Chris Jackson

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Chris Jackson

antonm1107
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Joined: June 18th, 2012, 8:58 pm

June 22nd, 2012, 3:11 am #1

Name: Chris Jackson
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Grade: 12
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Reading, Airsoft (was in an unofficial airsoft team known as the “Strikes”), is a member of the book club

Appearance: Chris is 5’9, and weighs in at 135 lbs, putting him on the lighter side of the spectrum. He has pale skin, and small gray eyes that are partly covered by his mid-length black hair. His cheekbones are fairly prominent, his nose is a bit long, and his lips are somewhat thin as well. He usually wears plain, short sleeved t-shirts of varying colors, and rarely wears any shirts with a logo with the exception of his favorite shirt, an Avenged Sevenfold t-shirt. He always wears a black digital watch, and his bag is a dark red backpack with wheels. Chris is fairly thin and nonathletic, but he does have some developing leg muscles.

Biography: Chris Jackson is the only child of Joseph and Lily Jackson, who are a journalist and flight attendant respectively. Back in primary and middle school, Chris was a loner; he was simply too engrossed in the novels he was reading to pay attention to anyone that tried to talk with him. Due to his loner nature, he was a prime candidate for bullying, and he rarely retaliated, at least not physically. He only had two people he could honestly call friends, both of whom have long since moved to different schools.

In year 10, Chris met Jacob Robinson, an 11th grader, who “took him under his wing,” and showed him the world of airsoft. Chris never did many athletic activities before trying it, and he often found himself short on breath, but it was the most fun he had with other people. Soon, he and Jacob formed an unofficial airsoft team known as the “Strikes,” consisting of himself, Jacob, 2 others from Aurora High and 4 people who Jacob knew from his previous school. The group was disorganized; nobody had any roles except for Jacob, who took it upon himself to become a sort of squad leader. Chris was known as the best shot in the group, and his preferred weapon was a Walther P99 gas pistol.

Thanks to spending time with the airsoft team more, Chris eventually became more outgoing and amicable to his schoolmates. He ended up trying to talk to some of the people who bullied him, although his talks rarely ended well. When Jacob left this year, the group was disbanded, and Chris tried to join some school based clubs, eventually settling for the book club.

Academically, Chris is a fairly average student; he gets average grades (Usually getting Bs and Cs.) in most non-scientific subjects, although he does horrible (D’s are common for him) in history, and gets nearly straight A’s in English. When it comes to scientific subjects, he gets Ds on average.

Chris’ relationship with his parents is good; his outgoing personality has put his mother at ease about whether he could make friends or not, and Joseph supported Chris’ engagement in airsoft wars, even if he did question its safety. Chris doesn’t like his mother’s attempts to control his life; she always tries to make him take and clubs that he doesn’t want to, even once trying to sign him up for the basketball team without his consent. In spite of this, Chris acknowledges that she wants what’s best of him and tries not to harbor any ill will against her.

Personality-wise, Chris is optimistic, and can hold his temper well. When he’s in combat in airsoft wars, he tends to swear (a LOT), but otherwise he’s friendly to everyone he meets. Chris tends to judge people based on first impressions, and while he acknowledges this as a personality flaw of his, he is unable to rid himself of it. Besides this, he also tends to be frank in conversations, and he is often unaware when people act uncomfortable in a conversation. He always chews on gum outside of class to keep himself preoccupied.

Advantages: Chris had experience with airsoft weaponry, and his experience in battles means that he’s used to sprinting from cover to cover. Additionally, he is able to sprint short distances quickly, and is relatively used to sliding to get from cover to cover.
Disadvantages: Chris’s experience with airsoft weaponry may cause him to overestimate his skills, which means he may be too arrogant for his own good. His frankness and prejudices may cause others to become uncomfortable around him and treat him as hostile, and he doesn’t have much stamina, being unable to run long distances.
Chris Jackson
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"Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light."
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MurderWeasel
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Joined: February 18th, 2009, 7:01 am

June 22nd, 2012, 3:17 am #2

Hey, antomn! Before we give Chris a full critique, please make sure his profile exactly conforms to the template. Specifically, please make sure only the headers (Name:, Gender:, etc.) are bolded.

Post when you've got that done, and we'll give Chris a full critique. Thanks!
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June 22nd, 2012, 3:35 am #3

Alright, fixed
Chris Jackson
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"Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light."
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MK Kilmarnock
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Joined: April 14th, 2009, 10:12 pm

June 22nd, 2012, 5:05 am #4

Hey, Anton! I've taken a look at Chris and he is currently DENIED. Since this is your first character, let me point out that this is no big deal whatsoever and just means that you've got to make some changes, which I will list in orange.


Name: Chris Jackson
Gender: Male
Age: 16 It doesn't seem like Chris is very academically gifted, so it's highly unlikely he would skip a grade. This is a bit young for a senior; 17 is the absolute youngest I would go.
Grade: 12
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Reading, Airsoft (was in an unofficial airsoft team known as the “Strikes”, is a member of the book club Close the parentheses?

Appearance: Chris is 5’9, and weighs in at 135 lbs, putting him on the lighter side of the spectrum .He has pale skin, and gray eyes that are partly covered by his mid-length black hair. He isn’t athletic, although he does have developing muscles in his legs. He usually wears plain, short sleeved t-shirts of varying colors, and rarely wears any shirts with a logo with the exception of his favorite shirt, an Avenged Sevenfold t-shirt. He always wears a black digital watch, and his bag is a dark red backpack with wheels. Improper spacing on that first period. That silly blip aside, flesh out facial features and body type a bit more. The most I see is 'developing legs'.

Biography: Chris Jackson is the only child of Joseph and Lily Jackson, who are a journalist and flight attendant respectively. Back in primary and middle school, Chris was a loner; he was simply too engrossed in the novels he was reading to pay attention to anyone that tried to talk with him. Due to his loner nature, he was a prime candidate for bullying, and he rarely retaliated, at least not physically. He often related reality with With.... what? He only had two people he could honestly call friends, both of whom have long since moved to different schools just remove everything after this and (he believed) forgot about him.

In year 10, Chris met Jacob Robinson, an 11th grader, who “took him under his wing,” and showed him the world of airsoft. Chris never did many athletic activities before trying it, and he often found himself short on breath, but it was the most fun he had with other people. Soon, he and Jacob formed an unofficial airsoft team known as the “Strikes,” consisting of himself, Jacob, 2 others from Aurora High and 4 people who Jacob knew from his previous school. The group was disorganized; nobody had any roles except for Jacob, who took it upon himself to become a sort of squad leader. Chris was known as the best shot in the group, and his preferred weapon was a Walther P99 gas pistol.

Thanks to spending time with the airsoft team more, Chris eventually became more outgoing and amicable to his schoolmates. He ended up trying to talk to some of the people who bullied him, although his talks rarely ended well. When Jacob left this year, the group was disbanded, and Chris tried to join some school based clubs, eventually settling for the book club.

Academically, Chris is a fairly average student; he is gets he gets average grades (Usually getting Bs and Cs.) in most non-scientific subjects, although he does horrible (D’s are common for him) in history, and gets nearly straight A’s in English. When it comes to scientific subjects, he gets Ds on average.

Chris’ relationship with his parents is good; his outgoing personality has put his mother at ease about whether he could make friends or not, and Joseph supported Chris’ engagement in airsoft wars, even if he did question its safety. Chris doesn’t like his mother’s attempts to control his life; she always tries to make him take and clubs that he doesn’t want to, even once trying to sign him up for the basketball club without his consent. In spite of this, Chris acknowledges that she wants what’s best of him and tries not to harbor any ill will against her. I think you mean basketball team but otherwise this is alright.

Personality-wise, Chris is optimistic, and can hold his temper well. When he’s in combat in airsoft wars, he tends to swear (a LOT), but otherwise he’s friendly to everyone he meets. Chris tends to judge people based on first impressions, and while he acknowledges this as a personality flaw of his, he is unable to rid himself of it. Besides this, he also tends to be frank in conversations, and he is often unaware when people act uncomfortable in a conversation. He always chews on gum outside of class to keep himself preoccupied.

Advantages: Chris had experience with airsoft weaponry, and his experience in battles means that he’s used to sprinting from cover to cover. Additionally, he is able to sprint short distances quickly, and is relatively used to sliding to get from cover to cover.
Disadvantages: Chris’s experience with airsoft weaponry may cause him to overestimate his skills, which means he may be too arrogant for his own good. His frankness and prejudices may cause others to become uncomfortable around him and treat him as hostile, and he doesn’t have much stamina, being unable to run long distances.


So, wrap that up and we should be good.
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antonm1107
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June 22nd, 2012, 7:12 am #5

Edited.
Chris Jackson
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"Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light."
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MK Kilmarnock
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Joined: April 14th, 2009, 10:12 pm

June 22nd, 2012, 3:42 pm #6

You made all required edits.

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[+] spoiler
Jerry Fury - The man, the myth, the legend
Coleen Reagan - The girl who half-loved the world
[+] spoiler
V5 Roster:
Cody Patton : That bitch.
Sean Mulcahy : The world was kind to reprieve him of his fear...
Jessica Sanders: She hoped it would be quick...
[+] spoiler
20:17Sideliner:Toben and Ricky are like a sibling version of the Joker and Batman, only Batman is just as much of a mass murderer. He just hides it better.
19:58LaurelsHow does your dick smell like Fritos?
14:36 MimiI THOUGHT YOU GUYS WERE FRIENDS > 14:36MimiI THOUGHT YOU REALLY LICKED HER
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