Name: Rachael Langdon
School: P.J. Hobbs Senior High School
Hobbies and Interests: Writing and reading (especially high fantasy and speculative fiction), sketching (landscapes and building design), music (especially classical and metal), flute playing, law, yoga.
Appearance: Rachael is only about 5'1" tall and weighs around 112 pounds. Her body is slim from yoga. Rachael often chooses more practical and comfortable clothing over anything stylish. She wears overly big sweaters and floor length skirts when it's cold, while in hot weather she will wear loose blouses, t-shirts, and skirts that reach her knees. She prefers to wear sneakers and usually carries her items in a large mail courier bag.
Rachael's skin is blemish free and pale. She has an oval shaped face, a small nose, thin brown eyebrows, and green eyes. She rarely wears makeup unless at a formal event. She has long, chocolate brown hair that falls past her waist and tends to wear it in a braid or ponytail tied with green hair ribbons. She also likes to wear headbands behind her fringe bangs. Her ears are pierced, although she will only wear small studs. Rachael also has notably good and clean teeth, as she was diligent with her oral care young. She currently has braces.
On the day of the trip, Rachael was wearing a light green blouse, a knee length black skirt, and black sneakers, with her hair tied in a braid and decorated with a green headband.
Biography: Rachael Alma Langdon was born May 9th in Falls Church, Virginia. She was the second child of Aaron and Leanna Langdon, their first child being Rachael's sister Bridget, born four years earlier. Aaron was an architect who worked on local high rises and apartment complexes while Leanna was a music teacher at George Mason High School.
Home life was average for young Rachael. Her parents doted on her as the baby of the family, but did not spoil her. She looked up to her big sister, who in turn was very kind to her, although their age difference did mean that Rachael had to accept that Bridget would sometimes rather play with kids her own age. Most of the time, Rachael would only speak if someone first spoke to her. At home, she would endeavor to stay out of the way of her parents and sister and quietly play make-believe or read on her own.
As early as 5th grade, Aaron and Leanna began to worry that Rachael's shyness might have been a sign of some antisocial tendencies. While Rachael had a fine home life, she had trouble adjusting to situations without her parents or sister present. Rachael would often spend her time alone and away from other students, and needed significant teacher prompting to make her do otherwise. She had trouble approaching anyone she didn't know, and there were incidents of her not speaking in group projects and being thus ignored by her peers. A local psychologist they took her to concluded that she had Social Anxiety Disorder, he prescribed the SSRI medication sertraline to help calm the symptoms. Rachael showed significant improvement with the medication, though she remained poorly socialized and awkward despite improved willingness to interact with others. She came to use the medication regularly as she reported no notable side effects.
Rachael's parents continued to try to get her involved in various activities and groups. They saw how much she enjoyed reading and writing, so they signed her up for a writing club at the Mary Riley Styles public library when she was eleven. Rachael flourished in the subject of writing. She had an active imagination cultivated from her long periods spent isolated, and she thus enjoyed writing about fantastic lands and whimsical characters. She would tend to spend her free time working on some writing projects, that she kept to herself or sometimes even showed to her family. The club also helped her make a few friends, as she found it easier to relate to kids with similar interests as her. Aaron and Leanna decided to not get too worried about Rachael's development. They hoped that their support and encouragement would allow her to attempt to get to know more people.
Rachael's social life in school marginally began to improve as well. She was still reputed to be a loner, but she opened up some and more open-minded peers offered her some of their time.. Rachael opened up to her parents more, increasingly sharing her tween musings on daily problems and larger issues such as doubts she had about her abilities and plans for the future. While it was hard for Rachael to admit these things to her parents, she learned to trust her parents and tried to be open with them about anything that bothered her.
Towards the end of eighth grade, Aaron decided to return to his hometown Denton to help care for his then sickly grandparents, and secured new job placements. At the time, Bridget intended to move on to undergraduate studies at the University of Virginia. Aaron, Leanna, and Rachael packed their bags and moved to Denton. The move was difficult for Rachael, who was sad to leave her friends and home behind. It took her a while to get comfortable in Denton, and she was quietly upset and anxious for most of the summer. She took up sketching at this point, to occupy her otherwise free time while she searched for local libraries. Even after she had books to read once more she found sketching to be meditative, though she stuck to people-free scenes as she thoroughly wanted to avoid the prickly business of sketching others and the permissions and consents possibly involved.
She had the fortune to be noticed by one boy in particular, Daniel Whitten, who noticed her reading her first day of classes. He invited her to join and help start out the school’s Book Club. This one event and the social connections it earned her bolstered her confidence. She slowly worked up the courage to also join Creative Writing Club, and a Newspaper class her Sophomore year. It was in these clubs that she found most of her friends, though she was always closest to those she met in Book Club.
Rachael began taking yoga in high school, first introduced by her mother through home tapes. She found she enjoyed being able to exercise and relax in a way that was soothing and also helped build her depressed confidence in her appearance over time. She began to take classes with her mother and at some point, was even able to take them by herself and thus fit them into her own schedule less awkwardly.
Rachael's mother and Daniel also introduced her to a lot of music, as her taste began to solidify in high school. She moved away from generic radio pop and nursed an appreciation for classical and operatic music, with a preference for technically impressive eras such as baroque. That appreciation for music theory rich composition extended to metal, especially symphonic for its evocative nature of her favorite fictional genres. She uses playlists of these genres for workouts, and sometimes for moments in school when she’s more anxious to be by herself.
Nowadays Rachael only gets to see Bridget during summer vacation, when Bridget temporarily comes back home. The two of them are quite close still. However, Bridget tends to spend a good amount of her vacation time interning and doing paralegal at a local law firm while preparing to move on to grad school, so Rachael still has to accept that her sister is quite busy during the break. In her Junior year Rachael got a relatively bold idea, and she acted on it after a few weeks. She shadowed her sister at work so she could spend time with her. In the process Rachael developed an appreciation for law, especially since it allowed her to talk more fluently with her sister. Rachael isn’t especially knowledgeable but she enjoys it for the support it wins her from her sister, and Rachael added laymen’s law books to her to-read lists and took AP government her Senior year, the only non English AP she ever dared try for.
Rachael’s closeness with her parents also caused her to develop an interest in their careers over time. She began to study the things they’d bring home from work, using them to create conversations she could learn from and feel safe exploring her potential interests in. She built models and developed a knack for blueprint sketching from her father, embarrassed as she can sometimes be with mistakes brought on by her inadequate grasp of math. From her mother she studied more theory and started listening to music with a more critical ear and making compositions she’d show Daniel. Both parents encourage her, happy to see her interests growing and expanding as she ages.
Rachael was asked to Junior prom by Daniel, and they had a good time. Afterward Daniel asked her to be his girlfriend, and while Rachael was taken aback at first with a few days she realized Daniel was important to her, a figure as comforting and safe for her as her own family. She accepted, nervous as usual but eager as well. Their relationship is a quiet one, and Rachael has been hesitant to publicize it in anyway, even to close friends. Rachael is at Daniel’s home often and vice versa, and she’s even begun playing the flute that he also plays, curious to explore making music and continue composing with her growing theory knowledge, and happy that she and Daniel share the skill in common and can give each other feedback, amateurish as Rachael’s flute playing is.
Daniel recently encouraged Rachael to take to Tumblr, blogging, and forums to share her writing, and with his encouragement she’s developed an online presence attached to her work. Besides this she lurks, avoidant of expanding her presence in social media beyond what she feels comfortable with.
In class, Rachael is well behaved and tries to be active enough to earn participation credit. When working with others, Rachael tries to be helpful, but is mostly reserved with her own opinion. She mostly avoids targeting from bullies and aggressive folk, for which she is grateful. Outside of school the family doctor recommended Rachael for cognitive therapy because he worries about her long term dependence on her anxiety medications.
Rachael applied to Rutgers University, but she also applied to schools Daniel applied to and has been back and forth on following him, as she's nervous about making their relationship long distance. She hopes to become a novelist, but she has also considered teaching, graphic design, or music. She is on the A-B honor roll, doing well in classes like English and History, while not being as proficient in Science or Math.
Advantages: Rachael is also a very quiet person who rarely attracts attention or notice, which might allow her to fly under the radar. She has a good eye for environmental detail and a strong imagination, which might afford her creative solutions to problems on island.
Disadvantages: Rachael has trouble trusting or working with unfamiliar faces outside of her close circle of friends, something that might be a problem if she tries to ally with those classmates. She’s somewhat passive and dependent and might have difficulty taking matters into her own hands. Rachael also depends on medication for her anxiety issues and a lack of these pills can cause her to suffer withdrawal symptoms such as debilitating body pains and mood issues.
Original Profile: Rachael Langdon
Rachael is temporarily denied pending some minor fixes and attending to a chronology issue.
Rachael's grade is listed, which is superfluous.
In Rachael's hobbies and interests, parentheses should be used to set apart the clarification on the applicable items. There is also mention of the flute here that doesn't come up anywhere else.
Bridget is stated to be four years older than Rachael, which brings up the chronology issue I mentioned. At only four years older, she would just be finishing highschool when the family moved, not her undergrad. This would make sense if Bridget were eight years older instead. However, that brings up a new problem of why Bridget is still in school when a law degree is typically three years.
"Outside of school the family doctor recommended Rachael for cognitive therapy, for the positive benefits and because he worries about long term dependence on her anxiety medications." has an unnecessary comma, and 'positive benefits' is redundant. This should be reworded to something like, "cognitive therapy, in part because he worries..."