 2012, 8:08 pm #2

Hey, Casey! Just noticed this, but you've got a spare line break between Biography and Advantages, and to be fair I've got to grumble about it. Could you take care of that and then post when you've got it handled for a full critique? Thanks!
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April 28th, 2012, 11:40 pm #3

Ha, no problem! Edited.
It's hard to get ahead when half your friends are dead!
[+] spoiler
G114-- Rena Peters- Weapon: Shillelagh-STATUS: DECEASED -Overdose on Adrenaline- I'm stronger.- (I'm sick of all my judges, so scared of what they'll find.)
Rena Peters- By Inky
[+] spoiler

G056-- Alda Abbate- Weapon: Cat O' Nine Tails -- STATUS: ALIVE---The Usual Suspects--I think I'm starting to get that you and I don't owe these people anything. -- (But who needs love when there's Southern Comfort?)
G015--Janie Sinneave -Weapon: Travel Sized Game of Hungry Hungry Hippos --STATUS: ALIVE -- Not Like Any Previous Sleepovers--"This is real. This is real." -- (She doesn't have anything you want to steal. Well. Nothing you can touch.) (shirt reference)
B064 --Ian Valmont -- Weapon: Cherry Bombs x 12 --STATUS: ALIVE-- Everything Here is a Small Cap Investment--I can go it alone. -- (Baby in our dreams, we can live our misbehavior.)
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Namira
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Joined: May 28th, 2007, 12:31 pm

April 29th, 2012, 6:43 pm #4

Okay, this is a pretty solid start to be going on with, but I'm going to temporarily deny Janie, pending a few edits - which are mostly to do with elaboration, to be honest.

Basically I'd like a little more on Janie's habit of dropping her hobbies. Was there a particular reason for this? Overall it seems like she's quite an impulsive person, so I can understand if it was the 'Ooh, new shiny!' type of effect, but some more detail there would be nice.

Similarly, if Janie was like this with most other hobbies, what made horseback riding so different for her? You say she fell in love with it, but not why - which is what I'd like to know.

I get that the teachers presumed Janie would be like her brother, but what resulted from that? You don't really say how she was treated, which makes her reaction (deciding to look like 'a troublemaker') seem very capricious. It'd also be good to know how her parents reacted to this drastic change in look. Basically this section just seems a little odd. Why did she try to conform so hard to a stereotype? Like I said, it seems quite capricious/spiteful, maybe irrationally so.

The stereotype thing makes me curious as to whether Janie tried to fit in with that group of people as well as just following the look, as an aside.

The lead in to Janie's sewing hobby is quite abrupt, a little bit random and quite honestly feels slightly fillerish? Like, I don't object to picking up a hobby on the internet, but it just seems like you put it in there for the sake of it being there. It could definitely do with some more bulk.

I'd like a little more about how Janie interacts with her parents and her sister. Is Janie jealous of Samantha? Same with Janie's social life, as it's currently a little bare bones - especially considering one of her advantages is being socially active.

Finally, I'd like some elaboration on Janie's trusting nature in the biography, as it currently doesn't really come up at all, and it ought to be covered if it's considered a disadvantage. As a by-no-means essential suggestion, one or two extra points in the strengths/weaknesses would be quite nice, too.

Let me know when you've finished edits!



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13:59 Gianni you are proud, not embarrassed
13:59 Christian Yes
13:59 Christian Be proud
13:59 Christian Do we not all strive to break a human soul?
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G008 - Kammy So'oialo | wants a new script
G062 - Becca Everett | was a damn superstar
G071 - Sunshine Cho Lee | trusted
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G026 - Rosalia Fiametta | Found it. | Walkie Talkies
G014 - Yelizaveta 'Bounce' Volkova | Out of here | Gasoline
B060 - Brock Mason | Thump. Thump |
G029 - Kristina 'Kris' Hartmann | Put Down. | Drama Bombs [∞], M79 Grenade Launcher [x6 grenades]
G117 - Jessie Anderson | Still Smiling | Faith
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Joined: June 30th, 2010, 10:06 pm

May 8th, 2012, 4:26 am #5

Finally got around to editing this!
It's hard to get ahead when half your friends are dead!
[+] spoiler
G114-- Rena Peters- Weapon: Shillelagh-STATUS: DECEASED -Overdose on Adrenaline- I'm stronger.- (I'm sick of all my judges, so scared of what they'll find.)
Rena Peters- By Inky
[+] spoiler

G056-- Alda Abbate- Weapon: Cat O' Nine Tails -- STATUS: ALIVE---The Usual Suspects--I think I'm starting to get that you and I don't owe these people anything. -- (But who needs love when there's Southern Comfort?)
G015--Janie Sinneave -Weapon: Travel Sized Game of Hungry Hungry Hippos --STATUS: ALIVE -- Not Like Any Previous Sleepovers--"This is real. This is real." -- (She doesn't have anything you want to steal. Well. Nothing you can touch.) (shirt reference)
B064 --Ian Valmont -- Weapon: Cherry Bombs x 12 --STATUS: ALIVE-- Everything Here is a Small Cap Investment--I can go it alone. -- (Baby in our dreams, we can live our misbehavior.)
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Namira
Mr. Danya
Joined: May 28th, 2007, 12:31 pm

May 11th, 2012, 11:34 pm #6

Okay this is a lot better, good work, but I still have one or two points to bring up.

- I'd still like to know how Janie's parents reacted to her 'makeover'. It was pretty drastic after all.

- Removing the disadvantage makes the advantages/disadvantages quite slender. Can you add at the very least another disadvantage?

SotF: Mini - SCdoes a-rolling! - PV3 Prologue ongoing!
Draw Thread! - Pathfinder! - Writing Thread!
[+] spoiler
13:58 Gianni Oh come on you broke someone's heart
13:59 Gianni you are proud, not embarrassed
13:59 Christian Yes
13:59 Christian Be proud
13:59 Christian Do we not all strive to break a human soul?
[+] spoiler
Vincenzo/a 'Vinny' 'Enzo' Gatti | DO IT FOR THE VINE.
Toby 'Noodle' Andreasson | :|
[+] spoiler
G008 - Kammy So'oialo | wants a new script
G062 - Becca Everett | was a damn superstar
G071 - Sunshine Cho Lee | trusted
[+] spoiler
G026 - Rosalia Fiametta | Found it. | Walkie Talkies
G014 - Yelizaveta 'Bounce' Volkova | Out of here | Gasoline
B060 - Brock Mason | Thump. Thump |
G029 - Kristina 'Kris' Hartmann | Put Down. | Drama Bombs [∞], M79 Grenade Launcher [x6 grenades]
G117 - Jessie Anderson | Still Smiling | Faith
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Joined: June 30th, 2010, 10:06 pm

May 19th, 2012, 2:27 am #7

Edited.
It's hard to get ahead when half your friends are dead!
[+] spoiler
G114-- Rena Peters- Weapon: Shillelagh-STATUS: DECEASED -Overdose on Adrenaline- I'm stronger.- (I'm sick of all my judges, so scared of what they'll find.)
Rena Peters- By Inky
[+] spoiler

G056-- Alda Abbate- Weapon: Cat O' Nine Tails -- STATUS: ALIVE---The Usual Suspects--I think I'm starting to get that you and I don't owe these people anything. -- (But who needs love when there's Southern Comfort?)
G015--Janie Sinneave -Weapon: Travel Sized Game of Hungry Hungry Hippos --STATUS: ALIVE -- Not Like Any Previous Sleepovers--"This is real. This is real." -- (She doesn't have anything you want to steal. Well. Nothing you can touch.) (shirt reference)
B064 --Ian Valmont -- Weapon: Cherry Bombs x 12 --STATUS: ALIVE-- Everything Here is a Small Cap Investment--I can go it alone. -- (Baby in our dreams, we can live our misbehavior.)
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Namira
Mr. Danya
Joined: May 28th, 2007, 12:31 pm

May 19th, 2012, 11:06 am #8

APPROVED

SotF: Mini - SCdoes a-rolling! - PV3 Prologue ongoing!
Draw Thread! - Pathfinder! - Writing Thread!
[+] spoiler
13:58 Gianni Oh come on you broke someone's heart
13:59 Gianni you are proud, not embarrassed
13:59 Christian Yes
13:59 Christian Be proud
13:59 Christian Do we not all strive to break a human soul?
[+] spoiler
Vincenzo/a 'Vinny' 'Enzo' Gatti | DO IT FOR THE VINE.
Toby 'Noodle' Andreasson | :|
[+] spoiler
G008 - Kammy So'oialo | wants a new script
G062 - Becca Everett | was a damn superstar
G071 - Sunshine Cho Lee | trusted
[+] spoiler
G026 - Rosalia Fiametta | Found it. | Walkie Talkies
G014 - Yelizaveta 'Bounce' Volkova | Out of here | Gasoline
B060 - Brock Mason | Thump. Thump |
G029 - Kristina 'Kris' Hartmann | Put Down. | Drama Bombs [∞], M79 Grenade Launcher [x6 grenades]
G117 - Jessie Anderson | Still Smiling | Faith
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