Brackie's Whacky-Tacky Critiques

Joined: October 19th, 2009, 6:02 am

August 6th, 2014, 5:14 pm #1

So! I have been technically back on SOTF for over six months now and during that time I have already lead one poor lamb to its death in v5, wuh-wah. While this implies I have been extensively reading v5 in order to broaden my writing horizons, sadly, I have not. I've read a fair few of the early threads, everything my sole v5 character was connected to, and that's about it. Bad Brackie.

So to make up for this heinous laziness I'm forcing myself to actually read what I've missed of v5, which by this time it looks like a lot. And rather than do what I tried doing before (going through all the characters in death order), I'll open it up to the handlers of v5 to direct me towards their fantastic characters so I can both read v5 and pay real attention to what I'm reading in order to give critiques (or failing that, impressions - I'll make them good though).

And I'm back again! All of that stuff is technically still true but replace v5 with v6. I think I'll pick up where I left off but remove handlers who haven't been around for longer than 2 months to free up some spots.

1. It's been a while since I've critiqued anything and this is my first real critique thread of any kind on any website ever, so it may be slightly amateurish compared to the good critics in this here forum. I'll do my best tho.
2. It might not be particularly long even, I might just put down my thoughts. I will, however, try to make them constructive.
3. In the mean time, go nuts on requesting characters. Hell, as long as you don't have too much intersection between your own characters, you can request all of your characters to be put in the queue. Once I'm overwhelmed though I'll amend this.
4. If for some reason you don't want a public critique/impression/feedback I can send word via carrier pigeon, pack mule, or Private Message.
5. I'm mainly hoping to look at SOTFMain characters atm, but I'm open to looking at Mini characters somewhere down the line.

So yeah, go nuts.

Main SOTF queue (max of 10):
1. Aileen Aurora Abdallah
2. Mirabella Strong
3. Stacy Ramsey (WIP)
4. Cody Patton
5. Alex King
6. Ian Williams
7. Juhan Levandi
8. Adonis Alba
9. Hansel Williams

side-non-v5-queue (max of 3):
1. Forrest Doe
2. Taylor DeVasher
3. Leah Bissard

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Brendan Wallace is a coward.
Clio Gabriella wanted to go home.
Paige Strand needed to run.
Jacob Charles had to put back his pieces.
Aston Bennett was better than you.
Ma'afu Tuigamala made the ultimate mistake.
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Janie Sinneave wanted to ride in the clouds.
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Maxim Kehlenbrink did nothing wrong.
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Ezra Landau - "Pretty sure the point of life is to indulge and be pretty." - Philosophy
Hayden Lockwood - "Come to the march this Saturday and I'll show you a good time." - Pride
Allegra Varley - "Bet you I can jump from here to that boat." - Risk
Truann Coleman - "Please stop saying that." - Rage
Anya Van Doren - "Dunno why I did it. Dunno why it's your business." - Duplicity

Joined: July 7th, 2012, 6:39 pm

August 6th, 2014, 5:26 pm #2

You are opening yourself to tragedy.

But sure, Aileen Abdallah, pwetty pwease?
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Hycanthe Eickenhorst
Piet Lick
Cedric Matsumoto [INSPO]
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Lucilly Peterson wrote: Lucilly Peterson 0 % ♪Laing - Paradies Naiv♪ Porno Magazine
Johnny Ray McKay wrote: Johnny McKay Dead Tracking Bug and Transponder
||Breaths||Pizza|People 2||Fortune||
||Girlfriend|Needles|Thanos|Blanc|Demons|Hasty|Another|Hyphaema|Minus|Anemia|Eternal Happiness||
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O B014 Joachim Lovelace - Ballistic Knife, MP 18, Obsidian Knife - "It doesn't matter. They lost, he lost, I'll lose. That's the nature of the game."
O G042 Aileen Aurora Abdallah - Pair of MMA Gloves, Golf Club & Table Leg -
B059 David Zimmer - Sabre -
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SnoopDommyDommmy: specialist subject in Mastermind is "History of Defecation in Wrestling"

Ruggahissy: We are the law now and our law keeps the streets clean O_O
Kilmarnock: XD Good.
Kilmarnock: Yaaaay for being the law.

Kermit: I asked a kid who had a crush on me. But I pretty much only gave him a hug so I guess that wasn't nice of me
Kermit: My friends said I was rude not to have at least offered him a blow job
Kermit: Apparently that would have been the polite thing to do

SpiralAgnew: Here, have something sad-looking
Bikriki: I must add this to my collection of pics that show people crying.
SpiralAgnew: XD You actually have one of those?
Whirly: I was going to say "Ian, of course he has a collection like that. He's German."

cos frankly the idea of trying to turn all your straight female characters into lesbians amuses me hugely

Uno: You seem excited. did Bambi's mom get reincarnated as a bug you just swatted?

Skraal: would it be correct to say you've sucked on a lot of black ones?
TtMaR: They taste nicer
TtMaR: Better shape, too.
TtMaR: They fit neatly into your mouth,.

Bikriki: My hometown is not a very indication of my personality.
Bikriki: Because as far as I can recall, I am neither ugly nor full of minorites
Bikriki: Though I would not mind the latter.
Bikriki winks

Shangela: Facials for the greater good.

Shangela: I work you into climax, what happens afterward is none of my concern.
Wes: Says the world's most detached sexecutioner.


Shangela: Did you stop high school genocide with your cock, Sansa?
Sansa: yes yes i did
Sansa: sunshine and happiness wasn't working so i had to take drastic measures

Wes: Welcome to SotF chat
Wes: Your weekly forecast: Nipples n' butts, if the pattern holds

Ruggawork: Yeah Aloha was a zygot with a keyboard shoved up his mom's uterus

<WES> Riki would never say or do anything sexual. He is a flower of innocence and purity.
<WES> If he was heroin, he'd be blue magic

Ruggahissy - Today at 11:10 PM
When I was 10 a kid kept calling me "Victoria's Secret" so I chased him, knocked him down and then stomped on him
He stopped
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Mr. Danya
Joined: February 28th, 2012, 2:09 am

August 6th, 2014, 5:43 pm #3

Marcus Leung, thank you. He's the dark green heart in my signature, next to the gray one.
V7 relationship thread! Say hi to my kids!
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21:33RattlesnakeIf you can't ninja roll the solution is to get naked until you can ninja roll

Justice for Natali - Today at 4:21 PM
Your adorable face will not save you from the long dick of the law

Gianni - Today at 8:05 PM
Sometimes the big tru tru different than the small tru tru

Joined: November 18th, 2012, 7:49 pm

August 6th, 2014, 5:48 pm #4

Hey Inky! Could you pretty please critique Mirabella for me? <3
Version Seven:
Tristan O?Hara
Dorothea Rodriguez
Ariana Simpson
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Version Five:
B049 ? Maynard Hurst
G060 ? Mirabella Strong

Version Six:
B004 ? Joshua Bracewell
? Adopted by Ciel
G026 ? Hazel Jung ? Adopted by Ruggahissy
B027 ? Oskar Pearce ? Adopted by NAFT

Joined: January 24th, 2012, 7:55 pm

August 6th, 2014, 5:51 pm #5

Could you critique Stacy Ramsey for me please?
V6 Characters:
----Cassandra "Cassie" Venus--------------------------------Eleanor "Elle" Duval----------
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--------B011: Finn Grant ------------------------------------- G020: Stacy Ramsey------
----------Weapon: Megaphone--------------------------Weapon: Bryan Calvert's SPAS-12
---------------------------Multishot---------------------------------------------- Caught in a Moment-------------------
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Finn Grant: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12
Stacy Ramsey: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9

MK Kilmarnock
Mr. Danya
Joined: April 14th, 2009, 10:12 pm

August 6th, 2014, 7:07 pm #6

Why the hell not.

Cody Patton.
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Jerry Fury - The man, the myth, the legend
Coleen Reagan - The girl who half-loved the world
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V5 Roster:
Cody Patton : That bitch.
Sean Mulcahy : The world was kind to reprieve him of his fear...
Jessica Sanders: She hoped it would be quick...
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20:17Sideliner:Toben and Ricky are like a sibling version of the Joker and Batman, only Batman is just as much of a mass murderer. He just hides it better.
19:58LaurelsHow does your dick smell like Fritos?

Mr. Danya
Joined: June 7th, 2012, 10:55 pm

August 6th, 2014, 7:51 pm #8

I'd absolutely love to get some feedback on Ian Williams, please.
Constructive criticism is always welcome! Feel free to send me a PM if you have any pointers or feedback you'd like to share!
Character #1: Boy #37 Ian Williams - Now with 55% less self-insert.
Designated Weapon: Polaroid Instant Camera With Film (Enough for 8 photographs)

Past - | 1 | 2 | (Current thread - Birds of a Feather)
Pregame - None
Island - | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | (Final Thread - Glass
Character #2: Boy #66 Chase Rodriguez - Adopted from Pippin.
Designated Weapon: Silver Pill Box Containing Three Cyanide Capsules

Past - None
Pregame - | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | (Last seen in - Diversions)
Island - | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | (Final Thread - Drawing to an End)

Joined: June 29th, 2013, 5:06 pm

August 6th, 2014, 8:04 pm #9

I'd give you my V5 character, but I have none. So...I guess, Forrest Doe?

Cannon Fodder
Joined: February 4th, 2013, 9:37 pm

August 6th, 2014, 9:32 pm #10

Mind doing a critique of James Wade, please?
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B073: James Wade - Deceased
Weapon: Clue board game (Destroyed)
Current Location: Bled out in The Mad and Hungry Dogs
Threads: 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - 5 - 6 - 7 - 8 - 9 - 10 - 11 - 12 - X