Beryl Mahelona

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Name: Beryl Furushima Cunningham Mahelona
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12
School: George Hunter High School
Hobbies and Interests: Spirituality, Yoga, Rifling and Gun Culture, Outdoorsmanship, Basketball, Music Production and Songwriting, Animal Caretaking, Gardening and Horticulture, Science and Medicine, Furry Fandom.

Appearance: Beryl Mahelona is 6’1”, she has a classic Pacific Islander tan complexion. She has an athletic, pear shaped body, and weighs 195 lb, mostly in well developed and defined lean muscles especially of her legs, back, and abs.

Beryl has a slightly angular face with a defined chin. Her facial complexion is healthy. She has slightly chubby cheeks. Her eyes are a dull grayish-green, and she has thick unkempt eyebrows. She wears oversize round-rim glasses with thin frames. She has a small button nose. She has thick light brown lips with a prominent cupid’s bow. Her hair is thick, slightly wavy, it grows down to her waist; she keeps it generally free of tangles and healthy, though it has the tendency to slowly rearrange into bedhead over the course of a full school day.

Due to height constraints her wardrobe is rather small and she can often be seen repeating clothes week to week. She wears monocolor t-shirts and blouses, hoodies, and jeans and skirts, she’s also willing to mix and match with her exercise gear, for example wearing a tee and athletic shorts as her uniform to school sometimes. She’ll always be wearing some manner of necklace with a spiritual connotation such as animal bone, crystal effects, or beads. She ties a constantly changing variety of colored hairbands around her fingers, which she uses as a fun reminder system to help with her memory.

Beryl has a soft and bright, somewhat nasal voice. Her accent is neutral and does not sound local. She notably tends to take her time when pausing to breathe, so the cadence of her sentences can be slow. She is bilingual and can speak Hawaiian conversationally.

On the day of the abduction Beryl wore a black long sleeve hoodie on top of a white camisole, and a grey knee length skirt. She wore tall athletic socks and red tall-tongue sneakers with white soles. She had three green colored bands on her left ring finger, a blue band on her left index, a red band and an orange band on her right pinkie, and a blue band on her right index. She brought her glasses, wore a rose quartz necklace, and several bead bracelets draped solely on her right arm.

Biography: Beryl Mahelona was born to Kekoa Furushima Mahelona and Sofia Cunningham, December 1st, 2000, in Honolulu Hawaii. Sofia was a headstrong geologist, daughter of Isaac Cunningham, a retired researcher and team leader for Pfizer involved with the development of several of their blockbuster drugs. Kekoa had worked in the U. of Hawaii Manoa’s custodial team and they’d met while Sofia had been working with her thesis. On the week before her thesis defense Kekoa and Sofia called in Isaac from his home in Chattanooga to help take care of still weeks old Beryl while Sofia prepared. He stayed in the house for a week. On the day of the thesis defense proper Kekoa and Sofia were rammed by a drunk driver while driving into the campus. Sofia was declared dead by arriving paramedics, Kekoa died three hours later from internal injuries, comatose with Isaac at his bedside.

Sofia had been Isaac’s only child, but he took responsibility despite his devastation, being the sort to project strength. He adopted Beryl and brought her home to Chattanooga where his wife Francisca was waiting. They took very good care of Beryl, after a period of infant fussiness and grief she settled down, she maintains no memories of her biological parents. She only knows about them through stories told to her by Isaac from a young age.

Sofia had been a reluctant mother, but with high hopes for her daughter's intelligence and independence matching her own. Sofia had been a militant third-wave feminist, and had idolized all manner of female scientists of antiquity like Florence Bascom, Rosalind Franklin, and Emmy Noether. Kekoa had devoted himself to his wife and had worked multiple jobs despite his lack of a degree. He'd been taught art by his adoptive mother and father, an elderly Japanese couple estranged from their family in Japan. Kekoa was their only family, and neither would live to see Kekoa meet Sofia. Kekoa had told Issac when asking for his blessing that he believed in Sofia's vision totally, but hoped Beryl would perhaps inherit some of his artistic spirit. Beryl inherited from Isaac many relics: photos, letters, Sofia’s handwritten dense and technical notes from school, Kekoa’s artistic sketches: of the couple, their future daughter, gorgeous Hawaiian landscapes, and miscellaneous vibrant abstracts. She accepts their being gone, but her desire to somehow grow a real connection with what she feels of their lingering spirits and to live up to their hopes and dreams for her is the basis of her self-developed spirituality.

Isaac was a rich man, he had been given generous stock options by Pfizer when he retired and had successfully invested in real estate in Texas and Arkansas, his and Beryl’s home is a mansion large even for Frazier’s Glen. His and his wife’s love of travel and knowledge meant young Beryl had plenty to read. Beryl was a bright and happy young child, curiosity and energy carried her through plenty of her grandfather’s books when she wasn’t being more hyperactive. She loved to be read to and eventually read on her own about science and Isaac encouraged her with his plentiful knowledge and experience. He was sometimes strict with her about retaining information where she was otherwise prone to be distracted, as his vision of Beryl’s upbringing generally echoed that of Sofia’s vision of Beryl being fierce and independent. Francisca was a softer sort, and even though Isaac insisted Beryl not attend preschool she won that argument for a few years, saying Beryl would be helped by socialization.

When she was old enough Isaac and Francisca would have her help in the garden, and Beryl’s memories of the scents of flowers and the earth still compel her to feel at home working in gardens. She also has nostalgic recollection of how their adopted husky puppy, Rosalind, would destroy their hard work on the garden by ripping up flowers, to young Beryl’s delight. She developed an instinct for animal caretaking, with Isaac's help and his textbooks. Beryl loved animals for their innocence and how she could learn about them from her books: dogs, cats, squirrels, lizards, worms, anything. For both plants and animals alike Beryl sensed kindred spirits, as part of her budding spiritual instincts. For a time when she was four she would try and avoid stepping on small things, ants, worms, flowers, the like. Once, she was upset that she’d accidentally crushed a butterfly while playing with Rosalind. Francisca and Isaac both comforted her, and Isaac particularly told her that sometimes life ended and that it was natural and beautiful, and Beryl would take that lesson to heart as best as she knew how at such a young age.

At Francisca’s insistence Beryl attended Kindergarten, her precocious knowledge in the sciences and her strong imagination and friendliness won her good relationships with her peers and teacher. She was especially active on the playground and loved expending her youthful energy running and jumping around with friends, and she showed a knack for coordination one might expect of a ballet dancer or gymnast. Beryl also began to dance at home. She had access to her grandpa’s CD collection, and especially enjoyed the colorful and eclectic sounds of his psychedelic rock albums, though she also liked his tastes in jazz and big band, developing from a young age breadth in her musical tastes. Francisca noted she was already dancing somewhat like a ballet dancer to his classical CDs, and she had plans of enrolling Beryl in a dance class or gymnastics.

However, these plans did not come to be as Francisca’s health began to take a turn for the worse and she was increasingly bedridden. Isaac, believing it important to toughen up Beryl some with the sober reality of real life, made no attempt to sugar coat what was happening. Beryl was regularly at Francisca’s side, and made up a number of silly childish spells and chants that made Francisca smile. Francisca died during Beryl’s last weeks of Kindergarten.

Isaac tried to use the experience as a healthy way to teach Beryl about grief and loss. Beryl was shocked and understandably upset for some time, but her grandfather’s firm demeanor guided her through the troubled time. Isaac had lived a long life, lost brothers in World War Two, and he sought to guide Beryl as best he knew how. Anglican as a youth, Isaac brought Beryl to church for some time so she could explore religion for herself. He had no intent that she practice, as he hadn't practiced himself after his youth, but he was hopeful she'd be able to make up her own mind with careful exposure. In the end Beryl left the Church, finding the ideas fascinating but the practice boring and stifled. Beryl still developed a curiosity for spirituality, the idea of an afterlife where she could meet her lost loved ones again comforting her. Her love of nature instinctively led her to wonder if there was more lurking beneath the surface, especially as it reminded her of her father's artistic talents for capturing nature in stills. Even simply exploring her own home’s garden, playing with Rosalind, chasing butterflies, the comfort she felt was great, and she felt profound kinship. By the age of six she began to ‘speak’ with the spirits in the world around her. Isaac encouraged her patiently, touched by Beryl’s attentions to his deceased daughter in particular.

Before Beryl began first grade, Isaac made the decision to follow through with his own plans- what he firmly believed Sofia would have endorsed and done as well- of homeschooling her. Beryl loved the idea because it gave her more time with her favorite cartoons, books, the garden, and Rosalind. Isaac continued to bring her out to playdates and she made some new friends with Chattanooga’s small but vibrant homeschool network, children friendly to her and their parents usually sympathetic to Isaac, who was generally liked in the community for his generosity to local causes, and his charm and wit. Isaac's intellect and fervor made him a strong teacher in the sciences and mathematics and Beryl’s knowledge and comprehension was advanced for her age. Beryl stayed in Chattanooga until her second grade years.

They would move to Hawaii, specifically to Kailua, on the other side of a mountain tunnel from Honolulu. Isaac had been recruited by a family friend- Sofia’s old college roommate- to provide off-the books consulting for a research startup. Beryl agreed to move when asked, excited by the prospect of adventure, as long as she got to decide how they’d grow the garden in their new home and they brought Rosalind. Beryl spent that summer doing much with her novice knowledge of horticulture, to her delight. She picked out beautiful native plants for the garden, like ohi’a lehua flowers and the ahinahina shrub, and was fully in charge of the watering and nutrients. If she forgot anything, as she sometimes did, Isaac would trust her to fix her mistakes, which motivated her to be responsible. She would even get to help out at the greenhouses Isaac was setting up in the mountains as part of his job, doing some planting, potting, watering, and soil testing, which she delighted in, especially as adults praised her for her effort and intelligence. She enjoyed this summer in her life greatly.

Beryl’s third grade year proper, on the other hand, introduced some problems. Isaac and Beryl still involved themselves in the local community of homeschooled, but as strangers integration was harder, especially with Isaac now busier and less capable of socializing with his adult contemporaries, indeed he was often out of the house when not teaching Beryl and thus babysitters were a constant presence. Among her peers her outgoingness was less well received, culture barriers abound, and her peers thought Beryl’s tendency to ramble about subjects they hadn’t been taught yet and ‘spirits’ was creepy and snobbish. She was rejected often and only had few friends. She was bothered, but when she told Isaac he merely assured her she could ignore negative attention. She was stubbornly determined to prove herself so she deferred to his judgement and was a social pariah. More often than not she found she had no playdates and had to entertain herself, playing with Rosalind, reading and studying, and watching television.

On their spare weekends, perhaps in a ploy to distract Beryl from her social difficulties, Isaac introduced Beryl to guns. As a gun aficionado he personally wanted Beryl to be familiar with guns, even so young, as he’d usually kept them in the house and had only put them in storage for Beryl’s safety. He’d bring her to a local range, at first just to watch him while she read. The loud and violent stimulation was scary at first but she got used to it, then got curious and eventually begged her Grandpa to let her try. As early as the age of eight, nine, she was shooting, with plenty of supervision from Isaac. Being so young she was doted on by adults present, forming fond memories of an abundance of father-like figures. She and her grandpa were invited hunting at first, but she balked at the idea and Isaac respected her strong feelings on animal violence by refusing to go himself. A competitive drive to improve herself woke in her for the first time, she aimed to develop her accuracy, though she was no prodigy for her age she developed marksmanship at a decent clip.

Beryl’s academic skills advanced at a quick pace under Isaac's teaching, she remained a full quantifiable grade level ahead of her average peer by age, and then some. She enjoyed the structure of having plenty of breaks to wander off and do her own thing. This instilled in her a certain distractibility, while she is intelligent and good at research she was never used to more rigid school structure experiences due to her formative upbringing. She would meander often, from activity to activity, to keep herself alert and engaged, and she had atrocious organizational skills, from a young age she was naturally forgetful but bad habits would worsen that tendency with time.

Isaac brought Beryl wherever he could to give her experiences. By Beryl’s fifth grade year often she was the one planning weekend excursions in pursuit of spending time in nature, avoiding alternatives like scout troops and camps due to some degree of alienation and slightly elitist assumptions, enforced by Isaac, that camping in groups would be an inferior learning experience. Beryl’s experiences in life naturally lent her to cultivating outdoorsmanship, and she enjoyed activities out in the wild such as navigation, bird watching, and sketching samples of flora. Sometimes she would go camping entirely alone, to immerse herself in the little trafficked regions of Hawaii’s wilderness. She considered these meditative experiences where she could ‘discuss’ her life and inspirations, academic and artistic, with the spirits around her. Isaac would sometimes escort her by plane to another island for a weekend getaway, just for a change of scenery, where she could wander the natural landmarks to her heart’s content.

Isaac also brought Beryl on multiple summer trips, packed with adventure, including: climbing and skiing Mt. Ranier, hiking Mt. Fuji in Japan, camping in places such as the Fischer Towers Campgrounds and Joshua Tree National Park. Beryl began to develop something of a liking for adrenaline, as Isaac wasn’t the sort to go easy on Beryl, and Beryl delighted in the hands off training, finding she learned better with a little danger. One summer she learned skiing, the next winter she picked up snowboarding, and surfing the next summer. Of course she never found expertise, but she was inspired by following in the footsteps of her phenomenally active and fit grandpa, and she was motivated by the plan of setting the foundations for a future where she could tackle the sort of physically daunting challenges that Isaac had: Kilimanjaro, the Badwater Ultramarathon, among other things.

Beryl’s thirteenth birthday was heralded with a surprise from Isaac. He gifted her a Tikka T3 bolt-action rifle, and revealed that with his project in Hawaii wrapped up he was willing to allow Beryl complete autonomy in deciding where the next phase of their life would lead, expecting her to start taking up more and more duties as co-head of household as she matured. Armed with this power Beryl was quick to say they return to Chattanooga. On some level she deeply missed the strong connections she’d made with playdates from her old home, it had been a happier and simpler time she’d lost, and she felt a spiritual draw back in that direction. She and her grandfather returned to Chattanooga in her 8th grade year. Beryl was still homeschooled. Her grandfather was beginning to pursue a pedagogy of encouraging Beryl to have more self-direction and forge her own path, and get out of the house more.

Armed with these encouragements to freedom and with a stronger support group formed by reconnecting with old friends, Beryl elected to expand her extracurricular engagements. Puberty didn’t affect her perception of her body much, but she did begin to feel physical strength matching her love of athletic endeavors, she felt a strong drive to be more competitive and performance oriented. Thus, she engaged herself in basketball, yoga, and swimming in the local center. She especially loved basketball and had a natural affinity for it between her athleticism and her height already being impressive for her age. She felt awkward around teammates, there was jealousy from them over her aptitude, and furthermore her loner streak in elementary school had left her with odd quirks and a lack of charm. Feeling the peer pressure Beryl elected to suppress things like well-meaning criticisms of teammate performances, stayed out of arguments and drama and even let others blame her for things to keep the peace. She was almost kicked off the team once when she let herself be wrongly accused of petty theft, but remained silent and didn’t defend herself. Such generally nice and agreeable behavior seemed to make her more acceptable to people and make them amiable to her quirks, and she adopted it as a public persona she quickly learned to embrace.

She also expanded her interest in Isaac's musical collection, and started listening to more music and radio in general. She listened to everything, from classical to underground European electronica to Top 40 pop, she enjoyed it all on both a practical and philosophical level, as her maturing spirituality and perception of herself broadened her perspective and opened her naturally already very accepting mind. Isaac helped her out by buying her a number of musical devices as her skills developed, allowing her to devote unneeded time in the home classroom to developing her musical talent, instead of racing ahead in content like they usually would. She slowly built her own ‘studio’ with a keyboard, guitars, amps, and though late in developing the skills she learned relatively fast, she could play competently and sort of sight read by her high school years. Her best instruments would be the bass guitar and keyboards, and she had a knack for composing drony riffs reminiscent of bands like Catherine Wheel.

She also developed an affinity for yoga. At first she attended more for the spiritual aspect than physical. She developed her knowledge of crystals, her own chakras, life energies, and integrated that information into her own growing world view. She eventually turned her aims to also physically benefitting from yoga. In general, she sought out books to develop her spirituality, free now to build her own library of information separate of Isaac’s, and she started to develop her own extensive canon, creatively freewheeling based on her emotional connections to the world, her desire to fit in and live up to the connections she felt to her parent’s spirits. Hypocrisy and dichotomy would never bother her much, she easily reconciled her material wants with her spiritual wants, her scientific understanding with her spiritual understanding, though an outsider would probably consider her justifications flimsy, dubious, and evasive. She now come to understand and accept that she had animist beliefs, worshiping the spirits of nature around her through the rituals of her outdoorsmanship and through her own pursuit of self-improvement and self-actualization to specifically honor her deceased parents and grandmother who had rejoined the earth. Beryl appreciated not having to consistently practice samey rituals like her other spiritual friends were inclined, though she allowed herself to be inspired by the study of the intricacies of other faiths.

Isaac surprised Beryl on her 14th birthday with the news that he’d allow her to go into a public high school if she so chose. He had been impressed with the passion Beryl had taken to all of her new hobbies in her busy year, and he decided that the schooling system, while still inadequate, would be conducive to nurturing her budding talents. He admitted to her, honestly as always, that he had reflected on her growth and realized he himself lost sight of Beryl’s own prowess and talents as an individual in his pursuit of honoring Beryl’s mother’s vision of her daughter. He still wanted her to achieve autonomy and ‘ferocious’ independence, but free of his visions and biases, so he would give her the option to return in full to the public sphere. Beryl was nervous, honestly scared of more social failures and challenges, but at the same time she welcomed the challenges with her honed explorer’s zeal, so she decided to enroll in George Hunter that very year.

She enjoyed the benefit of being in easy classes below her level that she didn’t need to invest much effort into, so she had plenty of free time to sink into extracurriculars. She was able to attend a science fair with Mrs. Zhang’s prompting and guidance and produced a decent statistical experiment concerning blood typing that got her to state level. She joined clubs like Chess, Robotics, Debate, so on, though few interested her long term as she found she was more passive and less free to go wild with her ambitions in group settings. Sports interested her, she joined the Girl’s Jr. Varsity Basketball team in the winter and was a stand out small forward. Socially she maintained her learned methodology of being more meek and friendly, and always being helpful and keeping her ears open to the often unfamiliar interests of her peers- mainstream or otherwise- so as to stay inoffensive. Sometimes people sometimes took advantage of her easy-going, easily overpowered nature, or bullied her for her still readily apparent oddities. She took it in her stride.

A few games into basketball season Beryl felt faint and weak, and suddenly dozed off for a few minutes during half-time intermission but the game moved on, they won, and Beryl ignored what had happened. Two or so days later while jamming to music and playing with Rosalind in their living room Beryl collapsed, conscious but with suddenly extremely weak muscles. Isaac was at home and rushed to her side, getting her to a hospital. She had to miss a basketball game and several days of class for extensive specialized medical testing, which determined she had narcolepsy with cataplexy.

Beryl’s life significantly changed following the diagnosis. She drew unwanted attention with semi-frequent fits of cataplexy or sleep attacks. Her basketball season ground to an abrupt halt, for her safety due to the uncertain nature of her diagnosis she stayed on the bench for most of the season and Beryl had reason to believe through eavesdropping that her teammates had some resentment for her beneath their outward sympathy. She quit the team after the season ended, and despite her desires to stay active in competitive sports she could never again trust herself with such activities due to the safety risks and general embarrassment.

Beryl and Isaac were both on some level devastated even if neither was inclined to let it show. Beryl had lost some degree of the foundations of her autonomy and spirituality, now she would often need supervision from friends or family to be safe from the potential of injury due to an attack, and thus had the range of daily activities available to her more limited. Emotionally she became more withdrawn as one common thing that seemed to proceed attacks was heightened emotional states. Her natural tendency to be evasive deepened, and she protected herself with a polite smile and even more whimsical, doormat like behavior, somewhat forced. Conflict became increasingly difficult for her to stomach, as the anxiety often welled up with the uncertain lurch of an oncoming cataplexy attack, so her willingness to tolerate mental incongruities continued to grow.

Beryl replaced basketball with less anxiety-inducing and demanding gym time, as she was still determined to stay fit and healthy even if she no longer considered herself trustworthy on the field. Her love for basketball remained strong, however, she watched basketball games and had her own fantasy leagues, and she attends all the school games religiously. She also started to play pickup games again in her junior year, a little more removed and stable from the Freshman year incident that had humiliated her and robbed her of her precious autonomy.

Armed with more time around the house she started to write more music, adopting songwriting with a very abstract, whimsical, spiritual sort of bend. In general her artistic expression became very detailed and freewheeling. She sketched, made music, and practiced her spirituality via things like meditation, yoga, and rituals to a common creative rhythm she built for herself, a core aesthetic of escapism and childishness inspired by her still strong love and remembrance of her parents and grandmother, her love of cartoons and animals and her myriad influences due to her open-mindedness. However despite the light-heartedness of her style she is still very driven and competitive, silently comparing herself to peers and pushing herself. She joined a band in her Junior year, or rather started one with friends and didn’t protest when it appropriated by others, who would also become friends shortly thereafter. They play to this day, Beryl playing a role as the band’s lead guitarist and a mix engineer. The band’s more gloomy and sombre tones are askew from her own sensibilities, though she maintains her open mind and does as she is told happily, and she had begun to develop an artistic sensibility for the macabre, albeit filtered through her own cartoonish perspectives on art. She does not have synesthesia, but still feels mental satisfaction from blending the senses in her chosen medium: while composing music she dabbles in all other art forms from sketching like her father to film-making, she messes around with other artistically inclined friends and acquaintances to help her inquiries into other mediums.

She’s also become quite taken by making the home over in her image, which Issac allows especially as he is around to a lesser degree. Despite his concerns Beryl stabilizing and growing used to the impact of narcolepsy upon her life meant she insisted he begin to return to his old lifestyle he’d used to have with Francisca of travelling and tackling great challenges of athleticism. He begun to do so again the summer of her Sophomore year. In a way, she lived vicariously through her grandfather once more taking to the field. Meanwhile Beryl has become more domestic and regional despite her former ambitions of climbing great mountains and conquering slopes, she has turned the Chattanooga home into a grand garden in the making, with extensive plans for indoor and outdoor trees and large flower beds and vineyards, those being regularly destroyed by the two adopted dogs that succeeded Rosalind after her death from old age.

With most of her friends her open mindedness wins her points as she tends to be easily introduced to things they are into, thus absorbing pop culture. She has a whole host of things she dabbles in as a result, and her artistry and spirituality have benefited, especially as friends have introduced her to a wide variety of bands and influences ranging from the occult and the Lovecraftian to the sci-fi dystopian and noisecore. In school she flits into and out of clubs. Her open-mindedness means she casually develops many liberal and radical ideas, she quietly supports far left politics as an abstract whole and is interested in experimenting with her uncertain sexuality, with a myriad of crushes she quietly nurses. That said she maintains her broad spectrum of conflicting knowledge, and she doesn’t reject people on the basis of politics.

One specific thing she has absorbed more out of left-field than the others is an inroads into the furry fandom. Friends introduced her to it and she proved quite taken by the escapist and world-building nature of the subculture, as filtered through the animals she has always felt kinship with. She enjoys cycling between all sorts of original characters and using her art skills to her advantage, she has written short and well received comics posted online, usually PSAs promoting real life animal rights in a roundabout and distantly avant-garde way. The range of her emotional and spiritual beliefs has warped to include an identity as otherkin, or at least one identity of many that she carries among her many self-images.

Beryl’s interest in animals has her volunteering regularly in her free time, her most relaxed extracurricular engagement where her textbook knowledge has put her under consideration for extra training and duties. She knows many of the animals in the shelter by name and considers it a personal mission to find as many of them homes as she can, her lack of social charm can hinder this at times, but she is as good a face for the local shelter she works at as any. She dotes on the pets of friends, and is a go to for veterinarian advice in a pinch. She also consciously decided to be a vegan, and has faithfully stuck to this dietary lifestyle for two years, maintaining her physique with careful planning despite the lack of protein, though she does lament that she has perhaps lost some potential muscle development due to her decisions.

Beryl is a regular at the range in Chattanooga, with an above average accuracy for her age. She usually puts in a few hours a every other week, and she and Isaac have also started growing the collection of guns stowed the household, attending shows and arguing over preferred models, Beryl personally having a taste for the tactile feedback of a bolt action. She finds at this point that the noise of a gun firing- with earplugs in, of course- is even calming more than it is stressful, as she is so used to it. Despite the family’s liberal love of guns however, both Isaac and Beryl support gun control, and have lost some friends in their circles for that very position.

In her Senior year she is in advanced sciences such as AP Physics and Biology and goes to the local community college to continue her math education. Her recent amusements in her wheeling into and out of clubs have been Robotics Club and Academic Decathlon, where she has been assisting in competitions. She has also been trying to start a yoga club, but her meandering and random schedule tendencies have made this effort so far wasted. She has submitted a science fair every year since Freshman year, and does her own field work when possible, staying outside of the house for days to collect samples from nature with supervision from Isaac or her more so-inclined friends. She is academically a well rounded student, a bright girl who consistently ranks in the top percentile of all her classes. She has improved from her Junior year, where she would sometimes see grades slip to B's due to regularly letting homework projects slip from mind. She developed of one of her more unusual fashion statements: her hairband based memory system, where colors tied to specific locations on her fingers help jog her memories in a fun and thus more easily memorable way than more mundane things like schedules. She has an interest in alternative education and seeks to continue her education in schools such as Evergreen State, Reed, or Prescott, and she hopes to be involved in research, perhaps medical. She is especially set on Evergreen State as she feels a kinship with the energy of the local forest there.

Beryl is friendly, known for being easy and hard to talk to at once for her love of meandering and obtuse conversation. Her friends know her to be very helpful in the most experimental of ways, but they also know she can sometimes be unreliable, forgetting key points, sometimes becoming difficult to locate when her flights of whimsy change her schedules dramatically. She wears her quirks openly on her sleeve, preferring not to deal with the stress of trying to repress her own jovial nature, and taking negative attention as it comes with an open mind. She hopes to travel the world like her grandfather has. Her narcolepsy has stabilized, she has almost daily attacks of some nature but has grown used to it, and a lack of escalation of the symptoms means she has no interest in taking medicines, though she has pursued alternative cures unsuccessfully.

Advantages: Beryl is well trained in the usage of rifles and can use these types of guns with reliable form and aim, even if otherwise armed she has general knowledge of gun safety and usage and will generally be prepared to use all sorts of guns with competence and due caution. She is also trained in outdoorsman techniques and thus may be able to survive off the land to a degree her peers cannot match. Beryl's lifelong tendency to reflect her peers and readily learn from them may give her an edge in understanding her competitors on island, those that she is familiar with.
Disadvantages: Beryl struggles with social passiveness, permissiveness, and emotional repression that may prove deleterious to her psyche and cause her to take actions not conducive to survival, especially in potential group settings. The severity of her narcolepsy and cataplexy creates potentially dangerous and acute risks for her on island, and makes her emotional states a potential liability. Beryl has a natural bad habit in her lack of discipline and she can easily lose track of details and change plans almost arbitrarily, a trait that can worsen survival prospects.
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"C'mon! It's just a prank, bro."

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Unofficial Theme : 'When it's clear to everybody I'm always the last to know.'
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Sprite credit to Yugikun (Beryl Mahelona, Gyu-ri Christensen, and Demetri Fustcher) and Fenris (Charelle Chernyshyova, Ramsey Cortez, and Joanne Coleman).
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Sprite credit to Fenris (Ben Fields) and Yugikun (Tina Luz).
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Joined: June 26th, 2011, 8:09 pm

January 8th, 2018, 6:47 am #2

Heya, Cicada. Beryl is temporarily DENIED pending some edits. Let's get into them!

"She has an athletic, pear shape body," <---Shape should be shaped.

"She wore her usual makeup. " <---I see no previous mention of make-up in her description before this? I'd like to see either this section expanded to explain it, or a note on it when you're describing her every day style.

The first paragraph of Beryl's biography is a little confusing in its current state and I think it could be combined with some later information to clear it up. Was Isaac called into town to watch Beryl, or was he already staying there? If so, why? How were the months where she lived with her parents? You mention that she has heard stories about them, but don't give much indication in this section about what those stories entail, what kind of people her parents were, or how their relationship was with Sofia's grandparents. While we don't need in-depth details since this should be focused on Beryl, they enter and exit her profile fairly quickly for people who are such strong pillars of her relationship with faith and spirituality, so I'd like to see their role in this time period expanded accordingly.

What do Isaac and Francisca do for a living, or what did they do prior to retiring to leave them so wealthy?

The timeline gets muddy here. You jump between her growing up surrounded by books, adopting a puppy and developing a love for animals that would lead her to become vegan, and then back to her being four years old and the death of her grandmother. Putting this information in chronological order would help the flow and make all of it easier to digest. If necessary, try to break off pieces of relevant information like her deciding to become vegan and insert it later in the profile where it's more appropriate for the timeline, as right now it's not clear when she makes choices like that.

I would also check this and other places to make sure your tense is consistent, as there are moments like "Beryl has clear memories of a springtime day when she was four and had returned with Isaac from touring her preschool-to-be" where you jump into present tense in the middle of describing the past. In that same paragraph, the progression of events is unclear. If I'm following your description, as soon as Isaac and Beryl returned home from touring her new preschool he rushed to Francisa's room and she remembers loud sirens. Were the sirens present when they arrived, or did Isaac find her and then call for them? At the moment I can't tell if they came home to an emergency or Isaac found something off and called it in as soon as he discovered her body.

"Isaac and Beryl attended Church for some time, that didn’t last, but Beryl developed a curiosity for spirituality, the idea of an afterlife where she could meet her lost loved ones again comforting her." Church shouldn't be capitalized unless you're naming a specific church they attended. This sentence feels like a series of fragments and would probably work better broken up into a couple different ones. Was Isaac religious prior to this experience? Did they attend church together before? How old was Beryl when she started developing her own sense of religion? This seems to follow her grandmother dying when she was four, and a nuanced vision of spirituality based around animism and connection to one's ancestors seems like a rather large and specific concept for a four year old to arrive at on her own. Did Isaac guide her into this, and if so at what age?

What grade did Beryl attend public school and how old was she? Why does Isaac distrust the school system? Previously he had her enrolled in a preschool and there's no prior mention of homeschooling or distrust in her biography. Did something change, or was he comfortable with early levels of schooling for some reason? You also mention that Beryl missed her friends and Isaac was very supportive of setting up playdates and maintaining an active social life for her through gymnastics; were they involved with any sort of local homeschooling community? Many areas will have a network that provides social opportunities like craft events, dances, movie nights, and parent-led classes to local homeschoolers, and as social/informed as they both are that seems like something that might be considered, especially after the move to Los Angeles. Speaking of, why did they move to Los Angeles? I don't see a reason provided, and as I understand from earlier in the profile Chattanooga has been Isaac's home for at least several years. How does this move sync up with the rest of the timeline? You say that Beryl moves in second grade, but also that she previously attended public school for a year, but also that she has been homeschooled for an indeterminate period of time. I'm going to need more specifics on this whole period.

Under Beryl's interests you mention that she is into "rifling and gun culture" and I'm curious what this means for her. Right now all I'm seeing in her profile in this section and then a little later down is that her grandfather taught her to shoot, but nothing that would imply that she's got a presence or interest in the greater firearms culture outside of being able to shoot a gun. I'd like to see this interest expanded on because right now it feels a little tacked on and also creeps up out of nowhere; it's probably the biggest problem of the largest problem with Isaac where he seems to be an expert at whatever Beryl happens to need at the moment but have little character outside of that. I'd like more information on his backstory and how he became an excessively wealthy outdoorsman who can afford to move across the country on a whim multiple times before his granddaughter enters high school while having the time and ability to personally homeschool her to a level of academic performance that exceeds her public school peers.

Why do they move to Seattle and Salem, and why do they return to Chattanooga? How does all this moving effect her homeschooling? Different states have different requirements, and Salem, MA in particular requires a thorough assessment and prior approval of either the local superintendent or school board of your district before you may be excused from compulsory attendance, which is not an issue they would have dealt with previously so I'm curious how they handled it. Why does all of this moving stop just before Beryl enters high school? At the moment none of the locations have significance attached to them and there doesn't seem to be much reason for Beryl to attend public school or stop moving around with her grandfather.

"She sought out books to develop her spirituality, free now to build her own library of information separate of Issac’s,"<---Issac's should be Isaac's.

Did Beryl enter high school at 13? Even if she is a grade ahead that's early by my math; that would make her a freshman at 13, a sophomore at 14, a junior at 15, and a senior at 16, having her graduate a year before the game is set. Clarification is needed here. How does entering public school mesh with Isaac's previous distrust of the school system?

"She was less a consumer of media and more a producer and artisan like he considered himself to be." This line feels off tone to me and I'm not sure what it's getting at. I haven't seen any place previously where Beryl could be considered a producer of media or even particularly artistic/creative. If it's that Beryl forms her own opinions rather than being influenced by others, I would stick with something like that. If she's creating art/media at this time, I need some elaboration on what it is and where this interest came from.

You mention that Beryl has interests in gardening and animal caretaking. I can't find any mentions of the former outside of her interests section or any mentions of the latter outside of liking animals and taking care of her dog. How are these interests present in her life?

I can't find any mentions of narcolepsy being a condition that bans you from a shooting range at a cursory google search, and it doesn't seem like Isaac is concerned about her being unsafe since he takes her out on regular outings under his care. Why is she not allowed on the range?

You say in her advantages that Beryl is still physically fit, but the last note I find on her fitness is that Beryl replaced many of her physically demanding hobbies with more passive ones after her diagnosis. It's unclear exactly when her diagnosis happens, and I'd like to see that clarified with an exact time frame, but even if it was as recent as a few months ago if she's gone mostly sedentary since then I have a hard time believing that her physical fitness is still reasonably above that of the average high schooler, so I'd like to see either some clarification on how and why beryl is still staying fit or to see this advantage changed. I'd also like some elaboration on what sort of dangerous mindset Beryl's spirituality could distract her with in her disadvantages.

That's it for now. Post here once you've worked through these notes and I'll give her another look!
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January 8th, 2018, 4:26 pm #3

I don't think we're done yet because you made me add 2k words so there are probably many errors (and perhaps even more words still to add).
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"She wore her usual makeup. " <---I see no previous mention of make-up in her description before this? I'd like to see either this section expanded to explain it, or a note on it when you're describing her every day style.

The reference to her makeup was removed.

The first paragraph of Beryl's biography is a little confusing in its current state and I think it could be combined with some later information to clear it up. Was Isaac called into town to watch Beryl, or was he already staying there? If so, why? How were the months where she lived with her parents? You mention that she has heard stories about them, but don't give much indication in this section about what those stories entail, what kind of people her parents were, or how their relationship was with Sofia's grandparents. While we don't need in-depth details since this should be focused on Beryl, they enter and exit her profile fairly quickly for people who are such strong pillars of her relationship with faith and spirituality, so I'd like to see their role in this time period expanded accordingly.

I’ve clarified the timeline and spatial details in the first paragraph. Beryl was changed to weeks old at the time of her parents death. I changed the carbon monoxide cause of death to a car crash. I’ve elaborated on Sofia and Kekoa’s influence in the first two paragraphs, changing them both significantly and adding a third paragraph.

What do Isaac and Francisca do for a living, or what did they do prior to retiring to leave them so wealthy?

Details in the third paragraph. Francisca and Issac also receive more general elaboration as characters in the events preceding Francisca’s death.

The timeline gets muddy here. You jump between her growing up surrounded by books, adopting a puppy and developing a love for animals that would lead her to become vegan, and then back to her being four years old and the death of her grandmother. Putting this information in chronological order would help the flow and make all of it easier to digest. If necessary, try to break off pieces of relevant information like her deciding to become vegan and insert it later in the profile where it's more appropriate for the timeline, as right now it's not clear when she makes choices like that.

I opted to split and rearrange the information into several paragraphs. Francisca now stays alive for Beryl’s first year or two of public schooling. First paragraph dedicated to Issac/Francisca and Beryl learning to read and falling in love with science and how her upbringing cultivated that aspect of her. The second paragraph attempts to tie together her love of gardening and her love of animals, ties them both into her nascient sense of spirituality, and the bits concerning animal rights and veganism were moved to middle/high school parts of her profile. Third paragraph integrates her music tastes with her early experiences in school. Curie’s name was changed to Rosalind.

I would also check this and other places to make sure your tense is consistent, as there are moments like "Beryl has clear memories of a springtime day when she was four and had returned with Isaac from touring her preschool-to-be" where you jump into present tense in the middle of describing the past. In that same paragraph, the progression of events is unclear. If I'm following your description, as soon as Isaac and Beryl returned home from touring her new preschool he rushed to Francisa's room and she remembers loud sirens. Were the sirens present when they arrived, or did Isaac find her and then call for them? At the moment I can't tell if they came home to an emergency or Isaac found something off and called it in as soon as he discovered her body.

I have tried to standardize all verbs in the profile into past tense. The events involving Francisca’s death are significantly changed, and better integrated into Beryl’s general development.

"Isaac and Beryl attended Church for some time, that didn’t last, but Beryl developed a curiosity for spirituality, the idea of an afterlife where she could meet her lost loved ones again comforting her." Church shouldn't be capitalized unless you're naming a specific church they attended. This sentence feels like a series of fragments and would probably work better broken up into a couple different ones. Was Isaac religious prior to this experience? Did they attend church together before? How old was Beryl when she started developing her own sense of religion? This seems to follow her grandmother dying when she was four, and a nuanced vision of spirituality based around animism and connection to one's ancestors seems like a rather large and specific concept for a four year old to arrive at on her own. Did Isaac guide her into this, and if so at what age?

Clarified a bit more about Issac in this particular paragraph. Added her age. Removed the finer details of her budding spirituality, which was instead added to the middle/high school development of her spirituality.

What grade did Beryl attend public school and how old was she? Why does Isaac distrust the school system? Previously he had her enrolled in a preschool and there's no prior mention of homeschooling or distrust in her biography. Did something change, or was he comfortable with early levels of schooling for some reason? You also mention that Beryl missed her friends and Isaac was very supportive of setting up playdates and maintaining an active social life for her through gymnastics; were they involved with any sort of local homeschooling community? Many areas will have a network that provides social opportunities like craft events, dances, movie nights, and parent-led classes to local homeschoolers, and as social/informed as they both are that seems like something that might be considered, especially after the move to Los Angeles. Speaking of, why did they move to Los Angeles? I don't see a reason provided, and as I understand from earlier in the profile Chattanooga has been Isaac's home for at least several years. How does this move sync up with the rest of the timeline? You say that Beryl moves in second grade, but also that she previously attended public school for a year, but also that she has been homeschooled for an indeterminate period of time. I'm going to need more specifics on this whole period.

Beryl initially being allowed to attend public schools was given some justification via Francisca’s characterization. I further clarified his intentions and motive for removing her. Thanks for calling my attention to homeschooling networks, I will admit that I dropped the ball on research there. I made several major changes for the sake of providing more coherence to the section of her elementary/middle school years prior to high school:

Her gymnastics has been removed as a major element of that time in her life, and her falling into social pariah-dom has slightly altered as a result. Focus has been shifted onto her hobbies of gunmanship, outdoorsmanship, the general pursuit of exploration and dangerous stunts, and dabbling in other miscellaneous non-team sports. Furthermore, only a single move away from Chattanooga occurs, to Hawaii, and the reasoning is fully provided.

Under Beryl's interests you mention that she is into "rifling and gun culture" and I'm curious what this means for her. Right now all I'm seeing in her profile in this section and then a little later down is that her grandfather taught her to shoot, but nothing that would imply that she's got a presence or interest in the greater firearms culture outside of being able to shoot a gun. I'd like to see this interest expanded on because right now it feels a little tacked on and also creeps up out of nowhere; it's probably the biggest problem of the largest problem with Isaac where he seems to be an expert at whatever Beryl happens to need at the moment but have little character outside of that. I'd like more information on his backstory and how he became an excessively wealthy outdoorsman who can afford to move across the country on a whim multiple times before his granddaughter enters high school while having the time and ability to personally homeschool her to a level of academic performance that exceeds her public school peers.

Continued trying to make Issac more than a plot device as per my original sketches of his character. Some elaboration on her inroads into gun culture were added here, some were moved into high school parts of her profile to be more chronologically accurate.

Why do they move to Seattle and Salem, and why do they return to Chattanooga? How does all this moving effect her homeschooling? Different states have different requirements, and Salem, MA in particular requires a thorough assessment and prior approval of either the local superintendent or school board of your district before you may be excused from compulsory attendance, which is not an issue they would have dealt with previously so I'm curious how they handled it. Why does all of this moving stop just before Beryl enters high school? At the moment none of the locations have significance attached to them and there doesn't seem to be much reason for Beryl to attend public school or stop moving around with her grandfather.

I am ninety percent sure I removed these problems by way of removing the concept of her being a serial relocator.

"She sought out books to develop her spirituality, free now to build her own library of information separate of Issac’s,"<---Issac's should be Isaac's.

I spelled Isaac wrong way too many times in this profile. Hopefully it’s all fixed.

Did Beryl enter high school at 13? Even if she is a grade ahead that's early by my math; that would make her a freshman at 13, a sophomore at 14, a junior at 15, and a senior at 16, having her graduate a year before the game is set. Clarification is needed here. How does entering public school mesh with Isaac's previous distrust of the school system?

I’m a mathematical genius. Age of her entry into school was fixed to be more appropriate. As was her age overall, she is now 18, as per the birthday I canonized for her. Just barely 18 (as of last month!), but 18. The circumstances behind Beryl’s return to Chattanooga and entry into public school being allowed by Isaac are also clarified.

"She was less a consumer of media and more a producer and artisan like he considered himself to be." This line feels off tone to me and I'm not sure what it's getting at. I haven't seen any place previously where Beryl could be considered a producer of media or even particularly artistic/creative. If it's that Beryl forms her own opinions rather than being influenced by others, I would stick with something like that. If she's creating art/media at this time, I need some elaboration on what it is and where this interest came from.

Removed the idea, and I think I developed a more to-the-point blueprint for what I was going for in her high school year musings on her interests in the arts.

You mention that Beryl has interests in gardening and animal caretaking. I can't find any mentions of the former outside of her interests section or any mentions of the latter outside of liking animals and taking care of her dog. How are these interests present in her life?

More relevant examples of her interests in both these things circa her high school era have been added: animal volunteering, and a home garden.

I can't find any mentions of narcolepsy being a condition that bans you from a shooting range at a cursory google search, and it doesn't seem like Isaac is concerned about her being unsafe since he takes her out on regular outings under his care. Why is she not allowed on the range?

I swear I had a proper source but I didn’t take note of it. I cannot find it again, so I will defer to your judgement and remove this particular element of her profile. I have also changed a major aspect of her narcolepsy, as I have researched new pertinent information concerning and have lessened the impact of the narcolepsy diagnosis on her active lifestyle, to an extent, because I believe I overplayed it’s importance.

You say in her advantages that Beryl is still physically fit, but the last note I find on her fitness is that Beryl replaced many of her physically demanding hobbies with more passive ones after her diagnosis. It's unclear exactly when her diagnosis happens, and I'd like to see that clarified with an exact time frame, but even if it was as recent as a few months ago if she's gone mostly sedentary since then I have a hard time believing that her physical fitness is still reasonably above that of the average high schooler, so I'd like to see either some clarification on how and why beryl is still staying fit or to see this advantage changed. I'd also like some elaboration on what sort of dangerous mindset Beryl's spirituality could distract her with in her disadvantages.

I agree with you on that and have removed her fitness as a strength. I also removed the offending disadvantage, I believe it was actually more an offshoot of my vision with her personality based weakness that was redundant on your calling attention to it.
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January 13th, 2018, 4:27 am #4

Beryl is looking great, but I've got some lingering questions so I'm going to leave her DENIED on this pass while we sort them out.

In the expanded section on her parents it looks like her father is a Hawaiian native who had been living and working in the area she was born in prior to knowing her mother. Where is his family in all of this? Asking a grandparent to fly in from the middle of the mainland to babysit for a week if there are other relatives available seems like a big ask to me, and his family doesn't seem to have any presence in Beryl's life at all going forward, so I'd like some clarification as to why they don't factor in at all. This seems especially important since now Isaac and Beryl spend time living in Hawaii.

"Beryl’s third grade year proper, on the other hand, introduced some problems. Isaac and Beryl still involved themselves in the local community of homeschooled" <---homeschooled should be homeschoolers or "the local homeschool community"

You say that Beryl's church attendance didn't last, but don't say why. How does she feel about traditional religion? How does Isaac feel about both her growing conception of spirituality and her rejection of his childhood faith?

Beryl's advantages and disadvantages as they stand are good, but I'd like to see one more of each to round them out at three apiece.

Post here when you've addressed these questions and I'll give her another look!
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It was difficult to nail down exactly when the anger started. Remembering a time when it wasn't there, coiled up and waiting to strike or alive and thrashing, was growing more and more challenging. It'd been with her for so long that it no longer felt like an intruder in her mind. It felt like a part of her.
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Abby Floyd:This place was vile. Overwhelmingly, terribly vile. Character Theme: Everything's Alright-Emily Scholz
Ty Yazzie: You ever wonder if you still got a home to go back to? Character Theme: Warrior People-Medicine For The People
Isaac Brea(Adopted from Espi): Isaac's well of fucks was bone-dry. Character Theme: The Whiskey, The Liar, The Thief-Patent Pending
Caedyn Miller:So...how did you wanna do this? Feeling an open casket? Or is that dumb? Nah, don't say it, that's dumb. We'll be soup by the time they send us home anyway. Character Theme: Sleep-My Chemical Romance
Irene Djezari(Adopted from CicadaDays): Death was not worse than Meme Hell. Character Theme: A Beautiful Lie-30 Seconds To Mars

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Jacob Brooks: ... Character Theme: 1812 Overture-Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky
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January 13th, 2018, 8:35 am #5

Hopefully, all issues addressed! Full profile with edits marked by red:
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Name: Beryl Furushima Cunningham Mahelona
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12
School: George Hunter High School
Hobbies and Interests: Spirituality, Yoga, Rifling and Gun Culture, Outdoorsmanship, Basketball, Music Production and Songwriting, Animal Caretaking, Gardening and Horticulture, Science and Medicine, Furry Fandom.

Appearance: Beryl Mahelona is 6’1”, she has a classic Pacific Islander tan complexion. She has an athletic, pear shaped body, and weighs 195 lb, mostly in well developed and defined lean muscles especially of her legs, back, and abs.

Beryl has a slightly angular face with a defined chin. Her facial complexion is healthy. She has slightly chubby cheeks. Her eyes are a dull grayish-green, and she has thick unkempt eyebrows. She wears oversize round-rim glasses with thin frames. She has a small button nose. She has thick light brown lips with a prominent cupid’s bow. Her hair is thick, slightly wavy, it grows down to her waist; she keeps it generally free of tangles and healthy, though it has the tendency to slowly rearrange into bedhead over the course of a full school day.

Due to height constraints her wardrobe is rather small and she can often be seen repeating clothes week to week. She wears monocolor t-shirts and blouses, hoodies, and jeans and skirts, she’s also willing to mix and match with her exercise gear, for example wearing a tee and athletic shorts as her uniform to school sometimes. She’ll always be wearing some manner of necklace with a spiritual connotation such as animal bone, crystal effects, or beads. She ties a constantly changing variety of colored hairbands around her fingers, which she uses as a fun reminder system to help with her memory.

Beryl has a soft and bright, somewhat nasal voice. Her accent is neutral and does not sound local. She notably tends to take her time when pausing to breathe, so the cadence of her sentences can be slow. She is bilingual and can speak Hawaiian conversationally.

On the day of the abduction Beryl wore a black long sleeve hoodie on top of a white camisole, and a grey knee length skirt. She wore tall athletic socks and red tall-tongue sneakers with white soles. She had three green colored bands on her left ring finger, a blue band on her left index, a red band and an orange band on her right pinkie, and a blue band on her right index. She brought her glasses, wore a rose quartz necklace, and several bead bracelets draped solely on her right arm.

Biography: Beryl Mahelona was born to Kekoa Furushima Mahelona and Sofia Cunningham, December 1st, 2000, in Honolulu Hawaii. Sofia was a headstrong geologist, daughter of Isaac Cunningham, a retired researcher and team leader for Pfizer involved with the development of several of their blockbuster drugs. Kekoa had worked in the U. of Hawaii Manoa’s custodial team and they’d met while Sofia had been working with her thesis. On the week before her thesis defense Kekoa and Sofia called in Isaac from his home in Chattanooga to help take care of still weeks old Beryl while Sofia prepared. He stayed in the house for a week. On the day of the thesis defense proper Kekoa and Sofia were rammed by a drunk driver while driving into the campus. Sofia was declared dead by arriving paramedics, Kekoa died three hours later from internal injuries, comatose with Isaac at his bedside.

Sofia had been Isaac’s only child, but he took responsibility despite his devastation, being the sort to project strength. He adopted Beryl and brought her home to Chattanooga where his wife Francisca was waiting. They took very good care of Beryl, after a period of infant fussiness and grief she settled down, she maintains no memories of her biological parents. She only knows about them through stories told to her by Isaac from a young age.

Sofia had been a reluctant mother, but with high hopes for her daughter's intelligence and independence matching her own. Sofia had been a militant third-wave feminist, and had idolized all manner of female scientists of antiquity like Florence Bascom, Rosalind Franklin, and Emmy Noether. Kekoa had devoted himself to his wife and had worked multiple jobs despite his lack of a degree. He'd been taught art by his adoptive mother and father, an elderly Japanese couple estranged from their family in Japan. Kekoa was their only family, and neither would live to see Kekoa meet Sofia. Kekoa had told Issac when asking for his blessing that he believed in Sofia's vision totally, but hoped Beryl would perhaps inherit some of his artistic spirit. Beryl inherited from Isaac many relics: photos, letters, Sofia’s handwritten dense and technical notes from school, Kekoa’s artistic sketches: of the couple, their future daughter, gorgeous Hawaiian landscapes, and miscellaneous vibrant abstracts. She accepts their being gone, but her desire to somehow grow a real connection with what she feels of their lingering spirits and to live up to their hopes and dreams for her is the basis of her self-developed spirituality.

Isaac was a rich man, he had been given generous stock options by Pfizer when he retired and had successfully invested in real estate in Texas and Arkansas, his and Beryl’s home is a mansion large even for Frazier’s Glen. His and his wife’s love of travel and knowledge meant young Beryl had plenty to read. Beryl was a bright and happy young child, curiosity and energy carried her through plenty of her grandfather’s books when she wasn’t being more hyperactive. She loved to be read to and eventually read on her own about science and Isaac encouraged her with his plentiful knowledge and experience. He was sometimes strict with her about retaining information where she was otherwise prone to be distracted, as his vision of Beryl’s upbringing generally echoed that of Sofia’s vision of Beryl being fierce and independent. Francisca was a softer sort, and even though Isaac insisted Beryl not attend preschool she won that argument for a few years, saying Beryl would be helped by socialization.

When she was old enough Isaac and Francisca would have her help in the garden, and Beryl’s memories of the scents of flowers and the earth still compel her to feel at home working in gardens. She also has nostalgic recollection of how their adopted husky puppy, Rosalind, would destroy their hard work on the garden by ripping up flowers, to young Beryl’s delight. She developed an instinct for animal caretaking, with Isaac's help and his textbooks. Beryl loved animals for their innocence and how she could learn about them from her books: dogs, cats, squirrels, lizards, worms, anything. For both plants and animals alike Beryl sensed kindred spirits, as part of her budding spiritual instincts. For a time when she was four she would try and avoid stepping on small things, ants, worms, flowers, the like. Once, she was upset that she’d accidentally crushed a butterfly while playing with Rosalind. Francisca and Isaac both comforted her, and Isaac particularly told her that sometimes life ended and that it was natural and beautiful, and Beryl would take that lesson to heart as best as she knew how at such a young age.

At Francisca’s insistence Beryl attended Kindergarten, her precocious knowledge in the sciences and her strong imagination and friendliness won her good relationships with her peers and teacher. She was especially active on the playground and loved expending her youthful energy running and jumping around with friends, and she showed a knack for coordination one might expect of a ballet dancer or gymnast. Beryl also began to dance at home. She had access to her grandpa’s CD collection, and especially enjoyed the colorful and eclectic sounds of his psychedelic rock albums, though she also liked his tastes in jazz and big band, developing from a young age breadth in her musical tastes. Francisca noted she was already dancing somewhat like a ballet dancer to his classical CDs, and she had plans of enrolling Beryl in a dance class or gymnastics.

However, these plans did not come to be as Francisca’s health began to take a turn for the worse and she was increasingly bedridden. Isaac, believing it important to toughen up Beryl some with the sober reality of real life, made no attempt to sugar coat what was happening. Beryl was regularly at Francisca’s side, and made up a number of silly childish spells and chants that made Francisca smile. Francisca died during Beryl’s last weeks of Kindergarten.

Isaac tried to use the experience as a healthy way to teach Beryl about grief and loss. Beryl was shocked and understandably upset for some time, but her grandfather’s firm demeanor guided her through the troubled time. Isaac had lived a long life, lost brothers in World War Two, and he sought to guide Beryl as best he knew how. Anglican as a youth, Isaac brought Beryl to church for some time so she could explore religion for herself. He had no intent that she practice, as he hadn't practiced himself after his youth, but he was hopeful she'd be able to make up her own mind with careful exposure. In the end Beryl left the Church, finding the ideas fascinating but the practice boring and stifled. Beryl still developed a curiosity for spirituality, the idea of an afterlife where she could meet her lost loved ones again comforting her. Her love of nature instinctively led her to wonder if there was more lurking beneath the surface, especially as it reminded her of her father's artistic talents for capturing nature in stills. Even simply exploring her own home’s garden, playing with Rosalind, chasing butterflies, the comfort she felt was great, and she felt profound kinship. By the age of six she began to ‘speak’ with the spirits in the world around her. Isaac encouraged her patiently, touched by Beryl’s attentions to his deceased daughter in particular.

Before Beryl began first grade, Isaac made the decision to follow through with his own plans- what he firmly believed Sofia would have endorsed and done as well- of homeschooling her. Beryl loved the idea because it gave her more time with her favorite cartoons, books, the garden, and Rosalind. Isaac continued to bring her out to playdates and she made some new friends with Chattanooga’s small but vibrant homeschool network, children friendly to her and their parents usually sympathetic to Isaac, who was generally liked in the community for his generosity to local causes, and his charm and wit. Isaac's intellect and fervor made him a strong teacher in the sciences and mathematics and Beryl’s knowledge and comprehension was advanced for her age. Beryl stayed in Chattanooga until her second grade years.

They would move to Hawaii, specifically to Kailua, on the other side of a mountain tunnel from Honolulu. Isaac had been recruited by a family friend- Sofia’s old college roommate- to provide off-the books consulting for a research startup. Beryl agreed to move when asked, excited by the prospect of adventure, as long as she got to decide how they’d grow the garden in their new home and they brought Rosalind. Beryl spent that summer doing much with her novice knowledge of horticulture, to her delight. She picked out beautiful native plants for the garden, like ohi’a lehua flowers and the ahinahina shrub, and was fully in charge of the watering and nutrients. If she forgot anything, as she sometimes did, Isaac would trust her to fix her mistakes, which motivated her to be responsible. She would even get to help out at the greenhouses Isaac was setting up in the mountains as part of his job, doing some planting, potting, watering, and soil testing, which she delighted in, especially as adults praised her for her effort and intelligence. She enjoyed this summer in her life greatly.

Beryl’s third grade year proper, on the other hand, introduced some problems. Isaac and Beryl still involved themselves in the local community of homeschoolers, but as strangers integration was harder, especially with Isaac now busier and less capable of socializing with his adult contemporaries, indeed he was often out of the house when not teaching Beryl and thus babysitters were a constant presence. Among her peers her outgoingness was less well received, culture barriers abound, and her peers thought Beryl’s tendency to ramble about subjects they hadn’t been taught yet and ‘spirits’ was creepy and snobbish. She was rejected often and only had few friends. She was bothered, but when she told Isaac he merely assured her she could ignore negative attention. She was stubbornly determined to prove herself so she deferred to his judgement and was a social pariah. More often than not she found she had no playdates and had to entertain herself, playing with Rosalind, reading and studying, and watching television.

On their spare weekends, perhaps in a ploy to distract Beryl from her social difficulties, Isaac introduced Beryl to guns. As a gun aficionado he personally wanted Beryl to be familiar with guns, even so young, as he’d usually kept them in the house and had only put them in storage for Beryl’s safety. He’d bring her to a local range, at first just to watch him while she read. The loud and violent stimulation was scary at first but she got used to it, then got curious and eventually begged her Grandpa to let her try. As early as the age of eight, nine, she was shooting, with plenty of supervision from Isaac. Being so young she was doted on by adults present, forming fond memories of an abundance of father-like figures. She and her grandpa were invited hunting at first, but she balked at the idea and Isaac respected her strong feelings on animal violence by refusing to go himself. A competitive drive to improve herself woke in her for the first time, she aimed to develop her accuracy, though she was no prodigy for her age she developed marksmanship at a decent clip.

Beryl’s academic skills advanced at a quick pace under Isaac's teaching, she remained a full quantifiable grade level ahead of her average peer by age, and then some. She enjoyed the structure of having plenty of breaks to wander off and do her own thing. This instilled in her a certain distractibility, while she is intelligent and good at research she was never used to more rigid school structure experiences due to her formative upbringing. She would meander often, from activity to activity, to keep herself alert and engaged, and she had atrocious organizational skills, from a young age she was naturally forgetful but bad habits would worsen that tendency with time.

Isaac brought Beryl wherever he could to give her experiences. By Beryl’s fifth grade year often she was the one planning weekend excursions in pursuit of spending time in nature, avoiding alternatives like scout troops and camps due to some degree of alienation and slightly elitist assumptions, enforced by Isaac, that camping in groups would be an inferior learning experience. Beryl’s experiences in life naturally lent her to cultivating outdoorsmanship, and she enjoyed activities out in the wild such as navigation, bird watching, and sketching samples of flora. Sometimes she would go camping entirely alone, to immerse herself in the little trafficked regions of Hawaii’s wilderness. She considered these meditative experiences where she could ‘discuss’ her life and inspirations, academic and artistic, with the spirits around her. Isaac would sometimes escort her by plane to another island for a weekend getaway, just for a change of scenery, where she could wander the natural landmarks to her heart’s content.

Isaac also brought Beryl on multiple summer trips, packed with adventure, including: climbing and skiing Mt. Ranier, hiking Mt. Fuji in Japan, camping in places such as the Fischer Towers Campgrounds and Joshua Tree National Park. Beryl began to develop something of a liking for adrenaline, as Isaac wasn’t the sort to go easy on Beryl, and Beryl delighted in the hands off training, finding she learned better with a little danger. One summer she learned skiing, the next winter she picked up snowboarding, and surfing the next summer. Of course she never found expertise, but she was inspired by following in the footsteps of her phenomenally active and fit grandpa, and she was motivated by the plan of setting the foundations for a future where she could tackle the sort of physically daunting challenges that Isaac had: Kilimanjaro, the Badwater Ultramarathon, among other things.

Beryl’s thirteenth birthday was heralded with a surprise from Isaac. He gifted her a Tikka T3 bolt-action rifle, and revealed that with his project in Hawaii wrapped up he was willing to allow Beryl complete autonomy in deciding where the next phase of their life would lead, expecting her to start taking up more and more duties as co-head of household as she matured. Armed with this power Beryl was quick to say they return to Chattanooga. On some level she deeply missed the strong connections she’d made with playdates from her old home, it had been a happier and simpler time she’d lost, and she felt a spiritual draw back in that direction. She and her grandfather returned to Chattanooga in her 8th grade year. Beryl was still homeschooled. Her grandfather was beginning to pursue a pedagogy of encouraging Beryl to have more self-direction and forge her own path, and get out of the house more.

Armed with these encouragements to freedom and with a stronger support group formed by reconnecting with old friends, Beryl elected to expand her extracurricular engagements. Puberty didn’t affect her perception of her body much, but she did begin to feel physical strength matching her love of athletic endeavors, she felt a strong drive to be more competitive and performance oriented. Thus, she engaged herself in basketball, yoga, and swimming in the local center. She especially loved basketball and had a natural affinity for it between her athleticism and her height already being impressive for her age. She felt awkward around teammates, there was jealousy from them over her aptitude, and furthermore her loner streak in elementary school had left her with odd quirks and a lack of charm. Feeling the peer pressure Beryl elected to suppress things like well-meaning criticisms of teammate performances, stayed out of arguments and drama and even let others blame her for things to keep the peace. She was almost kicked off the team once when she let herself be wrongly accused of petty theft, but remained silent and didn’t defend herself. Such generally nice and agreeable behavior seemed to make her more acceptable to people and make them amiable to her quirks, and she adopted it as a public persona she quickly learned to embrace.

She also expanded her interest in Isaac's musical collection, and started listening to more music and radio in general. She listened to everything, from classical to underground European electronica to Top 40 pop, she enjoyed it all on both a practical and philosophical level, as her maturing spirituality and perception of herself broadened her perspective and opened her naturally already very accepting mind. Isaac helped her out by buying her a number of musical devices as her skills developed, allowing her to devote unneeded time in the home classroom to developing her musical talent, instead of racing ahead in content like they usually would. She slowly built her own ‘studio’ with a keyboard, guitars, amps, and though late in developing the skills she learned relatively fast, she could play competently and sort of sight read by her high school years. Her best instruments would be the bass guitar and keyboards, and she had a knack for composing drony riffs reminiscent of bands like Catherine Wheel.

She also developed an affinity for yoga. At first she attended more for the spiritual aspect than physical. She developed her knowledge of crystals, her own chakras, life energies, and integrated that information into her own growing world view. She eventually turned her aims to also physically benefitting from yoga. In general, she sought out books to develop her spirituality, free now to build her own library of information separate of Isaac’s, and she started to develop her own extensive canon, creatively freewheeling based on her emotional connections to the world, her desire to fit in and live up to the connections she felt to her parent’s spirits. Hypocrisy and dichotomy would never bother her much, she easily reconciled her material wants with her spiritual wants, her scientific understanding with her spiritual understanding, though an outsider would probably consider her justifications flimsy, dubious, and evasive. She now come to understand and accept that she had animist beliefs, worshiping the spirits of nature around her through the rituals of her outdoorsmanship and through her own pursuit of self-improvement and self-actualization to specifically honor her deceased parents and grandmother who had rejoined the earth. Beryl appreciated not having to consistently practice samey rituals like her other spiritual friends were inclined, though she allowed herself to be inspired by the study of the intricacies of other faiths.

Isaac surprised Beryl on her 14th birthday with the news that he’d allow her to go into a public high school if she so chose. He had been impressed with the passion Beryl had taken to all of her new hobbies in her busy year, and he decided that the schooling system, while still inadequate, would be conducive to nurturing her budding talents. He admitted to her, honestly as always, that he had reflected on her growth and realized he himself lost sight of Beryl’s own prowess and talents as an individual in his pursuit of honoring Beryl’s mother’s vision of her daughter. He still wanted her to achieve autonomy and ‘ferocious’ independence, but free of his visions and biases, so he would give her the option to return in full to the public sphere. Beryl was nervous, honestly scared of more social failures and challenges, but at the same time she welcomed the challenges with her honed explorer’s zeal, so she decided to enroll in George Hunter that very year.

She enjoyed the benefit of being in easy classes below her level that she didn’t need to invest much effort into, so she had plenty of free time to sink into extracurriculars. She was able to attend a science fair with Mrs. Zhang’s prompting and guidance and produced a decent statistical experiment concerning blood typing that got her to state level. She joined clubs like Chess, Robotics, Debate, so on, though few interested her long term as she found she was more passive and less free to go wild with her ambitions in group settings. Sports interested her, she joined the Girl’s Jr. Varsity Basketball team in the winter and was a stand out small forward. Socially she maintained her learned methodology of being more meek and friendly, and always being helpful and keeping her ears open to the often unfamiliar interests of her peers- mainstream or otherwise- so as to stay inoffensive. Sometimes people sometimes took advantage of her easy-going, easily overpowered nature, or bullied her for her still readily apparent oddities. She took it in her stride.

A few games into basketball season Beryl felt faint and weak, and suddenly dozed off for a few minutes during half-time intermission but the game moved on, they won, and Beryl ignored what had happened. Two or so days later while jamming to music and playing with Rosalind in their living room Beryl collapsed, conscious but with suddenly extremely weak muscles. Isaac was at home and rushed to her side, getting her to a hospital. She had to miss a basketball game and several days of class for extensive specialized medical testing, which determined she had narcolepsy with cataplexy.

Beryl’s life significantly changed following the diagnosis. She drew unwanted attention with semi-frequent fits of cataplexy or sleep attacks. Her basketball season ground to an abrupt halt, for her safety due to the uncertain nature of her diagnosis she stayed on the bench for most of the season and Beryl had reason to believe through eavesdropping that her teammates had some resentment for her beneath their outward sympathy. She quit the team after the season ended, and despite her desires to stay active in competitive sports she could never again trust herself with such activities due to the safety risks and general embarrassment.

Beryl and Isaac were both on some level devastated even if neither was inclined to let it show. Beryl had lost some degree of the foundations of her autonomy and spirituality, now she would often need supervision from friends or family to be safe from the potential of injury due to an attack, and thus had the range of daily activities available to her more limited. Emotionally she became more withdrawn as one common thing that seemed to proceed attacks was heightened emotional states. Her natural tendency to be evasive deepened, and she protected herself with a polite smile and even more whimsical, doormat like behavior, somewhat forced. Conflict became increasingly difficult for her to stomach, as the anxiety often welled up with the uncertain lurch of an oncoming cataplexy attack, so her willingness to tolerate mental incongruities continued to grow.

Beryl replaced basketball with less anxiety-inducing and demanding gym time, as she was still determined to stay fit and healthy even if she no longer considered herself trustworthy on the field. Her love for basketball remained strong, however, she watched basketball games and had her own fantasy leagues, and she attends all the school games religiously. She also started to play pickup games again in her junior year, a little more removed and stable from the Freshman year incident that had humiliated her and robbed her of her precious autonomy.

Armed with more time around the house she started to write more music, adopting songwriting with a very abstract, whimsical, spiritual sort of bend. In general her artistic expression became very detailed and freewheeling. She sketched, made music, and practiced her spirituality via things like meditation, yoga, and rituals to a common creative rhythm she built for herself, a core aesthetic of escapism and childishness inspired by her still strong love and remembrance of her parents and grandmother, her love of cartoons and animals and her myriad influences due to her open-mindedness. However despite the light-heartedness of her style she is still very driven and competitive, silently comparing herself to peers and pushing herself. She joined a band in her Junior year, or rather started one with friends and didn’t protest when it appropriated by others, who would also become friends shortly thereafter. They play to this day, Beryl playing a role as the band’s lead guitarist and a mix engineer. The band’s more gloomy and sombre tones are askew from her own sensibilities, though she maintains her open mind and does as she is told happily, and she had begun to develop an artistic sensibility for the macabre, albeit filtered through her own cartoonish perspectives on art. She does not have synesthesia, but still feels mental satisfaction from blending the senses in her chosen medium: while composing music she dabbles in all other art forms from sketching like her father to film-making, she messes around with other artistically inclined friends and acquaintances to help her inquiries into other mediums.

She’s also become quite taken by making the home over in her image, which Issac allows especially as he is around to a lesser degree. Despite his concerns Beryl stabilizing and growing used to the impact of narcolepsy upon her life meant she insisted he begin to return to his old lifestyle he’d used to have with Francisca of travelling and tackling great challenges of athleticism. He begun to do so again the summer of her Sophomore year. In a way, she lived vicariously through her grandfather once more taking to the field. Meanwhile Beryl has become more domestic and regional despite her former ambitions of climbing great mountains and conquering slopes, she has turned the Chattanooga home into a grand garden in the making, with extensive plans for indoor and outdoor trees and large flower beds and vineyards, those being regularly destroyed by the two adopted dogs that succeeded Rosalind after her death from old age.

With most of her friends her open mindedness wins her points as she tends to be easily introduced to things they are into, thus absorbing pop culture. She has a whole host of things she dabbles in as a result, and her artistry and spirituality have benefited, especially as friends have introduced her to a wide variety of bands and influences ranging from the occult and the Lovecraftian to the sci-fi dystopian and noisecore. In school she flits into and out of clubs. Her open-mindedness means she casually develops many liberal and radical ideas, she quietly supports far left politics as an abstract whole and is interested in experimenting with her uncertain sexuality, with a myriad of crushes she quietly nurses. That said she maintains her broad spectrum of conflicting knowledge, and she doesn’t reject people on the basis of politics.

One specific thing she has absorbed more out of left-field than the others is an inroads into the furry fandom. Friends introduced her to it and she proved quite taken by the escapist and world-building nature of the subculture, as filtered through the animals she has always felt kinship with. She enjoys cycling between all sorts of original characters and using her art skills to her advantage, she has written short and well received comics posted online, usually PSAs promoting real life animal rights in a roundabout and distantly avant-garde way. The range of her emotional and spiritual beliefs has warped to include an identity as otherkin, or at least one identity of many that she carries among her many self-images.

Beryl’s interest in animals has her volunteering regularly in her free time, her most relaxed extracurricular engagement where her textbook knowledge has put her under consideration for extra training and duties. She knows many of the animals in the shelter by name and considers it a personal mission to find as many of them homes as she can, her lack of social charm can hinder this at times, but she is as good a face for the local shelter she works at as any. She dotes on the pets of friends, and is a go to for veterinarian advice in a pinch. She also consciously decided to be a vegan, and has faithfully stuck to this dietary lifestyle for two years, maintaining her physique with careful planning despite the lack of protein, though she does lament that she has perhaps lost some potential muscle development due to her decisions.

Beryl is a regular at the range in Chattanooga, with an above average accuracy for her age. She usually puts in a few hours a every other week, and she and Isaac have also started growing the collection of guns stowed the household, attending shows and arguing over preferred models, Beryl personally having a taste for the tactile feedback of a bolt action. She finds at this point that the noise of a gun firing- with earplugs in, of course- is even calming more than it is stressful, as she is so used to it. Despite the family’s liberal love of guns however, both Isaac and Beryl support gun control, and have lost some friends in their circles for that very position.

In her Senior year she is in advanced sciences such as AP Physics and Biology and goes to the local community college to continue her math education. Her recent amusements in her wheeling into and out of clubs have been Robotics Club and Academic Decathlon, where she has been assisting in competitions. She has also been trying to start a yoga club, but her meandering and random schedule tendencies have made this effort so far wasted. She has submitted a science fair every year since Freshman year, and does her own field work when possible, staying outside of the house for days to collect samples from nature with supervision from Isaac or her more so-inclined friends. She is academically a well rounded student, a bright girl who consistently ranks in the top percentile of all her classes. She has improved from her Junior year, where she would sometimes see grades slip to B's due to regularly letting homework projects slip from mind. She developed of one of her more unusual fashion statements: her hairband based memory system, where colors tied to specific locations on her fingers help jog her memories in a fun and thus more easily memorable way than more mundane things like schedules. She has an interest in alternative education and seeks to continue her education in schools such as Evergreen State, Reed, or Prescott, and she hopes to be involved in research, perhaps medical. She is especially set on Evergreen State as she feels a kinship with the energy of the local forest there.

Beryl is friendly, known for being easy and hard to talk to at once for her love of meandering and obtuse conversation. Her friends know her to be very helpful in the most experimental of ways, but they also know she can sometimes be unreliable, forgetting key points, sometimes becoming difficult to locate when her flights of whimsy change her schedules dramatically. She wears her quirks openly on her sleeve, preferring not to deal with the stress of trying to repress her own jovial nature, and taking negative attention as it comes with an open mind. She hopes to travel the world like her grandfather has. Her narcolepsy has stabilized, she has almost daily attacks of some nature but has grown used to it, and a lack of escalation of the symptoms means she has no interest in taking medicines, though she has pursued alternative cures unsuccessfully.

Advantages: Beryl is well trained in the usage of rifles and can use these types of guns with reliable form and aim, even if otherwise armed she has general knowledge of gun safety and usage and will generally be prepared to use all sorts of guns with competence and due caution. She is also trained in outdoorsman techniques and thus may be able to survive off the land to a degree her peers cannot match. Beryl enjoys a unique mind and perspective on things that may afford her advantages, especially in terms of her peers due to her tendency to readily learn from them in school.
Disadvantages: Beryl struggles with social passiveness, permissiveness, and emotional repression that may prove deleterious to her psyche and cause her to take actions not conducive to survival, especially in potential group settings. The severity of her narcolepsy and cataplexy creates potentially dangerous and acute risks for her on island, and makes her emotional states a potential liability. Beryl has a natural bad habit in her lack of discipline and she can easily lose track of details and change plans almost arbitrarily, a trait that can worsen survival prospects.
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"C'mon! It's just a prank, bro."

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Unofficial Theme : 'When it's clear to everybody I'm always the last to know.'
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Sprite credit to Yugikun (Beryl Mahelona, Gyu-ri Christensen, and Demetri Fustcher) and Fenris (Charelle Chernyshyova, Ramsey Cortez, and Joanne Coleman).
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B036 - Dead
(Adopted from Yugikun)
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"And you were the one looking to pick a fight. Don't complain when you don't get the one you want."
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"Hope that's good enough."
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G047 - Dead
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"It's Tina."
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Sprite credit to Fenris (Ben Fields) and Yugikun (Tina Luz).
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Joined: June 26th, 2011, 8:09 pm

January 13th, 2018, 11:09 pm #6

Beryl's DENIED pending one more thing. Her new advantage seems kinda vague and broad; rather than saying it might confer advantages to her, I'd rather see those advantages themselves listed here, since right now it reads like a blank check.
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G056, Alda Abbate(Adopted)
It was difficult to nail down exactly when the anger started. Remembering a time when it wasn't there, coiled up and waiting to strike or alive and thrashing, was growing more and more challenging. It'd been with her for so long that it no longer felt like an intruder in her mind. It felt like a part of her.
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B062, Garrett Wilde
I multiplied. Then I subtracted. That's what we do now. That's how we keep the most people around.
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B014, Joachim Lovelace(Adopted)
Your turn.
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Abby Floyd:This place was vile. Overwhelmingly, terribly vile. Character Theme: Everything's Alright-Emily Scholz
Ty Yazzie: You ever wonder if you still got a home to go back to? Character Theme: Warrior People-Medicine For The People
Isaac Brea(Adopted from Espi): Isaac's well of fucks was bone-dry. Character Theme: The Whiskey, The Liar, The Thief-Patent Pending
Caedyn Miller:So...how did you wanna do this? Feeling an open casket? Or is that dumb? Nah, don't say it, that's dumb. We'll be soup by the time they send us home anyway. Character Theme: Sleep-My Chemical Romance
Irene Djezari(Adopted from CicadaDays): Death was not worse than Meme Hell. Character Theme: A Beautiful Lie-30 Seconds To Mars

NPCs:
Jacob Brooks: ... Character Theme: 1812 Overture-Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky
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Blaise d'Aramitz: Blonde Hair, Black Lungs-Sorority Noise
Helena 'Hel" Fury: Okay, but riddle me this: where in the rulebook does it say it's not a series of automatic critical hits if I Flurry of Blows an ogre's nutsack like a speedbag? Bad Liar-Selena Gomez
Jeremiah Widdlestone: NOT--FOR--YOU 911/Mr. Lonely-Tyler The Creator
Damian Riccardo Maradona Reyes: I'll go all day, all week, all year if I gotta, big guy. Just try and stop me. Years Of War-Porter Robinson
Barbara "Babs" Mulaney: One. Deux. Tres. Vier. Fem. Yug. Haft. Aath. Dyev-yat. Dez. Might Tell You Tonight-Scissor Sisters
Zyzzx Rigs: Last of the first, folks. Light me up.You Know You Like It - DJ Snake ft.
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Some Guy Probably: A thing he said? Character Theme: Flyers-Bradio
Alex Darby: Let's weigh what everyone brings to the table, and find a suitable compromise. It's in your best interest. Character theme: Devil's Gift-Shaman's Harvest
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Joined: March 27th, 2015, 4:13 am

January 13th, 2018, 11:41 pm #7

100 edits!?!

But I tried changing it to something like this:

Beryl's lifelong tendency to reflect her peers and readily learn from them may give her an edge in understanding her competitors on island, those that she is familiar with.
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"C'mon! It's just a prank, bro."

- Memories - 1 - Pregame - 1 2 3 4
Unofficial Theme : 'When it's clear to everybody I'm always the last to know.'
Extra art by Mimi! (1)
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Sprite credit to Yugikun (Beryl Mahelona, Gyu-ri Christensen, and Demetri Fustcher) and Fenris (Charelle Chernyshyova, Ramsey Cortez, and Joanne Coleman).
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Character Relationships (no longer updated)
Hero | Swap
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B036 - Dead
(Adopted from Yugikun)
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"And you were the one looking to pick a fight. Don't complain when you don't get the one you want."
- Memories - 1 2 3 4 5 - Pregame - 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 - Sadie Hawkins - 1 2
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"Hope that's good enough."
- Arsenal - Bag of dried chipotle chilies (LOST)
- Island - 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11
- Meanwhile - 1 2
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G047 - Dead
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"It's Tina."
- Memories - 1 - Pregame - 1 - Sadie Hawkins -
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"You're nothing."
- Arsenal - The 'Man Catcher' (LOST)
- Island - 1 2
- Meanwhile - 1
- ??? - 1
Sprite credit to Fenris (Ben Fields) and Yugikun (Tina Luz).
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Mr. Danya
Joined: June 26th, 2011, 8:09 pm

January 13th, 2018, 11:48 pm #8

APPROVED
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G056, Alda Abbate(Adopted)
It was difficult to nail down exactly when the anger started. Remembering a time when it wasn't there, coiled up and waiting to strike or alive and thrashing, was growing more and more challenging. It'd been with her for so long that it no longer felt like an intruder in her mind. It felt like a part of her.
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B062, Garrett Wilde
I multiplied. Then I subtracted. That's what we do now. That's how we keep the most people around.
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B014, Joachim Lovelace(Adopted)
Your turn.
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Abby Floyd:This place was vile. Overwhelmingly, terribly vile. Character Theme: Everything's Alright-Emily Scholz
Ty Yazzie: You ever wonder if you still got a home to go back to? Character Theme: Warrior People-Medicine For The People
Isaac Brea(Adopted from Espi): Isaac's well of fucks was bone-dry. Character Theme: The Whiskey, The Liar, The Thief-Patent Pending
Caedyn Miller:So...how did you wanna do this? Feeling an open casket? Or is that dumb? Nah, don't say it, that's dumb. We'll be soup by the time they send us home anyway. Character Theme: Sleep-My Chemical Romance
Irene Djezari(Adopted from CicadaDays): Death was not worse than Meme Hell. Character Theme: A Beautiful Lie-30 Seconds To Mars

NPCs:
Jacob Brooks: ... Character Theme: 1812 Overture-Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky
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Blaise d'Aramitz: Blonde Hair, Black Lungs-Sorority Noise
Helena 'Hel" Fury: Okay, but riddle me this: where in the rulebook does it say it's not a series of automatic critical hits if I Flurry of Blows an ogre's nutsack like a speedbag? Bad Liar-Selena Gomez
Jeremiah Widdlestone: NOT--FOR--YOU 911/Mr. Lonely-Tyler The Creator
Damian Riccardo Maradona Reyes: I'll go all day, all week, all year if I gotta, big guy. Just try and stop me. Years Of War-Porter Robinson
Barbara "Babs" Mulaney: One. Deux. Tres. Vier. Fem. Yug. Haft. Aath. Dyev-yat. Dez. Might Tell You Tonight-Scissor Sisters
Zyzzx Rigs: Last of the first, folks. Light me up.You Know You Like It - DJ Snake ft.
AlunaGeorge
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Some Guy Probably: A thing he said? Character Theme: Flyers-Bradio
Alex Darby: Let's weigh what everyone brings to the table, and find a suitable compromise. It's in your best interest. Character theme: Devil's Gift-Shaman's Harvest
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Plush Wants To Read Your Dead Things and your Living Things! As of 8/14/2017, the Living Queue is Closed, and the Dead Queue is Open!
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