Ugh. I've been lazy. Okay, I'm going to talk about my update schedule in a moment. But for now replies and then a very short update!
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Lol, thx Q. While I love my characters, for some reasons bad things tend to happen to them.
LordQ wrote:Lol, your thoughts on the chapter sound hilariously bloodthirsty. Things should get interesting from here. But damn, I hope your pokemon survive. Would hate to see any single one of them die
tho_freakin_mas wrote:Noooo!!! Not Mr. Silph and Surge!!!!
Oh and just thought I'd point out that Surge 'could' still be alive. Although probably not for long :( but you never actually confirmed he was dead and the fact that you were trying to make a point of the fact he's dead makes me think he might not be.
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- dead. Deaddeadeadeadeadeadeadea.
But yeah, tbh, of all the human deaths in this run, both past and future, his is one of the hardest to write about. Really like him as a character. :=/:
Retskcaj wrote:Heh, I've been waiting on Silph to die for a few chapters now, so that one didn't really surprise me. Surge's death did surprise me however, so props on that one. He seemed a bit sanctimonious when talking to Chris about using up the last of his ammo. If he really hated that guy so much, frying him with Raichu would have made perfect sense, and then he'd have been able to waste at least some of those Rockets.
Oh well, pobody's nerfect and Surge is just as susceptible to moments of passion as anyone else. The writing was good, I was able to follow the flow of battle well and William's having a pretty accurate representation of going into shock. I imagine he'd probably be screaming some, but everybody handles situations like that differently so him standing there staring at his hand doesn't seem odd either.
tl;dr good chapter, well-written, glad to see you back in the saddle again!
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- Sadly, I think everyone saw Mr. Silph's death coming. I didn't do much to hide it, but I figured Surge's death would counter it out.
Sorry Destroyanantor! :ugh: I have the same feelings about Surge. Sadly though, Mr. Silph largely seems to be in Surge's shadow.
WHY?!!?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!!??!??!?!!? (also Mr. Silph :ugh: )
This chapter is a tragedy. holy crap. i wonder who's next.
However, it also provides us with some interesting information:
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- The most revealing part of this chapter was Zapdos's conversatio with Giovanni. i'm becoming more and more convinced that Giovanni is, in fact, Jimmy, and his conversation with Zapdos does nothing but back up that theory.
I agree with LordQ. i hope none of your pokemon die. that would be tragic. Also, strange as this may sound, i hope Jessie makes it out okay.
I do want to say something about the part with Zapdos. I'm worried I wasn't clear enough on this, but the prophecy that Zapdos and Giovanni were talking of is COMPLETELY separate from the prophecy Percy gave William at the Pokemon Tower. More on this prophecy later.
Don't worry NathanS! I do far worse, haha. And yeah, you do see it coming a long time ago, if I remember correctly. Several others did as well, but you may of been the first.
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- In regards to Mr. Silph, called it. Yes I'm that petty. And don't get so down on yourself about being cruel. You only killed Surge. You could have done far, far worse then that. and perhaps you will, guess there's only one to find out.
Glad it took you by surprise; sorry it wasn't a happy surprise though. :=/:
The side Sabrina is truly on will be revealed soon!
lisalo wrote:Well, i believe Sabrina is on the side of good... and thinks Oak isn't (is he really?). After all, he did burn Bill's body. The vivid memories are there to shield him.
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- And you won't see it coming.
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Thank you so much WereleopardLeiri! That's very nice of you to say
WereleopardLeiri wrote:... ... holy cow. what a chapter.
beautifully played out, it really flowed, but... you have taken a whole new level of darkness to the pokemon franchise. I pretty much had my hand on my mouth the whole time. dammit, i was worried, and i'm not normally that easily moved. well done. well done indeed.
Thanks so much Aporia! I'm glad you've enjoyed it, and I'm amazed you took the time to read it all! Hopefully, I'll keep you hooked!
I just spent the better part of two days reading and catching up on this story. You had me pretty much hooked.
I find the way that the bodies are mutilated similar to the movie (didn't get to read the book yet
) Angels and Demons
. And I say that in a good way :D
And you are a very gifted writer. You really know how to make people empathize with your characters. It's very impressive!
As for the recent chapter...
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- I am becoming more and more under the impression that Giovanni isn't working with Jimmy, but that they are in fact the same person.
Sad about Surge though.
Keep up the good work! I will probably have to do some fanart for this in the near future.
As far as your speculations, you will see! someday, lol.
Okay then, update. This is the update I have been waiting for. For a very, very, very long time.
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Chapter Sixty-Nine: Friend or Foe?
The old man ran.
His chest heaved inward and outward with stress that he had not put on his body in decades. His white beard sagged left and right, and tiny drops of sweat appeared on his bald head. Yet he still ran.
He ran through the streets of Saffron City. He ran past buildings taller than an ignorant man could imagine. He ran over perfectly paved concrete. He ran through the mightiest city in Kanto. And it was falling to Team Rocket.
The black helicopters swarmed in the sky, their blades spinning as they floated in the air. Magnetons blasted electrical attacks that shattered windows and set buildings on fire. And though one could not hear it, the Rockets could be seen laughing behind the windows of their transportation.
Zapdos, the legendary bird-Pokémon, was outnumbered. Though many helicopters had exploded, their remains tumbling to the ground, Zapdos would not be able to fend off Team Rocket forever.
And that was why the old man was running. To get help. Help from the only other being whose power could match Zapdos.
He was running to the Saffron Gym. He was running to Sabrina.
Surge was gone.
Raichu watched in horror as his trainer fell forward to the ground, his knees buckling down and then giving away under the dead weight. His eyes, once vibrant with determination and fight, were now empty of all signs of life. They did not close. There was not enough energy in Surges body to close his eyes before he died.
Surge landed on the steel floor face-down. Despite his death, blood still pumped furiously out of the wound on his neck, creating a small puddle around him.
Racihus face was void of emotion. His eyes did not tear up. His face was empty, as though he too had died.
And then, in less then a single second, he leapt through the air, landing on the neck of the Rocket that had ended his trainers life. Hissing with fury and rage, he sent an electrical spark down the neck of the Rocket. The Rocket screamed as the electricity moved down his spine. Raichu snarled, and the electrical pouches on his cheeks sparkled with energy. He sent another attack into the body, and this time the Rocket fell to the ground, dead.
Raichu leapt off the body before it hit the floor, and as he fell to the ground, time seemed to slow down, allowing Raichu to take in everything around him. Surge had once told him that in the heat of battle, something like that would happen to him. With the adrenaline pumping through his brain, he could see everything in a split second.
Tybalt, Williams Charizard, fought furiously with three different Arboks. His claws were coated in blood, and smoke puffed out of his nostrils in random, fanatic bursts.
Desdemona, Williams Butterfree, unleashed her psychic powers on her foes. She brought down Koffing and Wheezing, preventing them from exploding and ending the battle. At the moment, a Psybeam was being blasted from her eyes, and it was on a course to strike down an opposing Wheezing.
Eros, Williams Joleton, was squaring off with a Persian. The cat-like Pokémon hissed and slashed with its sharp, bloody claws. But Jolteon was faring well against his foe - he moved his body from side to side, avoiding the attacks.
Chris and his Jolteon had dragged themselves off to a corner. Edward was too weak to battle on, and Chris was carefully applying pressure to a bleeding wound.
Raichu turned his head to the ground before him, where he was to land. Not three feet in front of his calculated landing spot were five Arboks. Their eyes were filled with greed and excitement as they watched Raichu slowly tumble forward.
The smart, tactful thing for Raichu to do would be to land on his tail. Then, turning it into a spring, Raichu would launch himself backwards, and launch electrical attacks from afar. To do anything else would be a suicide mission.
Raichu landed on his tail, and then sprung forward. He jumped into the five Arboks, his cheeks almost exploding with electricity and power. He jumped into the five Arboks, his eyes glazed with rage. He jumped into the five Arboks, knowing exactly what he was doing.
It was a suicide mission.
Listen to me! Giovanni screamed into a walkie-talkie. I need backup in the skies Zapdos is bringing down my helicopters left and right, dammit!
The pain was still there in Williams hand. But he was slowly blocking it out. He stood up, biting down on his lip. The pain didnt matter. He had lost a finger but that was nothing. If he didnt act now, he would lose his life.
Fleance, Williams Nidoking was wrestling on the ground with Giovannis Nidoqueen. Brabantio, the Venasaur, screeched in pain as the Persian dug its claws into his back. And Virgilia could not strike the Arbok with his water-attacks. The snake Pokémon was too quick, and it was slowly advancing onto the Blastoise
Fleance, William said, his voice weak, use your tail! Brabantio, flip over, and Virgilia, body slam!
Fleance, wrapped his tail around and hit Nidoqueen over the head with it. The Pokémon was temporarily dazed, giving Fleance his chance. He poured all his weight into the next movement, forcing Nidoqueen beneath him. He raised his fist in the air, and punched Giovannis Pokémon directly in the face.
Brabantio leapt in the air, and then fell back onto his back, literally squashing the Persian beneath his weight. The cat-Pokémon let out one desperate shriek before dying.
The Venusaur struggled back to his feet, flipping back over. The flower on Brabantios back was covered in blood, a mix of his own and the Persians. But, he fell to his belly. Flipping over had damaged him as well, and William had no choice but to recall his Pokémon back to his Pokéball.
Virgilia jumped high in the air, and then came crashing down on the ground. Arbok slithered out of the way at the last second, barely avoiding the attack. The Blastoise landed on the ground with a heavy thud! Virgilia struggled to move from the position, but she had made an indent in the ground, and was now stuck. Arbok smiled as it slithered forward and-
Water Gun! William commanded out of desperation. His eyes flashed between Fleance, who was still wrestling with Nidoqueen, and Virgilia.
Jessie stood behind her Arbok. She had not uttered a single battle cry or command yet. She stayed still, watching the battle unfold before her with wide, unflinching eyes.
Virgilia aimed, and fired. This time, the blast of water hit the Arbok straight on, and the snake was sent into the wall behind it.
But, Virgilia had two cannons. Not one.
The other blast of water struck Jessie. She too went blasting backwards into the wall, where she fell to the ground. She leaned against the wall, breathing heavily, her body weak from the impact.
William looked at her in surprise. A puddle of red had surrounded her, and for a second it seemed to be blood.
But the red puddle was not blood. The red dye had washed out of her hair, revealing her true hair color to be a pretty blond. Her wet, stringy hair was draped down in front of her eyes.
Jessie slowly raised her eyes up to look at William. As she did so, a trembling hand brushed the hair out of her eyes.
William did not move. He did not breath. He did not think.
All the pieces fell to place in his mind, and suddenly, everything made perfect sense. Because William was no longer looking at Jessie of Team Rocket.
He was looking at Val.
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WARNING. If you have not read the chapter yet, then do not read this.
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Yes. Yes. Yes. Yes. Yes. Yes.
Destroyanator gets full credit for discovering it way back when the whole Silph Co. thing first started. I'm hoping a few of you missed his post and didn't figure it out yet and are now surprised. But, either way, I am largely proud of this.
Here is my story of Val.
Val was introduced in Chapter Seven. At the time, she was not this. She was just a character with a singular purpose: introduce Brock and Chris's accidental kill of Brock's Pokemon. That was it. That was all. But after I wrote the chapter, I realized I liked Val. I wanted more of Val. I wanted her to stay.
Upon reading back over the chapter before writing chapter 8, I recognized something. I read this particular line: "Her hair was blonde, with red strands through it."
And her entire story blossomed before my mind in a second. She was Jessie, working for Team Rocket, in disguise. She was also the daughter of Mr. Silph. She was also the love interest. Val quickly became a major character, and I wrote her into CHapter 8, and made plans to leave a carefully disguised trail of clues.
Being both Jessie and the daughter of Mr. Silph was a nice cover-up, imo. I figured someone might figure one out, but I did not think they would figure both out. It was, as one might say, leading on a false trail. So, though I was found out just chapters before my glory, I am still very proud of the development with Val and Jessie.
I have been waiting to write and update this chapter for 60 chapters now. To me, this was a game. The goal, is not to get found out. This time, I was found out. Next time, I won't be.
This was my personal favorite plot twist of the run. There are quite a few more big ones, so don't worry. But this was probably my favorite. I learned a lot from this plot twist. Most importantly, I learned about leaving false trails.
I have something big in plan for my next run. After I finish this run, (more on when that will actually be happening in a second), I will start the sequel. And I gave a new favorite plot twist in that run. Once more, it will be like a game. And this time, I will not lose.
Now. Update Schedule. High School and Graduation is done. Orientation for College next year is done. All I got left to do this summer is work and this. And a few other things. But not much.
I will update again on Friday. After that, I will update once every friday, AT LEAST. If I get angry and don't, you hereby have permission to send me hate mail. Yes, PLEASE SEND ME HATE MAIL IF I GET LAZY. You can do it annon through my tumblr if you like: http://www.tumblr.com/tumblelog/newspaperreporter
That's all for now. See you all on Friday.