Omy; Kite Is Finally Applying For...

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Omy; Kite Is Finally Applying For...

Cyder
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20 Feb 2011, 01:31 #1

her own pet o.o


Yes, I am pretending to apply for Qroww to hurry up my coding/art/writing for him. Because I am absolutely bored of assignments and have decided my "work on pets" hiatus has gone on long enough x)


So here is his ppage: HEREHEREHERE

I've got the header up and tabley-thing and basic codes. Please suggest some improvements if you have the time ;-; I'm wondering if I should center the table more, or keep it on the left?


Story basically goes: Fae hate humans/mortals, mortals hate fae. Crow is half-fae, so the fae killed him mawm (;-;) and then locked him in some lab to try figure out wth he was. The humans looted the fae labs after a coupla years, thought Crow was human shoved him into the King's army.
Later, Crow quits army and leaves to start a rebellion to overthrow the King... because he doesn't like how the guy was treating the fae x) & also because Crow reckons he can do a better job himself o.o

Yes, yes, cliche (then again, what isn't?), but I'm trying to write it nicely to make up for it~ about half done. I'll post up some stoofs as I finish. Yay~


Oh, and tips for header? I couldn't seem to draw his upper body because it looked weird. Does it look okay with just the head and hand coming out of the shadows? o.o


ANY CRITIQUE WILL BE LUFFLY ;-; but be nice, as I haven't done this kinda thing before x)

Edit; fixed a bit of coding~

Edit2; centered text~
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Vynuxys
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24 Feb 2011, 14:00 #2

I love applications for pets people already own 8D Idk why

anyway

the layout is great, it creates a nice atmosphere, the header is definitely well done. I like the coding the way it is now, and also the colour theme. It suits his design somehow. I think if you moved the table directly to the middle though, it would look even better.

If I may, as a fellow artist, I'd like to point out a few things in the image at the bottom. If you could fix a few minor things, I think you could improve it greatly: I think the ear is a bit too big and thick, at least compared to his head size, so making it smaller would be great. I would make his eye smaller (again, it seems really big on his rather small face, and the position is awkward), and move it downards and a bit more forward. Also, his jeans - they end as simple lines, which isn't realistic. The right one (or the left one from our point of view) should have a round inside visible, going behind his foot.

if that makes any sense

probably not, oops. I can redline it if you don't know what I mean XD Also, i'd make the neck a bit thicker c:

okay, i'm done now! well done so far c: personally i lack the motivation to work on my pets, i go on really rarely now & they're all crying ;o; ahh, gotta do something soon haha. good luck working on your guy :3
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Cyder
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25 Feb 2011, 08:23 #3

Vynuxys @ Feb 25 2011, 12:00 AM wrote: I love applications for pets people already own 8D Idk why

anyway

the layout is great, it creates a nice atmosphere, the header is definitely well done. I like the coding the way it is now, and also the colour theme. It suits his design somehow. I think if you moved the table directly to the middle though, it would look even better.

If I may, as a fellow artist, I'd like to point out a few things in the image at the bottom. If you could fix a few minor things, I think you could improve it greatly: I think the ear is a bit too big and thick, at least compared to his head size, so making it smaller would be great. I would make his eye smaller (again, it seems really big on his rather small face, and the position is awkward), and move it downards and a bit more forward. Also, his jeans - they end as simple lines, which isn't realistic. The right one (or the left one from our point of view) should have a round inside visible, going behind his foot.

if that makes any sense

probably not, oops. I can redline it if you don't know what I mean XD Also, i'd make the neck a bit thicker c:

okay, i'm done now! well done so far c: personally i lack the motivation to work on my pets, i go on really rarely now & they're all crying ;o; ahh, gotta do something soon haha. good luck working on your guy :3
I think I know what you mean about the ear/eye~ The eye I fixed on an updated version, and now that you mention it indeed I think the ear should be smaller too~

& dw, I see what your talking about with the jeans C:


Thanks vurry much btw~ :*
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Vynuxys
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25 Feb 2011, 10:41 #4

Not at all, glad I could be of help :3 I'll check back sometime soon to see if you added any updates n__n
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Cyder
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21 Aug 2011, 11:46 #5

Ch'yeah guys~ YOU ALL THOUGH I DIED 8D

But no~

I was secretly working on this!

Ehehehh, actually, yeah, I died, and then I found some time =D

So yeah; posted up chapter one of Qroww's story C:

Next up, I'm hoping to write a bit of historical context, like some stuff about landscape, more about war, link to some of the chars, etc.
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