Cassidy Kant

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Joined: November 19th, 2011, 10:33 pm

January 14th, 2012, 4:45 am #1

Name: Cassidy Kant
Gender: female
Age: 17
Grade: 12
School: Aurora High
Hobbies and Interests: Gymnastics, cheerleading, reading, writing, and religion.

Appearance: Standing at a relatively tall 5'7" with a trim but curvy body is Cassidy. She has a heart shaped "Princess Peach" face, complete with big blue eyes and little nose. Her long blonde hair is usually in a high pony tail that reaches her shoulder blades. She weighs in at 130 but much of that is muscle. She clear and fair skin. Her posture is very refined, but something about the way she carries herself seems relaxed, almost tranquil.

Cassidy is often wearing baby blue. She likes to wear halter shirts and white jeans. She usually has small earrings in, and only has the standard two holes pierced.

Biography: Cassidy's birth mother was a housewife who loved to read and write short stories in her free time. This became harder to do once she had a child, but the wonder of motherhood was much more exciting to her anyway. Her birth father was a caring, compassionate nurse. He spent a majority of his time off work at the hospital, just making sure his patients were doing well. This also changed upon Cassidy's birth, and he was a very involved father. When Cassidy was two, both her biological parents perished in a fire.

The fire started when Mrs. Kant was cooking. Mrs. Kant tried to extinguish it herself, but died trying to do so. Mr. Kant ran Cassidy out of the house immediately, and then went back in for his wife. While Cassidy was examined by the firefighters, her father died from smoke inhalation.

She remembers nothing of her first family, having been so young. Every now and then a familiar scent or sound will trigger a nostalgic sensation, but other than that she does not have even faint recollections of her biological family. She often imagines what they would have been like, or how her life would be if the incident never happened. Regardless, she's sure she'd be the person she is today no matter who raised her. This seems to be true. Cassidy is the empathetic and optimistic embodiment of her parents.

Cassidy was adopted as the only child to an infertile couple, the Hofstadters. Her surname was not changed, her parents didn't want to hide her adoption from her, and recognized that their last name was difficult. Her adoptive mother is a psychologist, and her father is a judge. She loves her parents, but disagrees with them often. She is compassionate; they are rational. They do everything they can to make her responsible, but Cassidy is a dreamer who likes to read and write. Her favorite classes are English and Lyrical Poetry. Her parents would much rather her be a math and sciences kind of person.

When her parents were teaching her to read, they nearly diagnosed her with ADD. Cassidy loves stories, and was always too distracted and excited by the plot of her children's books to concentrate on the letters. She often became impatient as she struggled to read every word. Once Cassidy did learn to read, she spent hours a day reading story after story, expanding her own horizons and imagination. She sticks to fictional stories rather than reading the textbooks her parents constantly recommend.

Despite being upbeat and optimistic, Cassidy does enjoy dark books. Her favorites are "Lord of the Flies" and "Jekyll and Hyde". She enjoyed "Brave New World" but felt it's over emphasis on conditioning and "nurture" seemed unlikely to her. Cassidy loves a good Shakespeare tragedy. She loves writing herself, but as trouble ending her own stories anyway but happily.

Cassidy is a gymnast, and she cheerleads for fun. She's in incredible condition. She hasn't won any championships, but she is a contending athlete. As a true optimist, she tries to rally the fans even in seemingly hopeless situations.

Cassidy and her adoptive parents are completely different. Where they see numbers and variables, she sees possibilities and ideas. Despite this, the family is very functional, Cassidy is easy to get along with and her parents couldn't love her more. They do disagree in several areas, and have polar opposite values, but Cassidy has learned to be open-minded and to hold her tongue. Her parents are also atheist, but she believes in a greater power. She hasn't told her parents, but when she claims to be at open gym practicing her routine, she's really at church or youth group. She asks a million questions, having no Christian background, and often amuses the leaders with her curiosity.

Cassidy is aware that she lives in a fantasy world at times. She is often daydreaming in class, and always gives people the benefit of the doubt. She knows that people are capable of doing horrible things, but never expects it. She’s lent money to untrustworthy kids, she’s assumed all rumors stem from misunderstandings, and so on. She justifies the actions of others for them before they can even come up with a lie.

Whenever Cassidy and her parents have a disagreement, she retreats into her room. The disagreements rarely escalate into arguments because Cassidy backs off. There she puts on her headphones and writes in her journal for hours. She writes about how she wishes her parents were more empathetic and open minded. She’ll write poems and stories in which her parents find her journal and realize how she truly feels, and then they all work things out and live happily ever after. She truly believes this could happen, but not enough to leave her little book lying around.

Socially, she is very well liked, but few people respect her. She has been referred to as a ditz by less optimistic people. However, Cassidy loves meeting new people and helping others. It's in her nature. She feels obligated to help out kids who are awkward, shy, or disabled. Her dream job would be running a Special Olympics.

Advantages: As a gymnast and a cheerleader, she is as agile as it gets. People also trust her very quickly, for she clearly means no harm. People who know Cassidy know she poses little threat, and may be more likely to spare her.
Disadvantages: She's very compassionate. This girl wouldn't kill anyone unless they had done something truly horrifying, and even then would likely act only in self-defense. She can also be quite naïve when it comes to people lying, making her easily manipulable.
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MurderWeasel
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Joined: February 18th, 2009, 7:01 am

January 14th, 2012, 4:49 am #2

Hi, GM! Before we give Cassidy a full critique, please adjust her profile so it matches the template. Specifically, there should be a line break between Appearance and Biography, and both category headings should be bolded. Post when you've got that done, and we'll give Cassidy a full critique. Thanks!
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MurderWeasel
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January 16th, 2012, 3:55 am #4

Hiya, Joe (not GM ><)! Cassidy's profile is looking pretty good, but she is DENIED pending a few changes.

First off, this sentence: "Every now and then a familiar scent or sound will trigger a nostalgic sensation, but other than that." is incomplete. It might be better as "Every now and then a familiar scent or sound will trigger a nostalgic sensation, but other than that she does not have even faint recollections of her first family."

Also, I'd like to know how old she was when the fire occurred. For her to remember nothing means she'd have probably been very young, one or two maybe?

This sentence: "She is genetically wired to be this way, unchangeable." is a little odd, and can probably be deleted, since the one before it conveys the same point.

This sentence: "Her surname was not changed, her parents didn't want to hide her adoption from her, and recognized that their last name was... icky." has a slight grammatical hiccup and is also a bit too informal (we want profiles to read as through written by an impartial observer). It might work better like this: "Her surname was not changed; her parents didn't want to hide her adoption from her, and recognized that their last name was difficult."

"She is compassionate, they are rational." should be "She is compassionate; they are rational."

"but can’t bring has trouble ending her own stories anyway but happily." has some extra words. I'd switch it to "but has trouble ending her own stories any way but happily."

This: "She always believes a comeback is possible, a true optimist." Might work better like this: "As a true optimist, she always believes a comeback is possible."

Also, I believe cheerleaders are supposed to cheer their team, win or lose. Maybe you should change it so that she's especially enthusiastic when the team is losing, trying to rally them?

"as a gymnast and a cheerleader, she is as agile as it gets." Should be capitalized at the start, like this: "As a gymnast and a cheerleader, she is as agile as it gets."

I'd rather see "People who know Cassidy know she poses little threat, and will most likely spare her." phrased like this: "People who know Cassidy know she poses little threat, meaning they may be more likely to spare her."

"SHE'S VERY COMPASSIONATE. This girl isn't going to kill anyone unless it's Satan himself, and even then, only in self-defense." is a bit hyperbolic and informal. I'd rather see it like this: "She's very compassionate. This girl wouldn't kill anyone unless they had done something truly horrifying, and even then would likely act only in self-defense."

Post when you've got Cassidy updated, and we'll give her another look. Thanks!
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