[Evaluated]Something Borrowed, Something Blue

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[Evaluated]Something Borrowed, Something Blue

Joined: January 11th, 2015, 12:19 am

May 16th, 2015, 5:39 pm #1

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Kerria and Jigme rushed inside the Pokemon Center, rain had begun to pour outside as they had entered the city leaving both of them completely soaked. Kerria leaned against a wall, holding her chest and breathing heavily as Jigme leaned over with his hands on his knees.

"Well," He panted out, looking up at Kerria. "That was something." Kerria chuckled a bit, nodding her head as little water droplets dripped down her face and back.

"Hello! Welcome to the Pokemon Center!" Called a kind voice, Both Kerria and Jigme looked up to see a woman with light blonde hair smiling and waving at them. She had on a little pink Nurses uniform, her hair was put into 2 little grumpigtails and she stood with her hands crossed in front of her. Her hat had a simple green cross on top and she smiled at the duo.

"Oh, hello!" Kerria called with a smile.

"I'm assuming you're both pokemon trainers, right?" The Nurse spoke, beckoning them forward. "Well, I'm sure your pokemon need to be healed don't they?" Jigme and Kerria looked at each other than back to the woman.

"Well er..." Jigme started. "She's a Pokemon Trainer, I'm still waiting on my license." The Nurse shrugged her shoulders, seeming to not care.

"That's all fine and dandy, but you still have a pokeball and a pokemon that needs a good rest. Come on, bring them up." She said, moving her hands in a beckoning motion. Kerria and Jigme got up, striding over to the woman and taking out their pokeballs. Kerria set the pokeballs of Prince and Yuriko on the counter, Yurikos now covered in little flower stickers, while Jigme set down his pokeball for Kaoru which seemed rather plain looking compared to Kerrias. The nurse took the pokeballs, setting them in the tray that started to glow.

"This may take a little while, so go get all freshened up. I suggest a clean pair of clothes that isn't completely soaked." She said with a smile. "My name is Nurse Baker, but you can call me Josey if you wish. If you don't have any clean clothes with you there is a department store where you can buy pretty much anything right next door. We even put in a little doorway that leads there as a special promotion for them." Kerria remembered seeing the large brick building, it was lit up like a christmas tree and had been playing different hit songs from that year. It could still be heard in the background really.

"Thank you very much, ma'am." Jigme said, snapping Kerria out of her thoughts.

"It's no trouble!" Josey smiled, turning away to get the machine working right. Jigme turned to Kerria who was looking at him with a bit of a spaced out expression.

"Come on, we should get to a shower. I'm sure neither of us smell the greatest and well..." Jigme stopped and wiped a bit of the running black mascara off his friends cheek. "You should probably fix your make up. A lot." Kerria touched her face, realizing that her eyeliner and mascara were practically dripping off her cheeks. God, she wondered how people hadn't been staring! Jigme chuckled, smiling at her and taking her wrist. "Come on, showers this way." Kerria nodded, following Jigme towards the room marked as unisex. She knew it was the only place Jigme felt comfortable in and didn't mind using it with him. Being friends for 10 years would do that to you.

Jigme opened the door casually and smiled, thank Arceus it was empty. Jigme went over to a small locker, putting his stuff away as Kerria set the bag she had been dragging around since she left Cascadia down next to the bench. It too was soaked, so it was more than likely some of the things in there were also soaked. She was just happy she had splurged on that water resistant laptop case. It even came with pockets for her other gadgets!

Jigme sighed, causing Kerria to look over. He had taken off his binder, which was probably very uncomfortable, and let his breasts hang a bit.

"OK, as much as I love this Binder, it is so uncomfortable Ker." Jigme said, looking at her over his shoulder with a smile.

"Hey, you decided on the bottom surgery first. Not me." Kerria giggled, taking off her own clothing.

"Oi, I can complain if I want." Jigme replied with a chuckle. After both were undressed they stepped into the warm water with a sigh of relief. Their muscles relaxed as they washed their hair and as they were ready to step out of the shower Kerria realized something. That something being she forgot her towel.

"Hey Jig, toss me my towel please?" Kerria asked, peeking over the top of the door. Jigme nodded, putting his yellow towel around his shoulders and tossing Kerrias towel to her. Kerri lifted a little hand and caught it, wrapping it around herself as she stepped out of the shower. Jigme stretched a little, drying his hair messily along with the rest of his body. He groaned as he lifted up one breast to dry under it.

"As soon as I get the money, these things are gone. How can you stand to have them?" Jigme asked, looking towards Kerria who gave a simple shrug.

"I like having them sometimes." Kerria mumbled, drying herself off as well.

"Sometimes?" Jigme questioned, not looking back at her as he didn't wish to be rude.

"Yeah...I mean...god how do I explain it..." Kerria mumbled, trying to find the right words.

"You don't feel female?" Jigme questioned, mildly confused. Not because he didn't understand, he just never knew this about his best friend. it was odd as he knew practically everything down to her favorite part of a piece of meat. Which was dark meat by the way.

"Yeah...but I don't feel male either." Kerria said, putting her clothes back on. "I mean, I like girly things but I don't feel like a girl you know?" Jigme nodded, looking back at her once he was sure she was clothed.

"You're talking to a transboy. Trust me, I know." Jigme said, putting his binder back on and slipping a loose t-shirt over his head. "Wanna hit up that department store?"

"Yeah, sounds like a good plan." Kerria responded with a smile., putting the towels and clothes in a dryer in the corner. "That'll probably take a good half an hour to dry, so we have time." Jigme nodded, opening the door.

"Cuties first." Jigme said, Kerria smiled and exited the bathroom. Gender is such a strange thing, even if she didn't fully know hers herself. Maybe there was a term for it or maybe not. She didn't really know. But whatever, time to shop for cute things!

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Character Count: 6,311
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Name: Kerria Althea
Age: 18
Gender: Questioning
Color: #9300C4
Dians: 2,100
Exp: 14
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tBfE9UPTfg8
Pokemon

Prince/Male
#fff
Level 11
Stubborn*Cocky
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TbsBEb1ZxWA
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Growl
5. Quick Attack
8. Wing Attack

Yuriko/Female
#D9E14A
Level 9
Stubborn*Adamant
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FxplhJA-GbE
Item: None
Moveset
1. Absorb
3. Growth
8. Leech Seed

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Name: Jigme Waratah
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Color: #fe0
Dians: 1,000
Exp: 24
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lqCyD6DcCX0
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Kaoru/Male
#CF7100
Level 10
Caring*Lonely
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5y_KJAg8bHI
Item: None
Moveset
1. Growl
1. Tail Whip
5. Bone Club
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Yuuto/Male
#3E4E57
Level 10
Playful*Clever
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lf_l48_fOsg
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Ice Fang (Egg Move)
4. Howl
7. Sand-Attack

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Credit to Bones for making my banners and Sigmatique for my icon! Thank you both so much!
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Joined: January 11th, 2015, 12:19 am

June 6th, 2015, 12:56 am #2

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The duo had been shopping for a bit now, Kerria continuously showing off new outfits to Jigme who would give his opinion on them with a smile. Despite actually not caring, she looked cute to him no matter what. Or er...they looked cute. He wasn't exactly sure and it seemed she wasn't either.

While Kerria was trying on yet another outfit, Jigme heard a commotion from the other side of the store. Curious, he wandered over to see what was going on. He peeked around a rack of clothing, seeing a woman in a black tank top with pretty blonde hair pulled into a small bun. She was skinny but had a rather pronounced rear that made Jigme blush a bit. Behind her was a little Poochyena who was hiding from a pudgy, balding old man in a set of suspenders and a blue and white pinstripe dress shirt.
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"I'm sorry ma'am, but we don't allow pets in our establishment." He said, pointing a foot towards the Poochyena who barked.

"Ugh, I've told you he isn't mine. He just keeps following me around." She scoffed, pushing the poochyena away with her foot. It gave a whine, looking up at her with big, sad eyes. "I wouldn't own some mutt like that." The Poochyena looked as though someone had just thrown a stone at him, whimpering and slowly sulking away. Jigme felt bad for the little thing, it looked like a stray and it was probably just looking for a family. He wrestled with his thoughts for a bit before stepping forward.

"I'm sorry, that's my poochyena." He smiled, walking forward and the poochyena turned, it's ears perked up and it turned happily. Wait, he didn't know that person...oh well! New friend, yay! The Poochyena trotted over to the new person, sitting in front of him with a gleam in his eyes and tongue lolling out of his mouth.

"Oh!" The man said, smiling a tad. "I'm sorry, but you can't have pets in here."

"I know, I'm sorry sir." Jigme replied, his smile polite. "I left him outside but he seemed to have wandered in."

"Oh, understandable." The man said goofily, a jolly smile coming to his slightly red cheeks. "Just take him out please."

"Of course, come on...erm..." Jigme quickly tried to think of a name. "Yuuto." He said, possibly a bit happier than he should've. But the poochyena barked happily, obviously satisfied with the new name and trotted with Jigme out the door and onto the sidewalk. As Jigme stopped outside the store, the poochyena barked happily and looked up at him with a goofy grin.

"So...er...lil pup, whatcha doin here anyways?" Jigme asked, the poochyena yipped happily and pushed against Jigmes leg happily Jigme lifted an eyebrow with confusion as the poochyena circled around him and plopped back down. His tongue lolled out of his mouth goofily. Apparently a common expression for this little pup.

"Do you have a owner little guy?" Jigme asked, the Poochyena shook his head. Jigme smiled a little as the little dog pokemons expression returned with one of his ears half folded as it panted. It was kind of cute really. "So you're a stray huh?" Jigme mumbled, petting the head of the poochyena who gave his hand a happy lick. Jigme chuckled, he was sure the poochyena would need its shots and some grooming, but it certainly was cute. He could own up to 3 pokemon as pets, maybe he could take this little guy along ey? "So um...wanna come with me?" The poochyena hopped up and down happily, standing on its hind legs and yipping with excitement. "Alrighty, I'll call you Yuuto. Mostly because it's what I called you in there."

"Jigme!" Kerria called, running out after him with a few shopping bags in her arms. Jigme turned and smiled.

"Heya Ker! Meet Yuuto." He said with a smile, pointing to the little dog who yipped happily and began to sniff Kerria. "I was thinking of taking him along on our adventures. Sound good?"

Word Count: 680 words
Character Count: 3,754
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Name: Kerria Althea
Age: 18
Gender: Questioning
Color: #9300C4
Dians: 2,100
Exp: 14
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tBfE9UPTfg8
Pokemon

Prince/Male
#fff
Level 11
Stubborn*Cocky
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TbsBEb1ZxWA
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Growl
5. Quick Attack
8. Wing Attack

Yuriko/Female
#D9E14A
Level 9
Stubborn*Adamant
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FxplhJA-GbE
Item: None
Moveset
1. Absorb
3. Growth
8. Leech Seed

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Name: Jigme Waratah
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Color: #fe0
Dians: 1,000
Exp: 24
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lqCyD6DcCX0
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Kaoru/Male
#CF7100
Level 10
Caring*Lonely
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5y_KJAg8bHI
Item: None
Moveset
1. Growl
1. Tail Whip
5. Bone Club
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Yuuto/Male
#3E4E57
Level 10
Playful*Clever
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lf_l48_fOsg
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Ice Fang (Egg Move)
4. Howl
7. Sand-Attack

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Credit to Bones for making my banners and Sigmatique for my icon! Thank you both so much!
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Joined: January 11th, 2015, 12:19 am

June 10th, 2015, 8:09 pm #3

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It had taken very little convincing on Kerrias part when it came to adopting the little Poochyena. She was immediately gaga for the puppy who happily barked as she had approached. A few licks on the cheek and she was practically begging Jigme to keep him.

So now they were at the groomers, getting the filthy pup scrubbed clean and while Kaoru, Prince, and Yuriko all lazed around out of their pokeballs. It had begun to rain outside again as the pokemon barked, chirped, and squeaked amongst themselves.

"[I wonder what kind of pokemon he is...]" Yuriko squeaked, putting a dainty little stub to her chin.

"[How should we know?]" Prince chirped back, "[As long as he isn't some stupid rock type, I could care less.]"

"[Hey!]" Kaoru barked in, a small frown on his little face. Prince rolled his eyes at the Cubone.

"[I said rock type, you're a ground type stupid.]" Prince chirped, seemingly comfortable where he was. They were sitting near the very front of the groomers, the clear glass windows were soaked with the outside rain as trainers and pokemon alike ran around to get shelter from the storm. While Yuriko and Kaoru had been content with simply sitting on the ground, Prince took the only available poke-bed for his own usage. Yuriko scoffed at the bird pokemon, crossing her arms in front of her.

"[Just because we were raised in the wild and you were raised as a spoiled brat doesn't make us stupid.]" She squeaked. "[If anything it just means we know what pokemon to avoid better than you.]"

"[And I know how to groom myself better. You reek of pollen. At least clean yourself up.]" Prince shivered, pushing himself further into the fluffy pink pokebed.

"[Why you littl-]"

"[Hi!]" ...Was that a bark Yuriko just heard?
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In Jigmes arms there rested a small Poochyena, his tail wagging quickly as he looked down at what he considered his new friends.

"[Hi.]" He barked again, his tongue hanging out of his mouth. [I'm Yuuto, Yuuto's the name!]"

"[Yeah...we got that.]" Prince mumbled, looking the dog pokemon up and down.

"[You are a pretty bird. Super duper pretty bird!]" Yuuto commented. He looked at Yuriko and barked again happily. "[And pretty flower! Really pretty flower!]" Yuriko giggled, though it just sounded more like a series of high pitched squeaks.

"[Thank you!]" She squeaked back, at least someone here was nice.

"Alright everyone, this is Yuuto." Jigme said, putting the little Poochyena down for him to sniff around the room. "He'll be joining our team from now on." Kaoru skipped forward, patting Yuuto with the blunt end of his club gently.

"[Hey, hey what's that?]" Yuuto asked, sniffing at the club and giving it an experimental lick. "[Tastes funny, tastes like chalk. Yucky.]" Yuuto shook his head, his ears flopping a tad before he stopped with one ear half folded over.

"[Aaaaw he's so cute!]" Kaoru commented, hugging Yuuto who gave a happy bark.

"[Yes, that is me. I am cute. I don't know what that is but that is me.]" Yuuto panted, giving Kaoru a little lick on the cheek. "[You are friend. I like you friend.]"

"[I like you, too.]" Kaoru said, patting Yuuto on the head gently with one paw. Yuuto barked happily. Prince hopped up from his bed, bouncing to the Poochyena with a suspicious look. Yuuto smiled at Prince, giving him a big lick on the cheek. Prince squawked and immediately began to clean his face. Yuuto then walked up to Jigme and rubbed against his leg as the trainer paid the groomer.

"[I like this human. He is my human. I will share my human, but he is still mine.]" Yuuto yipped, standing on his hind legs and pawing at Jigmes leg. Jigme looked down at Yuuto with a smile, picking him up happily. "[Can we go for a walk? I like walks. Walks are nice. Oh but it's raining. I don't like rain. it's followed by loud boom noises. I don't like the loud boom noises.]"

"[Oh my god, shut up!]" Prince squawked, wiping the last bit of saliva from his cheek. "[Stupid mutt, getting me all slobbery.]" Prince mumbled, shaking his head and hopping onto Kerria's shoulder with a flap of his wings.

"[Aw, I'm sorry pretty starly.]" Yuuto whined, his tail wagging slowly. Prince felt a stab of pain in his heart, oh god he felt bad! Prince played it off, turning his head away.

"[Hmph, whatever.]" He chirped. This adventure was going to be much longer than he originally thought.

Word Count: 764 words
Character Count: 4,306
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Name: Kerria Althea
Age: 18
Gender: Questioning
Color: #9300C4
Dians: 2,100
Exp: 14
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tBfE9UPTfg8
Pokemon

Prince/Male
#fff
Level 11
Stubborn*Cocky
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TbsBEb1ZxWA
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Growl
5. Quick Attack
8. Wing Attack

Yuriko/Female
#D9E14A
Level 9
Stubborn*Adamant
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FxplhJA-GbE
Item: None
Moveset
1. Absorb
3. Growth
8. Leech Seed

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Name: Jigme Waratah
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Color: #fe0
Dians: 1,000
Exp: 24
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lqCyD6DcCX0
Pokemon

Kaoru/Male
#CF7100
Level 10
Caring*Lonely
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5y_KJAg8bHI
Item: None
Moveset
1. Growl
1. Tail Whip
5. Bone Club
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Yuuto/Male
#3E4E57
Level 10
Playful*Clever
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lf_l48_fOsg
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Ice Fang (Egg Move)
4. Howl
7. Sand-Attack

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Joined: January 11th, 2015, 12:19 am

May 6th, 2016, 11:22 pm #4

The rain had finally let up outside the pokecenter, the building now almost empty minus the nurses and occasional trainers. The rest now outside looking at the scenery and staring longingly at the Pokemon League, imagining the day they walk up those steps to meet the legendary elite four.

Kerria and Jigme, however, were doing the exact opposite. They were still in the center packing up their stuff for the journey to Kroy. Kerria taking much longer than Jig, who had been fully packed for about half an hour now as Kerria was squeezing the last pair of shoes into her second suitcase? Jig sat, fiddling the with the pokeball he bought for Yuuto who refused to use it. He looked down at the small dog pokemon, who looked at him with a goofy grin and barked.

"[Adventure!]" Yuuto panted, not moving from his spot on the tiled flooring. With a final huff, Kerria collapsed onto her totally stuffed suitcase. She now had, in total, two suitcases and an over the shoulder tote for all of her stuff. For such a small girl, she sure had a lot of clothes. Jigme smiled and stood up, holding his own suitcase in one hand and slipping the pokeball into his jacket pocket with the other.

"Finally ready?" He asked as Kerria stood herself up, dusting her skirt off and nodding with a bit of a pant.

"Ready!" Kerria said, giving a thumbs up. Prince, who had been sleeping comfortably on a chair a little ways away opened one eye and slowly stood, stretching his wings and legs before flapping into a small glide and landing on Jigmes head to sleep once more.

After waving goodbye to the nurse, Kerria and Jigme headed out to go to the monorail to take them to Kroy. After checking the time multiple times, Kerria mumbled how they would be quite early as they walked. This took Jigme by some surprise, considering how long she had taken. He said nothing though, just continuing to walk with Yuuto happily trotting at his side and Prince sleeping the day away.

After about 15 minutes of walking, Kerria was already complaining about her bags being too heavy. Jigme laughed and gave her an affectionate pat on the head.

"Maybe ya shouldn't have packed so much stuff, huh?" He laughed, Kerria pouting in return and giving a small huff.

"Well, maybe your face shouldn't be so weird." She mumbled, making Jigme laugh even more.

"Oo, ah, I just got burned. I've been roasted. Somebody, spare a burn heal!" Jigme laughed, earning a light shove from Kerria which caused Prince to lose balance for only a moment and glare at his trainer.

Yuuto sniffed the air for a moment, smelling something really good. Churros? Nah, maybe cake? Nu-uh. He sniffed again, ice cream! He dashed forward, Jigme turning his head quickly.

"Ah, Yuuto!" He called, rushing after the pokemon. Prince gave a squawk, leaping from Jigmes head and flapping in the air while chirping angrily.

"Hey, wait for me!" Kerria called, scrambling after them with her suitcases slowing her down a bit. Prince followed Kerria as Yuuto ran, his tongue lolling out of his mouth to an ice cream booth, putting his paws up on the wall and pawing at it while barking.

"[Ice cream! Ice cream! Ice cream!]" He barked, the parlor owner looking down to see the happy mutt who took his paws off the wall and began spinning in happy circles. "[Ice cream? Ice cream!]" He barked, finally sitting down and wagging his tail happily.

Kerria and Jigme finally caught up, now out of breath as the parlor owner was going gaga for the happy puppy before her.

"Ooooh, aren't you a little cutie! Look at you!" She squealed, reaching down to pet the small dog with her gloved hand. Yuuto happily licked her hand, nuzzling into it happily and barking.

"[Nice human! You are nice, give good pets. Can I have ice cream? I want ice cream.]" He barked, Jigme rushed up to the counter with a blush on his face.

"I'm so sorry, he got away from us when we weren't paying attention." Jigme said, picking up Yuuto who squirmed slightly in his grip.

"[No, I want ice cream! Put me down human!]" He barked, gently nibbling on Jigs thumb for a second and kicking his hind legs.

"Oh no, it's totally fine! He's such a cutie." The parlor owner replied, reaching out to pet Yuuto again who stopped nibbling on Jigmes finger and instead looked up with a happy goofy grin, one ear folded over once again.

"[Ice cream?]" Yuuto yipped, Kerria soon followed them both with Prince once again landing on Jigmes head with an angry chirp and curling up once more.

"[Stupid human, don't run like that.]" He quietly chirped, closing his eyes again to try and sleep. Jigme sighed, smiling at the parlor lady once again and setting Yuuto down.

"We're sorry to cause any trouble." Jigme said, Kerria nodding and bowing her head gently.

"Oh, you two are fine. He's very friendly, you trained him very well." She replied, smiling and folding her arms on the counter.

"They didn't train him." A deep voice replied, making both Kerria and Jigme turn around. In front stood a tall and muscular man. He was well tanned with dark hair that curled up at his shoulders. He bore an angry frown, arms crossed in front og him. His eyes were a light brown, almost auburn color with furrowed eyebrows groomed into a line of dots. All pulled together with a thing nose that curved slightly upward. He wore a deep white v-neck that showed off his pecs rather well with a popped up collar. His shirt was tucked into his dark jeans and accented with a black belt. His shoes seemed polished to perfection, the sun glinting off them perfectly as he looked on the two.

Yuuto whimpered and cowered behind Jigme's leg at the sight of the man. This man stood at about the same height as Jigme, intimidating Kerria a bit as well which immediately got Princes attention who snapped his head up with a glare at the man.

"That's my dog." He stated, pointing to Yuuto who was cowering behind Jigme. "His name is Bone. Hand him over." His stance was threatening, despite being the same height as Jigme he seemed to tower over the less built boy. Jigme looked down at Yuuto, who's apparent name was Bone, who looked from the man to Jigme with a whimper.

"[No, he's mean.]" Yuuto whined, shaking his head and pushing himself more behind Jigme.

"From the way he's acting, I'd say he doesn't want to go back." Jigme stated, looking the man straight in the eyes. He got a bad feeling from this bloke, the way Yuuto was acting was strange. Though their time together had been short, he felt he knew the Poochyena well enough to know he wouldn't act this way around strangers without good reason. The mans eyebrows furrowed more, his frown seeming to grow even more intense. With eyes that felt like thunder, he stared back at Jigme who didn't even flinch.

The crowd around them seemed to have fallen silent, all eyes on them now as Kerria stood in the background. As the stare down continued, the mans mouth abruptly turned into a sneer and he scoffed.

"Tch, fine then. If you won't hand him over willingly, maybe you'd rather battle for the stupid mutt." He stated, pointing to the pokeballs on Jigmes waist. "Whoever wins keeps him."

"Why would I take a bet like that?" Jigme questioned, arms folded in front of him.

"Because if you don't, I will be more than happy to pummel you into the ground and take the dog by force." The man replied. Though he hated to admit it, in a real fight there was no way he could take the man in a real fight. He was built much heavier than Jigme, and with the small frame Jigme had it would be near impossible to beat such a heavy set man.

"Fine, if it's a battle you want I'll accept." Jigme replied with a rather annoyed tone. He motioned for Yuuto to run to Kerria, who knelt down to pick up the dog as it ran to her.

In the middle of the crowd, Jigme and the man stood. Glaring at each other with firm expressions. This may be Jigmes first battle, but in his mind he refused to let himself lose.

Word Count: 1,430 words
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Name: Kerria Althea
Age: 18
Gender: Questioning
Color: #9300C4
Dians: 2,100
Exp: 14
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tBfE9UPTfg8
Pokemon

Prince/Male
#fff
Level 11
Stubborn*Cocky
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TbsBEb1ZxWA
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Growl
5. Quick Attack
8. Wing Attack

Yuriko/Female
#D9E14A
Level 9
Stubborn*Adamant
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FxplhJA-GbE
Item: None
Moveset
1. Absorb
3. Growth
8. Leech Seed

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1. ???
1. ???
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Name: Jigme Waratah
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Color: #fe0
Dians: 1,000
Exp: 24
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lqCyD6DcCX0
Pokemon

Kaoru/Male
#CF7100
Level 10
Caring*Lonely
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5y_KJAg8bHI
Item: None
Moveset
1. Growl
1. Tail Whip
5. Bone Club
???

Yuuto/Male
#3E4E57
Level 10
Playful*Clever
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lf_l48_fOsg
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Ice Fang (Egg Move)
4. Howl
7. Sand-Attack

???/???
#??????
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2T0pG8PKhBU
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1. ???
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1. ???
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May 7th, 2016, 1:28 am #5

The stare down continued for what felt like 5 minutes, when in fact it was more close to maybe a minute, before the man grinned and took out a pokeball.

"By the way, the names Keebler. Not like you need to remember it." He stated, before pressing the button on the pokeball and throwing it up in the air. Through the bright light, a chimchar appeared. With a cry she brandished her small claws at Jigme with a confident smirk. Jigme nodded, grabbing hold of the pokeball by his side and throwing it into the air.

Kaoru came out, wielding his club like a sword as he stared the small ape down. The two pokemon glared at eachother before Keebler pointed a finger at the cubone and with a harsh tone said.

"Sticky, scratch." Sticky quickly obliged, running at the cubone before it could dodge and landing a scratch on the chest of the small creature. With a cry it jumped back, stabling itself by putting one paw onto the cement.

"Growl!" Jigme shouted, pointing at Sticky. Cubone gave an angered cry towards the chimchar who cowered for a mere second before looking up at its trainer. Keebler stared at her with a menacing glare, which turned Sticky quickly back to the battle.

"Ember." Keebler said monotonously, Sticky opened her mouth wide and let loose bolts of fire at Kaoru, who managed to dodge a few before being hit in the leg with one. Kaoru yelped, holding his leg for a moment.

"Kaoru, bone club." Jigme stated, Kaoru immediately launched at the Chimchar who attempted to dodge to no avail, instead taking the club in the stomach and being launched back. It seemed like a pretty solid and damaging hit, as the Chimchar seemed to have trouble getting up as if it were unable to move for a second.

"Again." Jigme stated, while Sticky was on the ground Kaoru hit her again, this time landing a solid hit to her back causing Sticky to fall down again.

"Sticky, use scratch!" Keebler cried, but to no avail. Sticky couldn't seem to move.

"Again." Jigme repeated, Kaoru gladly obliged. this time hitting the poor chimchar on the head and knocking it out. Keebler growled angrily, turning Sticky over and pressing the button to let her back in her pokeball.

"Stupid ape." He mumbled, putting the pokeball back onto the clip attached to his belt. "Fine then, c'mon Horus." He stated, pressing the button to reveal a shieldon. It let out a huff through it's nose, staring Kaoru down. "Tackle."

Horus ran straight for Kaoru, hitting him head first with the stone plate on his head. Kaoru yelped and flew back, skidding on the cement and landing on his back before Jigme. He pushed himself back up, not without a bit of a struggle.

"Bone club!" Jigme shouted, Kaoru ran at Horus and managed to smack the pokemon on the side of his head with the club, though it didn't seem to do much.

As Kerria and Yuuto watched, Yuuto gave a small whimper. Horus always had high defense, the highest of all of them. Simply hitting him wouldn't do much like it should. His mind flashed to images of the battles he had with Horus before.
-----
He hit the ground with a whimper, hearing his trainer scoff and feeling a boot land against his side.

"Stupid mutt, you know ice fang is weak against Horus." Keebler growled. Horus lumbered over to his trainers side, giving a menacing side eye to the poochyena who finally managed to stand up and look down at the floor. "If it weren't for that move, I would've left you to rot in that shelter."

Yuuto looked up at his trainer with sad eyes, but the only response he got was a scoff as he walked away.

"You know the rules, you lost. No dinner tonight." Keebler stated, turning his head back for only a moment. "And if I catch you eating out of Sticky's bowl again, you're going back to that pound. Do you understand?"

With a whimper, Yuuto looked back down at the floor. Horus followed his trainer not even once looking back at the beaten Poochyena who soon began to cry.
-----
Yuuto snapped out of the memory, looking back towards the battle as Kaoru landed on the ground after a burst of orange energy hit him in the chest. He was down for the count.

Keebler laughed at Jigme, who quickly went to pick up Kaoru in his arms.

"What a joke, you call that a battle?" Keebler asked, approaching Jigme with a mocking grin. "Now hand over Bone. I'll be taking him with me." Jigme turned his head up towards Keebler, brows furrowed.

"This isn't over yet." Jigme said affirmatively, standing to meet Keebler. "I still have one more pokemon." Keebler raised an eyebrow, chuckling as Jigme put Kaoru back into his pokeball.

"Oh? What is it then? I don't see anymore pokeballs on your hip, boy." He pointed out, sneer still on his face.

"No, you don't." Jigme replied, putting Kaorus pokeball on his hip and approaching Yuuto. He smiled at Kerria before taking the small poochyena and setting him on the ground and kneeling to about his height. "I need your help, and I'm sorry to make you do this. Do you think you can help me defeat him?" Jigme asked, Yuuto stood in front of him for a bit. He was baffled. Him, fight? Those are two things that never went well together.

But as he thought, he thought of all the times Horus had beaten him down. All the times his "trainer" had left him to go hungry. He thought of all the abuse he had gone through. How could he go back to that after this human was so nice to him?

Yuuto then nodded, a determined expression on his face. Jigme nodded, petting the young poochyena behind the ears as a silent thank you before standing. Jigme walked back to where Keebler was, Yuuto following close behind.

Keebler began to laugh, pointing at Yuuto.

"Really? You're getting my own pokemon to fight me?" Keebler laughed, tilting his head back and holding his forehead. "Man, you're more of an idiot than I thought."

Yuuto stood, his stance of a pokemon ready to fight. Horus stared Yuuto down with a menacing glare. A metallic sound rang from his mouth.

"[We may have been friends, but don't expect me to go easy on a traitor.]" Horus stated, eyes colder than a winter night.

"[We were never friends and you know it.]" Yuuto barked in return.

"Yuuto, sand attack." Jigme said, with a quick foot Yuuto managed to kick dirt right into the eyes of Horus who gave a metallic yelp as it shook it's head back forth.

"Tackle, Horus!" Keebler yelled out, Horus quickly obeying and running at Yuuto who managed to swiftly dodge.

"Howl!" Jigme called, Yuuto let out a high pitched howl towards the heavens before letting his head drop back down to look at Horus once more.

"Smack down!" Keebler hollered, a ball of orange energy forming at Horus's mouth as he let loose the attack. Though Yuuto tried to get out of the way, the ball hit him in the rear and caused him to roll back with a yelp. He managed to quickly get up, shaking himself off and growling at Horus.

"Tackle!" Yuuto ran at Horus, managing to his him from the side and knock him back.

"Taunt!" Horus turned its tail, waving it's rear at Yuuto in a mocking manner. He honestly hated this move, so embarrassing.

"Tackle!" Yuuto happily obliged, running towards Horus once more.

"Protect!" Horus gave a metallic cry, a shield appearing around the small pokemon thagt Yuuto bounced off of with a growl. Keebler sneered as the shield disappeared.

"Again!" Yuuto obliged once more, running around Shieldon a few times before slamming into his side. This one seemed to hurt, causing Horus to fly back and land on the ground in a heap. He managed to stand back up after some effort and glared at Yuuto.

"Torment!" Horus gave a loud metallic cry, high pitched enough to make most around them cover their ears to avoid the ear pain that came with it. When the sound finally ended, Jigme growled and pointed towards Horus once more.

"Tackle!" Jigme cried, to no avail. Yuuto was shaking, pawing at it's ears to try and get the ringing sound to go away. "Eh? Yuuto, what's wrong?" Jigme questioned, Keebler now laughing at Jigmes obvious confusion.

"Didn't they teach you about this move in trainer school? Torment doesn't let your pokemon use the same move twice in a row." Keebler laughed, pointing to Yuuto again. "Horus, use smack down!"

Yuuto managed to dodge the ball of orange energy this time, rolling out of the way just in time for it to explode.

"Tch, fine then. Use ice fang!" Yuuto looked back for a split second before hesitantly nodding, running at Horus with a mouth wide open and teeth now frozen over. He bit down hard on the shield pokemon, trying to do as much damage as he could with the move. Critical hit! Though not a very effective one.

"Tackle, Horus!" Keebler ordered, Horus turned his head and roughly pushed Yuuto back onto the ground. Yuuto yelped in pain before standing back up.

"Same for you, Yuuto!" Jigme shouted back, Yuuto pushed his head against Horus, pushing him back with all his might. After this little game of push, Yuuto managed to fling Horus backwards with a triumphant bark.

"One more time, Horus!" Keebler cried out, Horus getting up and running at Yuuto who quickly dodged.

"Ice fang!" Jigme yelled, Yuuto turned and quickly sunk it's icy cold fangs into the leg of Horus who's leg quickly froze over. Though Horus tried to move his leg, it cam to no avail. "Tackle!" Jigme cried, Yuuto obliged with a grin and tackled his opponent to the ground. With a metallic cry, Horus hit the ground and was finally knocked out.

Keebler was shocked, stepping back a tad as he watched Yuuto happily run towards Jigme. Yipping happily as he ran around the trainers legs.

"[I did it! I did it! I don't have to go back!]" Yuuto yipped, Jigme happily picking him up, letting the poochyena lick his cheek. Keebler growled, scoffing and walking towards Horus who looked up at his trainer with a sorry look.

"Useless." He mumbled, Horus gave an extremely hurt look before Keebler pressed the button and called him back into his pokeball. "Fine then." Keebler mumbled, attaching the pokeball back to his hip. "Keep the stupid mutt, maybe you can make use of him." Keebler stated, waving a hand in the air and walking away. "Just don't give him back when you're done with him."

Kerria rushed over, now celebrating with both Yuuto and Jigme. Yuuto yipped happily and licked Kerrias cheek as well. This was the start of a new life. With a family who cared about him and loved him. He nuzzled against his new owners happily, barking and yipping happily. He sniffed the air again, turning towards the ice cream parlor and once again running over to the owner and barking.

"[Ice cream!]" He barked up, Jigme and Kerria looked at him and giggled sighing in defeat.

"I suppose he deserves some ice cream, huh?" Jigme looked at Kerria, who nodded.

"Yeah, just make sure it's pokemon friendly." Kerria stated, they both approached the owner who stopped them as soon as they began to take out their wallets.

"Yknow what, it's on me." She stated, Jigme and Kerria smiled and thanked her. Hopefully the rest of the day would be better, but who was to say what was to come? It's not like there's a narrator of some sort.

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Character Count: 10,959
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Name: Kerria Althea
Age: 18
Gender: Questioning
Color: #9300C4
Dians: 2,100
Exp: 14
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tBfE9UPTfg8
Pokemon

Prince/Male
#fff
Level 11
Stubborn*Cocky
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TbsBEb1ZxWA
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Growl
5. Quick Attack
8. Wing Attack

Yuriko/Female
#D9E14A
Level 9
Stubborn*Adamant
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FxplhJA-GbE
Item: None
Moveset
1. Absorb
3. Growth
8. Leech Seed

???/???
#??????
???*???
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2T0pG8PKhBU
Item: ???
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1. ???
1. ???
1. ???

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#??????
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5XbAj4xMCWA
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1. ???
1. ???
1. ???

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1. ???
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Name: Jigme Waratah
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Color: #fe0
Dians: 1,000
Exp: 24
Last Known Location: Union

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lqCyD6DcCX0
Pokemon

Kaoru/Male
#CF7100
Level 10
Caring*Lonely
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5y_KJAg8bHI
Item: None
Moveset
1. Growl
1. Tail Whip
5. Bone Club
???

Yuuto/Male
#3E4E57
Level 10
Playful*Clever
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lf_l48_fOsg
Item: None
Moveset
1. Tackle
1. Ice Fang (Egg Move)
4. Howl
7. Sand-Attack

???/???
#??????
???*???
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2T0pG8PKhBU
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1. ???
1. ???
1. ???

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1. ???
1. ???
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May 12th, 2016, 8:41 pm #6

Thank you for your patience. Your topic has been evaluated!
RP Notes wrote:
  • "nah m8 we're just here for the lols"
  • So mean!
  • Is it bad I imagined all the Pokemon talking like Lady Rainicorn?
  • Overpacking or underpacking is everyone's problem!
  • Jigme got the sass~
  • "I'm not a trainer" Jigme - Post 1, u lie!
  • nah, he's just brutal
Topic Record wrote:
  • Kerria healed her Pokemon at the Pokemon Center
  • ...To Be Continued!
Topic Evaluation
Kerria
TAT: Making Friends: 3 AP
Silver Tongue: 3 AP
TLC: 5 AP
Nursing: 3 AP
Topic: ~
Evaluation: 6 EXP
Total: 6 EXP
Dians:
906
Bonuses: ~
Penalties: ~
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Hey Nurse! You know how this works, so let's get on!

So first of all, since this is a smaller topic, there's less for me to evaluate, so I don't have a ton to mention, but hopefully this'll still help. So as far as smaller 'in between' topics go, this works pretty well. You seem to write pretty well, and dialogue seems to be where your writing is spot on. The dialogue doesn't sound forced or too formal, which is honestly perfect. Keep that up!

The main thing I think you need to do with your writing, however, is to ensure you 'show and don't tell'. I know we mention it a lot, but it can help boost a topic's reward by a great deal just because it can make a simple sentence sound so much better. For example, in your second post you wrote "Curios, he wandered over" whereas you could show us how he was curious. Maybe he had a narrow facial expression or a curious walk. Just little things like that can make a sentence sound much more exciting, and boost your wordcount a little too!

I think the main thing here that held you back was what happened in the topic. We saw some growth with Jigme, but Kerria was almost the secondary character of this topic. It would have been nice to maybe see some more stuff happen to Kerria. Maybe they could have the topic to think about the whole Gender identity thing you touched upon very briefly? It was just over so quickly and not too much happened. You've always got your next topics to include bigger ideas, though!

Overall, this wasn't a bad topic, it just needed some more substance to it. I can't wait to see what happens next. Enjoy your rewards! ^^
Note: Bonuses/Penalties have already been calculated into your rewards!
This topic has now been concluded. Please submit in a Modification to update your character with your new rewards!
This topic is now closed without further ado.
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Emilie 'Lili' Kaplan


5,717


EXP: 268


Visiting: Tribule Karsts
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Sebastian
Level 20

1. Pound
4. Growl
8. Bubble
11. Water Sport
15. Peck
16. Metal Claw
19. Bubblebeam[/size]
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Ronnie
Level 18

1. Tackle
1. Harden
4. Mud-Slap
8. Headbutt
11. Metal Claw
13. Rock Tomb
16. Protect[/size]


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Magnus
Level 19
1. Tackle
5. Supersonic
7. Thundershock
11. Sonicboom
13. Thunder Wave[/small]
17. Magnet Bomb
19. Spark
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Montgomery
Level 29

1. Confusion
1. Tackle
5. Hypnosis
9. Imprison
11. Confuse Ray
15. Psywave
19. Iron Defense
21. Faint Attack
25. Safeguard
29. Future Sight[/size]
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Rufus
Level 17

1. Endure
1. Foresight
1. Quick Attack
6. Counter
11. Feint
15. Force Palm
Egg. Blaze Kick[/size]

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Level 29

1. Pound
5. Meditate
9. Detect
13. Fake Out
17. DoubleSlap
21. Swift
25. Calm Mind
29. Force Palm
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Elijah Hershel

1,000

Total EXP: 6

Currently Visiting: Clearchime Monastery
Bruce
Level 5

EXP Gauge: (6/8)

1. Tackle
5. Withdraw
Hue
Level 7

EXP Gauge: (13/15)

1. Tackle
1. Confuse Ray
5. Astonish
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