Chris Davidson

gambit508
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12:56 AM - Feb 25, 2010 #1

Name: Chris Davidson
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Bayview Secondary School
Hobbies and Interests: His faith, making friends, reading, history

Appearance: Chris Davidson is below average for his age group. Standing at 5’4” and weighing 136 lbs, it doesn’t take a genius to say that he’s small. His round unshaven face and relatively high voice also keeps him from being seen as his real age. He keeps his fair blonde hair long, the ends just reaching past his shoulders and usually has it covering his dark blue eyes. He typically wears holey jeans and a blue collared shirt, along with some holey red sneakers.

Biography: Chris was born to two of the most loving people in the world, Randall and Rachel Davidson. Being both firm believers in a good Christian upbringing, like most in their small town of Kokomo, Indiana, they brought Chris up in a very sheltered life. He wasn’t allowed to watch violent movies, play violent games or even read books that mentioned violence. They also home schooled him for the first twelve years of his schooling. Chris was fine with this, being a perfectly nice kid, doing his homework, eating his dinner, going to church.

However, when he was about to turn 18, disaster struck. While Chris was out with his father, doing some grocery shopping, the house they lived in was broken into. The burglar finding nothing there but Rachel, decided to take her instead. She resisted as sirens wailed, prompting the burglar to shoot her and run from the crime scene. He was later caught, but it was no better to Chris and his father. Rachel Davidson was dead.

Chris was heartbroken, he never knew death before. Both sets of grandparents had died before he was born, and he was just another in a long line of only childs. His parents were the only people he had. Chris spent the next months in a depressive state, staying in his room and praying constantly for God to bring him back. He was confused, God brought back lots of people, why not his mom. Eventually his pastor explained to him that she was in a better place and with God now, which helped a little, but Chris still didn't understand why God couldn't of waited.

Rachel's death didn't affect only him though. After his wife’s death, Chris’ father grew distant and took a job in St. Paul, moving to the new town with Chris. Due to his dad’s job, Chris could no longer be home schooled, and for the first time in his life, he was sent to public school. Bayview Secondary School, to be exact. He arrived a few weeks before prom, and realized quickly he didn’t fit in. Chris was the opposite of most of the loud, outgoing people at the school, he was friendly, but didn’t know what to talk about. Chris had never heard of things like reality tv and the new hit movies, save brief snippets from when he was out.

Chris is a smart kid, and does well in school. However he isn’t used to criticism and due to his sensitive nature will usually end up in tears if he is criticized. He keeps his faith close, always having a small new testament in his jeans pocket. He is friendly, and will open a conversation with anyone, whether or not they want to talk to him. He is a firm believer in optimism, and always believes that everyone has good in them, thus will never harm another human being.

While he hasn't joined any groups due to his recent move, he is really big on one thing. Reading, mostly the Bible, but he has read other books, usually history textbooks (his father says, despite the wars, he needs to know about how people have shaped the world). He is a big history nut as a result. However certain books he is banned from reading, (such as Harry Potter, Catcher in the Rye, the Da Vinci Code, etc.)


Advantages: The advantages Chris has are far and few between. His small stature opens up more places for him to hide and makes it harder for others to find him. His friendly nature combined with his child-like appearance might also make it harder for people to hurt him.
Disadvantages: Chris’ muscles aren’t well developed, so he would be hard pressed to do physical work for long periods of time. He also is a strict Christian and pacifist, so getting into even a verbal fight would be hard for him, let alone a physical one. He also has a tendency to trust people, which may lead to people using him for their own needs

Jonathan Jarocki-B015
QOM: "Oh good, one person isn't going to kill me out of two hundred and seventy five, what a relief"
Current Location: Hall of Mirrors
Current Weapons: Steyr TMP (x4 clips [capacity 15 9mm rounds], 50 Rounds Left)
Current Supplies: 1 Mountain Dew Can, 3 M&M Packets, 2 Bread Loaves, 2 Cracker Tins, 4 Bottles Of Water, 1 Lighter
Current Status: Injured
Kill Count: 0
Injuries: Busted Lip

"Caedite eos. Novit enim Dominus qui sunt eius"
"Damnant quod non intellegunt "
"The game of love is never easy, that's what makes the prize so wonderful"
[+] Spoiler
Ezekiel "Z" Reynolds is distracted at the moment
Alex Hy is tired of this bullcrap
Kyle Burchfield needs to push himself harder
Rachel Chapman is part of Team Edward
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MurderWeasel
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3:31 AM - Feb 25, 2010 #2

Hi Gambit!

Chris is temporarily DENIED. There are a few things I'd like you to fix up before I approve him for pregame.

First off, the first sentence of his appearance, " If anyone told you Chris Davidson was 18, they would probably laugh in your face.", doesn't make sense to me. It sounds like you've got your subjects reversed. Also, it's a bit too informal. SOTF profiles should read like they were written by an objective source.

Next, the formatting here is slightly off. I'd like you to adjust it so it reads "Biography: Chris was born...", in other words, without the space between "Biography:" and the start of the bio.

On the bio itself: it is quite good, for the most part. I'd like a little more detail on the murder of Chris' mom, specifically what happened and how it has affected Chris.

I'd also like you to bring up Chris' hobby of writing somewhere in his biography, since right now it's listed only in his interests section.

Finally, you misspelled "hide" as "high" in Chris' advantages.

Post here once you've got things taken care of, and I'll give Chris another look. Thanks a ton!
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gambit508
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3:39 AM - Feb 25, 2010 #3

Okay, I fixed the points you mentioned, (though I took out the writing, that was something in the orginal draft of the characther which I edited out and forgot to make the change to the intrests)
Jonathan Jarocki-B015
QOM: "Oh good, one person isn't going to kill me out of two hundred and seventy five, what a relief"
Current Location: Hall of Mirrors
Current Weapons: Steyr TMP (x4 clips [capacity 15 9mm rounds], 50 Rounds Left)
Current Supplies: 1 Mountain Dew Can, 3 M&M Packets, 2 Bread Loaves, 2 Cracker Tins, 4 Bottles Of Water, 1 Lighter
Current Status: Injured
Kill Count: 0
Injuries: Busted Lip

"Caedite eos. Novit enim Dominus qui sunt eius"
"Damnant quod non intellegunt "
"The game of love is never easy, that's what makes the prize so wonderful"
[+] Spoiler
Ezekiel "Z" Reynolds is distracted at the moment
Alex Hy is tired of this bullcrap
Kyle Burchfield needs to push himself harder
Rachel Chapman is part of Team Edward
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MurderWeasel
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3:46 AM - Feb 25, 2010 #4

Alright, just a couple more small things. First off, you say Chris was homeschooled for the first nine years of his life, but if he's a Senior now that should be twelve.

Secondly, I'd like to see a little more added to Chris' bio. Right now he's really lacking in interests. He must do something besides church. Is he part of any youth groups? Does he love to read? Basically, I'd like you to add one or two hobbies so Chris feels like more of a rounded person.

Post when you've got that handled, and I'll give him another read. Thanks!
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gambit508
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3:55 AM - Feb 25, 2010 #5

Fixed.
Jonathan Jarocki-B015
QOM: "Oh good, one person isn't going to kill me out of two hundred and seventy five, what a relief"
Current Location: Hall of Mirrors
Current Weapons: Steyr TMP (x4 clips [capacity 15 9mm rounds], 50 Rounds Left)
Current Supplies: 1 Mountain Dew Can, 3 M&M Packets, 2 Bread Loaves, 2 Cracker Tins, 4 Bottles Of Water, 1 Lighter
Current Status: Injured
Kill Count: 0
Injuries: Busted Lip

"Caedite eos. Novit enim Dominus qui sunt eius"
"Damnant quod non intellegunt "
"The game of love is never easy, that's what makes the prize so wonderful"
[+] Spoiler
Ezekiel "Z" Reynolds is distracted at the moment
Alex Hy is tired of this bullcrap
Kyle Burchfield needs to push himself harder
Rachel Chapman is part of Team Edward
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MurderWeasel
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4:15 AM - Feb 25, 2010 #6

Alright. Thanks for the edits. Chris is APPROVED for pregame.
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