Don't Pull Me Down....

Don't Pull Me Down....

JD
JD

April 19th, 2012, 10:15 pm #1

Why do these people want to hold me back?
Is it because i worked hard and sold a track?
Landed a writing deal so now i fold a stack,
Rolling fat, some people are cold and whack!
Adults act like kids! never to old for a smack!
I told you id attack even if iv got shit to lose!
I bet you think all i say is just a skit to you's...
If i was gang inclined id put hits on crews, But..
Till there's cause for "alarm" ill sit on "snooze",
Keep hating my success! i wont quit on music,
Unlike most of you.. i do give a shit if i lose it!
I couldn't handle it! it turns my dull days sunny,
I'd be lying if i said i wasn't in it for the money,
Its like sayin ya not into "playboy" for the "bunny"
You best listen to what i say boy this ain't funny,
Music is my life! but its also a paying job dummy!


JD 2012
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kriza
kriza

April 28th, 2012, 7:52 am #2

take time on posts. keys are for brainstorming or to get sick lines from for other post. nothing major to point out. seemed thrown together.

liked this line tho

Keep hating my success! i wont quit on music,
Unlike most of you.. i do give a shit if i lose it!

work on your multi syllables and flow.
its just to basic. rhyme a couple words together.

keep writing
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Grand Dezine (Kontruversal) tha Nuklius
Grand Dezine (Kontruversal) tha Nuklius

April 28th, 2012, 8:43 pm #3

Why do these people want to hold me back?
Is it because i worked hard and sold a track?
Landed a writing deal so now i fold a stack,
Rolling fat, some people are cold and whack!
Adults act like kids! never to old for a smack!
I told you id attack even if iv got shit to lose!
I bet you think all i say is just a skit to you's...
If i was gang inclined id put hits on crews, But..
Till there's cause for "alarm" ill sit on "snooze",
Keep hating my success! i wont quit on music,
Unlike most of you.. i do give a shit if i lose it!
I couldn't handle it! it turns my dull days sunny,
I'd be lying if i said i wasn't in it for the money,
Its like sayin ya not into "playboy" for the "bunny"
You best listen to what i say boy this ain't funny,
Music is my life! but its also a paying job dummy!


JD 2012
wasnt feelin this one homie. Like kriz said just seems thrown together like you justed to post a quick key. You a songwriter so I expect better from you.
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